Hello again!

They are perfect!!!!! 10/10 So excited for the dicks if ever

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>>2387166
Thank you so much!

Also posting some secondary characters.

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And here's the colored one. I hired an artist for coloring sprites/CGs. I was aiming for the coloring like in No Thank You!!! as I really admire it. Eyes are a bit lifeless, but we're going to work on them.

>>2387164
#Daddy

>>2387164
daddy soichiro looks great. good job senpai.

I just got a nosebleed>>2387170
this is great damn

https://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=732577591

Woah! Now they look great! Characters are very handsome and hot !

>Just sucking his dick instead of giving him constructive feedback
This is why most BL VNs are shit.

>>2387162
Ok there are noticeable improvements. I can sit here and nit pick every single thing but I don't want to critique every technical thing until we hit the point of diminishing returns.

I will say though that their poses are very.... bland. They are just alternating configuration of hands on hips, crossed arms, hands on head/face. They say nothing about their personalities and what set them apart from one another.

>>2387169 On the other hand, the poses on your secondary characters gives hints of who they are. Lady looks meticulous and uptight, Short guy seems like he's trying to look imposing despite his size, Butler is a butler, and Girl looks waif and gentle (although hand on your shoulder is a self-comforting gesture that is very played out imho).

It's very refreshing to see someone comeback though and try to improve themselves.

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I'm going to drop some of my favorite backgrounds here too. I hope it's all right.

>>2387210
Haha, I'm not sure how I feel about it. But I guess many people are going to call him that, so I may as well get used to it.

>>2387333
Thank you, I'm glad you like him! Still getting used to it...

>>2387340
I chose this artist because I can't get enough of her coloring. It's great that you like it as well.

>>2387409
Thank you for posting a link to the game.

>>2387410
Glad to hear it, thank you!

>>2387508
Are you talking about Japanese or Western BL vns? I assume it's the latter, but I want to make sure. Have any of the Western devs come here asking for advice?

>>2387524
This is very helpful, thank you! I haven't thought of varying the poses more. You're right, when you look at the secondary characters, you can guess what they're going to be like. I guess the reason is that the secondary characters have less traits, so I subconsciously drew them doing the thing that defines them. Main guys are more complicated, which of course doesn't mean they shouldn't have distinctive poses. Once again, thank you for the useful hint!

>>2387163

>>2387162
I really like the improvements on all of them, but these two are just 10/10

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I've been thinking about what my backers want and decided that I'll try to make MC top and bottom with every guy. I'd appreciate feedback on Haru x Soichiro.

>>2388688
Thank you! I'm extremely happy that I managed to improve.

>>2387163
FLESH POCKET

>>2389914
Oh, yeah, my friends were laughing at this one too.

Nice to see you again OP, I'm glad your project is making progress and I wish you more success in the future with your game!
You have definitely improved a LOT with anatomy and I am thankful that you took the time to get better with that, they do look better! Something I still notice though is that the faces' expressions still don't seem expressive enough. That may be an intentional thing depending on each character's personality, but I feel like the expressions can be a tad more expressive. Lift the eyebrows more, have the mouths change sizes and shapes, have the pupils be different sizes an positions, etc. I know you only showed previews and cant show everything, but it's good to keep it in mind.

>>2387170
This shading is absolutely gorgeous and the artist did a great job of shading in the intended style you wanted. Just be sure to tell them not to shade muscles like a doll. This looks like those kinds of flat-looking abs that might get copy pasted onto all the guys. Tell them to study up on different body types and how abs work so they don't look so flat.

>>2389910
Omg thank you so much. I know it's alot to ask but the ability to choose basically convinced me to play your game.

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I'm back with Haru x Kanae.

>>2390083
Thank you for the feedback! I'll try to make their expressions more diverse. And yeah, my artist is pretty new at coloring humans, but she's learning fast.

>>2390188
Happy to hear it. The game will be long anyway, so inserting a couple more scenes is no trouble. It will be a nice challenge to write Haru topping.

>>2387162
How are you actually going to make the game? What program are you going to use? I've always been curious about how these games are made.

>>2391348
On the right, that is a veeeeeeeeery long arm. And Kanae's head is pretty small in proportion to his body. It looks like you've been studying anatomy pretty well, I can tell by the way you draw the bodies. But next on your to-do list should be studying proportions and angles. Drawing angles is very tough but if you wanna draw porn, you gotta look at porn (and regular body references of course)

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Back with Haru x Shinya.

>>2391350
Sorry for the late response! I used Fungus in Unity to make the demo. Now I'm planning to switch to Ren'py since some functions like saving or text speed will be much easier to implement there, and I want to learn how to program everything myself. Still, I've been thinking of hiring someone just to put the text, sprites and music together. It's easy work but requires a lot of time. After all, the game will have above 100k words.

>>2391355
Thank you for the feedback and the tips. I shortened the arm a bit and left it for now. I'll come back to the CGs after a couple of days and reassess them. And yeah, I have a huge 3d porn folder now. It was a treat searching for this stuff with my boyfriend looking over my shoulder.

>>2392297
if you don't mind explaining, why ren'py in particular?
first time seeing this btw, and i'm really impressed, both by the content and the way you're handling your customer base already.

>>2392488
Sure. Ren'py has all the needed documentation and clear instructions how to make the necessary game functions like saving, text speed or CG gallery. Also, this engine was created for making visual novels while Fungus is for games generally. Their tutorials are a bit lacking as far as the things I need are considered. Finally, I had some problems with Unity. It often froze my system when I was working all day and wanted to exit. I was never sure if it actually saved my progress. Also, some players had problems with the demo, e.g. saving didn't work, there were strange blocks/artefacts or the MAC version didn't work (this one was very common). Overall, there are many visual novels made in Ren'py that work perfectly, so I figured it's a safer engine.
And thank you, I always try to learn from the feedback. When I first came here and you told me that the characters look stupid or badly proportioned, I admit, I was hurt. But I also thought, on a rational level, that you meant well and that they probably did look bad. And you were right. I see it now. I'm very happy that the characters are acceptable to you now, even if they still need a bit of work. It means that I truly improved, and making a high quality game is most important to me.

nice work! I don't have any constructive criticism that hasn't already been said. Love the before and afters, it made them so much hotter! The before looked sort of like out of style looking Manga from 00s.

>>2393011
thanks, that clears it up; i wasn't aware it was only engines you were looking at.
the ability to accept and work with feedback, particularly negative feedback, is one of the most important things whenever you're creating something imo. like i said before, i'm really impressed.

>>2387162
Oh damn I remember that old tread
>>2389910
>I've been thinking about what my backers want and decided that I'll try to make MC top and bottom with every guy. I'd appreciate feedback on Haru x Soichiro.
Thats pretty ambitious doing both. that said smaller guys topping lager ones is my fetish and the new designs look nice. Very good chance i might go for it when it comes out. Good luck with your project!

The main chars look sorta OK I guess.. A lot of anatomy issues but it is a BL game I suppose so I know few overcome this.. The faces all look p bland though.. I know a lot of anime style tends to have same face syndrome but here these chars even have the same expressions that make them kinda uninteresting, particularly in those sex panels and the extra chars pic.. Nothing in these images feels that rewarding to look at

It might be worth hiring an artist to help with the sprites to make them really stand out and look a bit more professional

>>2393013
Thank you, it makes me very happy!

>>2393015
No problem. And yeah, it's difficult to deal with criticism but rewarding at the end.

>>2393041
Thank you. I hope you'll find time to play it.

>>2393109
Thank you for the feedback. Do you have any artists you'd recommend? I've been looking through Deviantart, messaged a bunch of artists for a coloring job, but found none I'd feel comfortable hiring to draw my characters.

Hey OP, I was an original backer and continue to appreciate you seeking open and honest feedback from others. I lost track of the original forums for the game to keep up on it. Do you have a link for backer forums with more content like the sketches you posted?

>>2393198
Certainly! https://forum.sentimentaltrickster.com/
There's a hidden sub-forum for backers who pledged $30 or more, so if you pledged this much and wish to access it, you'll need to register.

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Posting some characters. I know, it's not porn, but hopefully colored CGs will come soon.

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My friends advised me to change the butler's haircut. I think I like it a bit better now.

>>2387162
Wow. Stumbled onto this and I'm genuinely impressed. Good luck
>>2387164
Love this angel.

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Time to post some CG linearts.

>>2399117
Thank you!

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>>2401484

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>>2401485

When I first saw the art for this game back in the day I didnt really like it that much.. But now? ITS SO GOOD NOW <3

>>2401485
That guy's head looks rather....odd. His jaw and ear should be further back closer to his neck. His head looks small in proportion to the rest of his body.

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Posting some new CGs. This one is not BL, but they'll be pretty important characters. I'll post them just this once.

>>2401490
Thank you! Comments like yours make me especially happy because I know then that my efforts haven't gone to waste.

>>2401679
Thank you for pointing it out. I made his jaw wider and closer to the neck. After looking at the reference photos, it was obvious, but sometimes I miss things. I'm glad I posted the picture here.

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>>2403593

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>>2403594

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>>2403595

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>>2403597

>>2403593
> posting girls on /y/
> but it's only once

Don't.

>>2403605
Oh piss off it pertains to the project.

>>2403595
the guy on the right is really starting to grow on me, can't wait to see him coloured in

>>2403619
> hur durr I can break the rules to shill my game

>>2403629
not that anon, but it's a thread <i>about his game</i>. he's not spamming a regular thread with tits.
pretend they have dicks, if it bothers you that much.

>>2403963
oh god, go away newfag.

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>>2387169
Original butler was best butler

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Hello, I'm posting the newest CG. I'd appreciate feedback on Kanae (the guy on the right). His face always gives me trouble. I wonder if I could improve it somehow.

>>2403605
>>2403619
>>2403629
>>2403963
It's a part of the project, but still, sorry to those of you who felt bothered by them. I can't erase them, but, as I promised, I won't post this CG again.
To those of you who defended the girls, thank you!

>>2403621
I'm glad to hear it. My artist will probably color his sprites soon. I'll post them here if the thread still lives by then.

>>2404082
It's so cool to see a fanart of my own character, thank you! I love him. And yeah, people will probably be divided about his hair.

Where and when can I buy this?

How do you get such nice clean lines OP?

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>>2406664
The game will be released on Steam and itch.io. Possibly on MangaGamer as well. It'll come out before the end of 2017.

>>2406665
I'm not sure I know how to add you.

>>2406718
I use a regular round Photoshop brush with Shape Dynamics turned on. I never erase parts of lines to make them slimmer. But sometimes it takes even 20 tries to get one line exactly right. I also don't have any fancy equipment; I use a 10-year-old Wacom Bamboo tablet. I guess it's practice. I don't feel that comfortable coloring, so I usually just do linework. I have hundreds of manga pages drawn on regular paper in pencil. I used to spend all days just making up stories and drawing.

>>2408398
>Those beautiful clean lines on fucking PHOTOSHOP.

Are....are you even human.....????

Also if you're looking for a better digital program for drawing/painting, I would recommend Clip Studio Paint. They have a sale going on where you can get it for only 15 bucks and it's really worth it.

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>>2408505
Haha, I didn't even know Photoshop was bad for linework. I bought it a couple of years ago because I had like 70% discount as an academic teacher. Been using it ever since.

Thanks for the tip. This program looks interesting, and they even have a nice contest now. I'll try it out.