/crit/ - Critique General

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Just made this as layout and type-hierarchy practice. It feels quite bottom heavy, but that doesn't look too bad imho.

Am I wrong? Is it horrific? Anything else shitty about it?

Cool. Make the (old blue last) smaller and make sure the rest of that text is the same space away from (mogwai)

made in ps. Right. Best to make the type in InDesign, crate outlines, then copy it in as a smart object

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>>303152
thoughts?

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Re-did an old poster for an old event, trying to get better at negative space and general lay out.
>>303154
Lol I've done some posters (for mates) for events at the Old Blue before too.

>>303165
tiny thing but don't capitalise the o in On in the bottom right.

>>303161
Why does it look so blocky at the Join between the H and the R?

Good overall though.

>>303169

So lower case for the whole "On The Corner" bit?

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>>303171
Better?

>>303161
delicious mark, but humanist typeface (frutiger?) clashes a bit w/ the very 'geometric' mark.

a medium futura / DIN would look at home there

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>>303155
Did that, actually looked way better, thanks for the feedback mate. Tried something drastically different too.

>>303165
Love me some tOBL lad. I'm digging your poster, awesome layout and dope colour scheme. Two easy fixes to things that I think are taking away from it atm are

- OK Electro looks really tightly tracked compared to the other acts
- "On The Corner..." looks squashed

>>303179
Thank you m8. You've got a good eye for spotting those things, OK ELECTRO is actually in a different font (A different member of the Futura family) for a reason that I've forgotten and the 'On the Corner' was squashed to make it fit in the bottom right. Will change those up.

I like your first Poster more, really like the serif. Personally If i were to make changes I wouldn't italicize the gig info and would make it smaller and put it in the corner. This might be a bit extreme but If i were using that image I'd probably even manipulate it and remove the bottom right 'Marshall' as I find it distracting. But that's just me ;^)

Can't repost so I'm just gonna link:

>>303198

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Have to design a magazine spread for work as an exercise but I suck at it. Please help by giving critique? Posting 3 drafts.

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>>303263
Second draft

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>>303264
Third draft

There have to be at least 600 words (hence the struggle with space)

>>303263
>>303264
>>303266
1st looks the most professional - except for the cutout job of hair/text
3rd looks like dogshit

>>303263
Second draft by far.
First draft is okay but it looks very dated, as if it was in a issue of Metal Hammer in 2001.

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Custom Icons using Illustrator and Photoshop. Supposed to represent various forms of AI and Data

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Rationale animation for a logomark I worked on.

>>303310
Looks cool, what does 'rationale' mean in this case?

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>>303329
How I arrived at the shape of the mark from a visual standpoint, i.e. rectangle cut out of a PCB board at the place where the circuits form an abstract W.

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This isn't my work, but I wanted to get some opinions from actual graphic design anons.

Pic related is 6 cards from a game called Magic the Gathering. The cards on the bottom are normal cards. The cards on top are super-secret-special-awesome variant cards.

Could I get your thoughts on the design of the variant cards? Do any of them strike you as poor design?

>>303350
top left and top middle are cool. Doesn't the top left one already exist? I think I've seen them before, maybe I even own one. Top right is a nono

>>303356
All except for the top right already exist, that one will be released soon.

>Top right is a nono
Anything in particular?

>>303263
>>303264
>>303266

Honestly, these are way too boring. I respect that readability is a concern, but you're designing about system of a down and Gogol Bordello. None of these spreads echo their attitudes or music at all. Look beyond the scope of metal magazines or even conventional magazines completely. Metal magazines have unfortunately never been well designed.

Look up David Carson and Raygun for something that matches their mood. If you'd like it cleaner, look up Zembla, iDN magazine, eye magazine, baseline magazine, i-D magazine. At the very least put '*magazine name* spreads' on Google or creative editorial on pintrest. If you absolutely must have standard, no thrills editorial, look at spreads from wired and be selective. Not everything in that magazine is golden, but it is, for the most part, well laid out.

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i created this logo for 2 days and a half for my company. i need to sleep so bad
thought?

>>303361
Needs more pop

>>303350
Bottom 3 cards all look fine. Their design is plain and it's immediately obvious they're not meant to be super special rape-your-face cards. The leftmost on the bottom row might be the exception, I don't know if the orange and blue contrast implies if it's special (or if it's because the card has a certain effect, like all cards of that category have orange and blue gradients.)
On the top row, the left and middle cards both look fine. Arguably middle is better designed than left if you ask me, because the colors mix well and the description box extends all the way down.

The top right card is horrible though. The font is ugly, the rims on the card take up WAY too much space, the text is displayed in the center while on every other card it aligns to the right side of the card.
The background is also brown and the text on it is a darker shade of brown, while on all other cards the black and white contrast makes it easy to read the text.
In general the top right card is horrible because it's WAY too stylized. It looks like a shitty Chinese clone of a Pokemon card.

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>>303306

I agree with you on the cube, but it's super small - and the client hasn't said anything (had less than 6 hours - definitely a rush job).

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Cover art for a board game I'm designing.

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Here's my resume (with obvious info withheld). Gonna start prepping my portfolio in the following weeks.

>>303502
too much unnecessary info
get rid of those little icons
too hard to read
stick with black type on white paper. get rid of the grey

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Looking for critque

>>303525
Its a Bioshock poster if anyone wasn't aware

>>303502

Type is too tight in your "experience" details. Increase the leading, decrease the kerning.

Get rid of all hyphenation (left column.)

>>303161
Looks great imo, but the font at the bottom is a bit too blocky for my liking. Still otherwise I think it looks great.

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This is a logo i made a while back for a heating app

>>303350
i dont like that top left move the card type bar down, when im flipping through the deck i want to keep my eyes in the same place so i can quickly know what typer or cost or whatever the card has.

Top middle looks fine, its just a fancy border on the same basic layout as the normal ones - a bit of flair to make it stand out.

Top right is horrible, i cant even read the title (something that is important in some cases where the players need to be able to name a card), same with the card types and P/T. Also, why is the description centered? it takes two lines to just write the effects (compare to the inline on basic ones).

>>303525
Pretty good, isnt this a trace or copy tho? i remember seeing something really similar a while back.Oh and is that blood "blood001_splatter.png" ?

>>303548
I think there are similar posters like this, the mask I traced from an ingame asset but without the missing ear.

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Freelance logo for someone else.

>>303573
what is it, and what's the reasoning behind it

>>303573
upside down bowl cut

It looks like shit mate

>>303154
Change the doors and tickets size to much smaller to create more hierarchy, also think about the date positioning, I completely miss it when I look at your poster.

>>303377
kek

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>>303152
tell me what you think. In't he cute?

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What do you think about my business logo?

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>>303740
boring

>>303738
Ain't you ten or what ?

>>303741
The Mill is rich as hell though.

>>303482
>>303165
only commendable graphics on this thread

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Hey im not sure about the font.
Its in one hand medival lettering in another its round as on "Resse's"
help

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roast me bitches but be nice about it

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>>303826
i love this stupid meme shit id say add some drop shadows and clean up dem edges

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>>303832
been making some changes

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>>303738
keep the stubby arms but make him shorter

>>303573
tilt the eye a bit i feel like u should work in some sort of snake skin patter in the background

>>303263
make the text bigger i'm hurting my neck and eyes trying to read it


so far my client likes it but i want to see what u assholes think

Red and blue do not go together, they are not complementary feget. And what's that puerto rican spiky dildo.

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i've been working on my selfbranding, i made a monogram. my name is Agustin Guzman Chispan. check it out

>>303872
old typeface and colours were better.
what the fuck is that low poly pole?
the treble clef makes it look classical

>>303887
The idea is neat but I wouldn't have guessed they were letters if I hadn't read that first.
Also the letters start out in reverse order. If you go from the outside and inwards it goes C, G, A.
I would abandon it or heavily rework it if I were you, either so that the initials line up with your name or make it more obvious they're supposed to be letters and not just random shapes that almost look like Pacman.

>>303887
no hierarchy, no distinction between letters
looks like a wi-fi emitting 'A'

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Crits Please. How to these colors go together? Is the design to chill?

>>303869
Thanks a lot man! What do you think about the font tho?

>>303872
I dont like colors. They looks boring

>>303887
you are in the right direction but you logo has way to many details. Try to make it more simple.

>>303905
colors are fine. but i cant tell what logo means? Is this a planet?

>>303905

you really have to work on your typography
the kerning is way of

>>303471

Typography is completely illegible...

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RIP design career

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>>303905
sloppy af

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Working on this for a client...thoughts?

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old stuff. Please spank me. I mean. Teach me.

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Contact card. Fire away

>>303934
too much gradients. Too much detail for a logo?

>>303938
Thanks for the advice!

I gave each individual piece a random gradient, do you think it would look better if I just gave all the pieces on uniform gradient as a whole instead of individually?

>>303937
its nice ... but you wont be able to print it

>>303942
this one is to show off. I have normal-sized vector in my pc.

>>303941
you should try and look. The only big thing i took from university design class is that you should always design logos with, as less detail as possible. Imagine, if you would need to scale it, to fit a side of a pen?

>>303944
Makes sense. Thanks for the tips!

>>303935
Is the drop shadow really necessary? It doesn't feel like it belongs anywhere on the image and their placement is inconsistent.

Why do the clouds have a drop shadow when the circles they're resting on don't have any?
Is there ANY purpose to the rounded squares on the bottom or are they color pickers (lol why?) you forgot to leave out?

The text looks horrible. It's all one giant quote, spaced out too far, the font doesn't mix well with anything else shown in the image.

There's no need to have "Four Nines" twice, especially since one of them is just filling up for empty space on the grey circles.

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can someone make this into a vector? Ignore the purple and back background. I've tried several times to replicate it with illustrator and I just can't get it right. I suck at this

>>303960
>>>/wsr/

>>303961
thanks

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>>303906
Yes its a planet. I thought it was clear, Guess i might have to further revise it

>>303920
Is this better?

>>303929
Yeah it was just a first draft so its a little rough. I've just cleaned up the edges.

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Logo for OchoPoint

>>304036
fuck dude, that's awful.

is it a golf hole?
is it a boat?

is it david carson's dick?

baka

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Not a logo

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>>304079
Less cancerous size

>>304079
>>304080
>Not a logo
So what's it supposed to be then? Garbage?

>>304082
Damn, You got me

>>304084
You could try explaining what it is and what it's for before asking for critique.
I haven't the faintest idea of what it's supposed to be.

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for a new small furniture company

>>304092
Because I try to have a critique about the simple aspect of it
I can explain later

>>303310
The slide & fade at the end looks odd to me. It might work better with just a fade

>>303937
Noob its not about the size, its about the borders , they will laugh at you in the typography

>>303848
I like . But the color scheme make me think its a pepsi

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A magazine about books.

>>304168
nice

>>304168
just an idea, you don't have to do it obviously but maybe think about experimenting with colour of the text? the orange covers look amazing on the image, and it would look great if you could create the relationship between type and picture

>>304192
I love it

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Logo for a interplanetary travel service/'Air-line'

HLS (Hydrogen Light Speed travels), the name isn't mine and can't be changed.

I don't do Logos, I banged this out in a couple hours after some sketches, would really welcome any and all crit w/ regards to the logo itself, the type is more of a placeholder.

>>304198
I think the design is good but I'm not sure if the planet in the middle should be lit up and shadowed. Try simplifying it, other than that I think it looks great

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Hi everyone,
I'm working with some fellow design students on a visual system for a competition run by our school and NFL. I'd love to hear any feedback you guys have. The attached photo is one in the set.

Check out the whole set here:
https://www.behance.net/gallery/50488349/NFLxFIT-Visual-System-Design-Contest-Team-Quicksnap

Thanks guys!

>>304192
awesome

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I am trying to figure out a logo/watermark for my photos.

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Amateur here
This is a logo for a weeb/gamer gurlll meetup I might hold at my apartment
Ignore the uneven cropping plz

>>304211
have you tried lettering it by hand instead of co-opting that sans serif face? it feels really disjointed - it has no harmony of form. the face you used the outlines from breaks the flow, You have those big curving lines at the start and then it hits the m and it all goes to hell.

and I have no idea what it says
d/j?-p?-l/b?-i-v/m?-i-m-e-t-s

Go back to the drawing board

>>303502

>>303524
This. Gray fields are a BAD idea when someone may be expected to print out the document. It'll never come out smooth, but will show on paper with lots and lots of variations due to line printing.

Also, fix the margins on the date column by making it the same as the margins on the column to its right.

>>303502
looks like a menu from a bad restaurant

>>303502
your type is pretty bad
>justified text
>tracking that tight when you expect people to read it
>hierarchy: at least you tried

>>303165
Tracking/kerning in the bottom left is inconsistent. I like the overall execution though. What's the message of the central graphic?

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Just trying to make good looking stuff for my portfolio. I really hate making things without a real world brief.

>>304323
+
>hierarchy
>tracking
>colour
>elements
>layout
-
>leading (too much imho)
>line length (too short)
>background 01 too dark, impedes with reading / echoed in the bottom left anyway. move and lighten.

>>304093
Shameless self bump

>>304093
>>304336
Is that really how you'd express the word 'BOWOW' for furniture? a heavy weighted, blacked out, sentence case, badly kerned logotype? with yellow and magenta—primary printing colours? it reads as thick, heavy, boring.

if i'm honest mate, it's terrible. but only because you didn't put any thought into it. try again.

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>>304334
I agree I went overboard with the leading in trying to create an airy summer feel, but I'm going to be a poor craftsman and blame my tools for the other two valid negative points.

I'm away from my home PC and I made the layout on my T420 which has a screen with a terrible color gamut, and the background 01 seemed light enough on it, but I now see just how dark it is when I open it on my phone. And I don't have After Effects on the T420, and I was hoping to animate the layout into its expanded shape ("read more") and other articles (02, 03, 04 for different seasons of the year) — pic related is the horizontally expanded layout + I lightened the background 01 a bit.

>>304338
the photo destroys the comp. you need to work on that.

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I'm not sure what this is that I'm making. It started out as some sort of fake 70's style resume, but I'm not sure where else to head with it.

I recently added the curved lined heading up to the text and I'm not sure how I feel about it yet. Any comments on this at all?

By the way this is my first attempt at actually designing something from scratch myself.

Thanks.

>>304361
aaah shit, sorry about the size of the image. completely forgot to re-size it. my mistake.

>>304323
the leading works better like that. dont listen to that autist

>>304079
either way looks like shit

>>304212
I like it

>>304214
jesus christ those colors

>>304192
spacing between we be is off, I don't like the body font, try grilli type

7/10

>>303154
For the love of all that is holy, get rid of the fucking italics. Looks like something i would make in Paint as a joke. also keep the font for Mogwai but change the font for everything else.

especially the font for "the old blue last" and everything below it. for the love of christ its so thin and looks all pixelated. terrible. also move the date of the concert. "04.07.17" needs to be bigger and moved somewhere that balances everything out more.

the whole thing is so unbalanced. so much space on the top and bottom left then just vomits of text in random places.

please dude. fix this shit or just stop whatever it is you are doing. i hope no one is paying you to make this shit. cuz if you are, im just gonna kill myself for not getting in on that easy money.

>>303175
No. You can still see that you haven't exactly paired up the corner line with the vertical line. you know exactly what im talking about too cuz you likely don't know how to do it.

what did you make this on?

>>303999
no. lol its not better at all. you can still see jagged edges on the black curves. what are you thinking? shit should be smooth like a babies bottom.

the text is so boring as well. Do you even know what you are doing?

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Any comments on this? I'm thinking of adding 2 antenna's at the top to turn it into a radio symbol but I'm not sure yet.

>>304374
i think it'd be cooler if you made the words AEON and RADIO on top of each other. so the D in RADIO morphs with the A in AEON and the I in RADIO morphs with the E in AEON.

and then just make them different colors so you can see both words but they are combined. make sense? just do it. you'll like it.

also piece of advice. detach the a from the e. it looks douchey like your some fucking dubstep artist. so stupid.

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here's an icon i'm designing for an app

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>>304384

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>>304385

>>304386
This looks just like Fender guitars.

>>304392
Exactly my first thought

>>304386
>>304385
>>304384

the shape of the letter is a good start but you have to get rid of all the drop shadows and textures and reflections. they look cheap, are far away from contemporary and don't add anything.

>>304192

all you people should look at this and learn some important lessons about typography here:

>clear hirachy
>strong letterforms
>no unnecessary bullshit
>cool ?

>>304407
it's ruined by the fact that it reads as 'free can we be? how'

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>>304406
this is the original logo, the ones i posted are for special versions of the app

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>>304409
90's version lol

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this one is not out yet

>>303872
Is that the Puerto Rican Foreskin Tower?

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>>304407
>>304194
>>304208
>>304368
>>304408

Thanks, I am currently working on a design project about the illusion of freedom. I work mainly with typography and poster design. I am trying to try new, more interesting ways to convey messages. That images and the one I am posting now are a couple of experiments from this weekend. I am always open to criticism.

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Made this just for fun after seeing this word while studying Japanese in Anki. I could go in autistically deep detail on why I like the word, but that's all beside the point.
I just made 2 different versions since I wondered how it'd look in darker tones.

It's not really meant to be "for" anything since I made it for fun, but I made it with a design for a T-shirt in mind.
I'm a little bothered with the font for "cooperation," specifically the e which is angled and the t and i, but I don't have any better fonts on hand. I tried scaling the t and i down so it fits in line with the rest of the letters but it looked even worse so I abandoned that idea.

But anyway, other than that, what could I improve?

>>304537
I would stick to one subtitle, either the the hiragana or the English. Personally though I wouldn't have either and I'd just have the kanji.

As a half jap, I feel that the presentation of the kanji is slightly westernised/jarring and that it should be read vertically, not horizontal like you have it, but I dunno whether you just like it that way.

Finally, I've done little projects like this in the past, and I think there's a flood of generic kanji and katakana type designs all over the place, I would look into communicating the meaning, cooperation, through design/something a little illustrative, as it stands it's a little average for my tastes.

>>304409
get rid of the flag and the shadow behind the letter, just look at redesigns and brand identities and tell me if they also have shadows and shit like this on, appreciate the minimalism. the shape is really cool.

>>304548
in 2017*

>>304542
>I would stick to one subtitle, either the the hiragana or the English.
I can see where you're coming from. The problem there is that on one hand you have absolutely no idea what it says if you leave only the hiragana, but if you make it English only it feels cheesy as hell. Although either way, like you said:
>I think there's a flood of generic kanji and katakana type designs all over the place
is entirely true. What I tried though was to make it look similar to those vision tests they have at ophthalmology clinics, hence the light beige background.

>As a half jap, I feel that the presentation of the kanji is slightly westernised/jarring and that it should be read vertically
At first I thought that would look great, but I realized I was wrong when the idea that means you'd read the word backwards (so 力協 instead of 協力.) 協力 written vertically looks pretty weird, at least in my opinion.
And sitenote: isn't Japanese written and read left to right at least on the internet? I'm not well-versed in the history of the language at all so maybe you find that a bit gross but at least it's not outright wrong to write it horizontally. Personally I think for shorter sentences or words like this, writing it horizontally looks better.

>I would look into communicating the meaning, cooperation, through design/something a little illustrative
When you say it like that, that's way better than the current design which is more or less just showing you a word and telling you what it means. Should I learn another kanji that looks really neat like this one does, I'll just cut out the translation and reading altogether and find a way to illustrate its meaning instead.

Thanks a ton.
Also just for curiosity's sake, which of the 2 color schemes did you prefer?

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>>304554
>>304554

I think that not including the definition and meaning is completely valid. For example Muji in the UK is followed by 無印良品, the clothing brand Superdry has 極度乾燥(しなさい) (which is utter meaningless shit but that only reinforces my point). Most people don't know what it says but it doesn't matter because these brands understand that their target demographic enjoys the general aesthetic of kanji, they aren't concerned with the definitions. Anyway if that's not what you're going for then that's fine, it's your thing. I just think it's stronger on its own.
When I said illustrate the meaning of the kanji I don't mean do away with the characters, I was just saying that there's a lot of potential for Japanese/Chinese typography, you can have a lot of fun with it. E.g check out some of the things people have done with kanji in the pinterest list that shows up when you search 'Japanese typography' on Google.(I know pinterest is awfullol)

As for the vertical alignment thing, You'll also notice that a lot of the poster design with kanji (on the list) are written vertically, I don't know how to explain it other than its more 'bold' that way. it's not at all wrong to write it horizontally, it's just not as common when showcasing one word or one phrase in Japanese. But again, if you prefer it horizontal then just stick to that because it's not 'wrong'.

>>304554
Colour wise the beige and black writing definitely looks the best, not a fan of the dark grey bg personally.

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Critique please.

>>304337
fuck ok, thought i was halfway there at least.
thanks for the feedback man

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>>304597
The two fonts don't mix well at all and even if they did the one on top is too small. I'm also not digging how the font on the bottom is a bit angled but the top one isn't.
Also, it might just be the style you're going for, but I think the bottom font could use a bit more grunge or tear. Not an extreme amount, just a bit.

Here's 2 versions I whipped up quickly. Would have chosen better fonts but my library is horrible.
Either you could get a new font that more closely matches the main title (pic 1) or you could at least improve on the current design and get a better font that sits closer to the title (pic 2.)

That's my main gripes. I love it for the most other than that the color for the text itself could be a stronger hue of orange or yellow, and the hand near the river might just be a bit too visible. Personally I think turning down the transparency by another 10-20% or so would be good.

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>>303152
Logo that I made for my YouTube channel, I tried to do something like an patch in.
pls r8

>>304636
Good:
- Patch effect is neat and looks real
- I personally like the colors
Bad:
- I have no idea what that symbol is supposed to represent
- "Delta Force" is extremely generic and boring
- I can't take anyone that calls themselves a "Pro Gamer" seriously

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>>304636
>>304643
> "Delta Force" is extremely generic and boring
> I can't take anyone that calls themselves a "Pro Gamer" seriously
Agreed. The "DF" is looking pretty boring and thin too.
Also,
>Brazil

>>304367
Elaborate

Trying to apply for a GD program in a University, and I need a portfolio.

Do you guys think it's ok to use free resources such as fonts, textures, etc, and also scans of already made art work from a magazine for example, as a background, or part of a collage or some other wacky shit, not as the main object of the piece of course. Do you think sources of used resources should be cited and credited separately?

None of these are explained in the requirements for the portfolio. All in all, they give you freedom with design, drawing, photography, etc. I obviously know you shouldn't steal someone else's assets, even if they're published for free use, but I'm kind of pressed on time, and I obviously can't make my own fonts, brushes, textures, and stuff like that yet.

>>304686

In general - fonts are ok. Textures might be, but we're pretty good at spotting someone faking design with a stock texture background.. so tread lightly.

Scans of completed art, such as a magazine are something to avoid.

I once interviewed someone who presented her portfolio... while flipping through it, I noticed she'd incorporated art (seems like it was a background) that was made by another artist that I recognized. We're not even talking Dali... this was 'just' a 3D artist that I was familiar with on a forum.

Did she mean to 'steal' it, or was it something she just thought wasn't the 'main' part of that particular image? I didn't know, nor care.

I ended the interview sooner than later, obviously she wasn't hired.

By - unless you're applying to work at a scrapbook store, don't do a collage. If it's not the best collage I've ever seen, it's just a trash image in your portfolio.

>>304689
Thanks for the advice. What about a picture of an important historical figure? I have an idea I want to do, with the figure, the flag from the country they're from, and a motivational quote or something related to what they're known for, but I obviously can't take a picture myself, or draw them. Should I just give it up?

>>304688
looks cool, I see a chat bubble? Can't really make sense of what it represents.

>>304370
amateur retard detected, go away,
also, how is your home design going?

>>304691
Mate the dude you're replying to is bullshitting, lol. Nobody who's gotten far enough to hire in the industry would be on 4chan, let alone write stupidly verbose bragging posts like that.

>>304708
I mean, you can't really know for sure, and I'll take any advice I can at this point, and what he said is also highly believable. I'm pretty desperate at this point, and I have two days to scramble this portfolio. Basically my last resort.

>>304710
let's see some of your work famalam

>>304716
Honestly I don't wanna be split roasted, and I'm kind of paranoid that somehow the person evaluating my portfolio might be lurking these threads and recognize me. I know it's ridiculous, but I really don't wanna post anything.

>>304717
brah, /gd/ is —and speaking as one— a bunch of unemployed 20-somethings. don't worry lad, criticism will do you good. we're mostly pretty constructive too

>>304718
I don't wanna post anything I've used other people's assets, and the only good designs I've done from the ground up by myself I've made for other communities on 4chan, and I don't wanna be recognized.

>>304719
lol as you wish babe. consider this a roadblock to pass in the future though m8. as a designer, you're going to have to get used to lots of criticism and public attention

>>304643
I play in some championships, so I guess I can call myself an pro gamer.
The symbol was supposed to represent an ∆ (Delta) or a D and a F.

>>304653
Also,
hu3hu3hu3hu3hu3

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thoughts? its for an media/art show, yet to add text

>>304683
They're fucking hideous

>>304747
Generic. At least get rid of the border.

>>304732
>I play in some championships, so I guess I can call myself an pro gamer.
Fair enough, I was under the impression you were just some random guy who plays CS or whatever and is in some dumb clan that thinks they're hardcore, because that's the impression I've gotten from literally everyone who calls themselves that. If you want to make it sound and look less cringeworthy, get rid of the Brazilian flag, decrease the spacing, and make it "Professional Gamer" or something else that signifies the league you're in.

>The symbol was supposed to represent an ∆ (Delta) or a D and a F.
Like I said, Delta Force is super generic. If that's what the team you're part of is called you can't do much about it, but if that's just something you thought would look cool then go for a different name altogether and change the logo. If you can't change it, at least make it smaller.

>>304749
any suggestions on how to make it less generic. I'm not great at graphic design but I need to do this

>>304755
Hexagons are very overdone. That's all I can say without some more context on what kind of theme the art show has.
I mean it's fine if it's an art show about bees, but if that's not the case then you could start from scratch on something else. I don't know where you were planning on putting the text, but if you just want to space it out semi-randomly you can achieve something similar with overlapping circles as well. Also pretty generic, but more fitting than hexagons for an art show.

>>304748
I need better criticism than that if I am to get better

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Need some criticism, doing a logo for a swimwear company, they do casual swimwear products, hows the readability of this logo and lettering ? its supposed to be an otter

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>>304774
Why does the inner circle look like you used the lasso tool to make it?
Why does the otter look more like a constipated bear?
Why are the ripples so poorly made?

In terms of readability, it's fine but could be better. Pic related: if this is roughly how big you can expect the logo to be on a pair of swimming shorts for instance, you gotta make sure you can still read it clearly.
You could increase the white border a bit and slightly increase the size of all letters, maybe add a bit more spacing to it all.

>>304783
you've added the black fucking border you nigger

>>304821
I didn't add any "border" on purpose, I just didn't feel like saving the image so I screenshotted it, scaled it down, and didn't crop it all the way down because I was in a rush.

>was supposed to start working designs 5 hours ago, but I've been watching youtube and fapping
>now too tired to do anything

Advice for not being a lazy piece of shit?

>>303266
Check your orphans. A lot of words look like they're about to fall out of the paragraphs.

>>304826
>fapping at all
bad idea tbqh famalam. I'm not a 'nofap gives you superpowers' warrior, but in general you're fucking up your brains reward system, making yourself more addictive, more likely to fap in the future, more avoidant to work, etc.

hop on that nofap wave bruv

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Fucking around with some ideas for myself. Simple rough sketch, I drew this with a mouse. I haven't designed for years, so it sucks I know. I really miss it. From this point I will pick it up again. Any tips on how to get projects? Should I just start a Facebook page and design every day, share some work on that page?

>>303905
I'd get rid of the black border around the sphere. That font looks fucking bad. The colors on the sphere are too similar, give them some more contrast. I don't even know what the fuck that black thing is, but it looks awful and there are a bunch of imperfections on it

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Thoughts on this personal card? Details changed of course.

Just so when I meet someone I can hand them this instead of awkwardly exchanging numbers/emails.

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>>304997
fixed

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>>304998
ugh, with higher dpi - sorry, new to inkscape

>>304102

Design is a goal oriented process. If your goal was to make something pretty, then you fucked up. If your goal was to get across a message, you also fucked up. There are many other things you could be trying to do, but no one can critique shit without knowing those goals.

>>305001
My goal is to convey my email address and public key and public key fingerprint to the recipient.

Why isn't it pretty?

>>304759
Not him but take a look at some Color Theory articles and good color palettes. You're using some bad combinations and super saturated colors.
The design is alright I guess but let's see what limited colors can do.

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Is this shit, anons?

>>305070
the logo is kind of generic hippie shit, but it's simple enough to work desu

the typography is, however, outright bad. the mix of the two doesn't work, they're too far apart stylistically. they're also individually shit since they're too quirky, and detract attention from the logo.

it looks very mish-mash and not good famalam. redo the type entirely. if you want geometric, go with something tasteful like futura (condensed bold or normal), brandon grotesque, or avenir

>>305070
No consistent line thickness. Dreamcatchers are fucking lame. Typography is absolute trash. Start over, this time on paper

You need more ideas, and are spending too much time in software tweaking something that's bad

>>305070
use a single line widht for the symbol, and a single good font

>>305070
In addition to what the other people said, I think the second font looks like shit even without comparing it to the logo or the first font. Also the kerning is all wrong. Just look at how the W is frotting with the T, and the R is about to give the T an alphabetic surprise.

>>304413
I like it, real eyecatcher

>>304563
that tower is rad

>>304597
bit too dark?

>>304747
The spacing is very uneven.
Makes it look very unprofessional.
Use a program that has alignment options.

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I'm relatively new to adobe illustrator and creating logos in general is could I have some critique on some of my first creations?

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>>305179

>>303502
My roommate is a recruiter (not in this field sadly) but your resume is at least exactly the kinda shit she'd be looking for. One page and legible with all relevant information is all someone not into graphic design is gonna look for.
sage for no aesthetic advice

>>303310
what software are you using. genuinely interested

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made a mixtape cover for my friend who's a shitty pretentious rapper (hence the name of the tape), can you critique please?
I'm trying to get better at this shit

>>305330
I like it, actually. Though why's the Japanese all fucked up? It doesn't mesh with how uniform everything else looks. Also not sure why there are those dashes in the circle on the left.

>>303502
Man your rivers on the left column are god awful...

>>304168
Cool concept but the light type is p hard to read

>>304192
P cool, align the column on the left with the stroke of the f tho

>>305331
>Why's the Japanese all fucked up
I thought it looked too boring so I threw a ripple effect on it to try and match it with the water but it came out retarded but I kept it anyway because it's a mixtape cover
>Why there are those dashes in the circle on the left
In all honesty I fucked up the circle and accidentally cut off half of it on the right side and i couldn't undo it for some reason so I duped it and flipped it horizontally in order to """"""fix"""""" it

I'm an amateur looking to get better, I see people getting paid to make shitty mixtape covers and I want to be one of those people

>>305179
Fuckn shit mate get tha trash out a here

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>>303152
Bully pls

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>>305410
I still think you're doing great for your first drawing. but its almost a little too overkill now - I preferred it in the older thread you started. Its the naivety that looks good.

>>305328
Illustrator and After Effects.

>>305330
What is the Japanese supposed to say? Hitler accidentally did nothing wrong?

You should know the same as anyone else, how laughable it is when you see Asian people wearing incorrect English and phrases like 'HOT SLUT' on their clothes because they don't bother trying to understand English. The same standard should be applied to the fucking wave of teenagers in the west jumping on the stick-japanese-on-anything trend.

>>305427
>What is the Japanese supposed to say? Hitler accidentally did nothing wrong?
not him but that seems to be the case.

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Making this for fun. It's a cover for the new Gorillaz album, and I know it looks shit. I'm trying to represent 4 ways the world could end (a theme in the album) while sticking to the colour scheme of the original cover.

It's shit what can I do to improve it? I haven't done the bottom left but I'm plannng for a tsunami type thing.

>>303350
not much to critique handled by others, however you seem to have burned the middle card, bottom left. Other than that excellent

>>305398
What can I do to improve?

>>304205
This is insanely cool.
Good work anon!

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Does anyone know how to replicate NTSC artifacts?

I made this Star Fox wallpaper based on the Cowboy Bebop intro and I can't seem to get the artifacts quite right.

I'm using ripple to make the interlacing effect and HSV noise for the grain. Over all that I used a simple blur filter.

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Poster I made last year

>>305474
The text is great, sticks out well and looks very clean. I like the background too. However. The Naar her...genet looks a bit sloppy when it's so close to the fire, maybe moving it and the title a bit upwards would be good.

Also it should be a rule that if you post and image in ones of these threads you also have to /crit/ at least 1 other, otherwise everyone else will ignore you

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>>303152
Just doing this for fun and wanted some critiques, trying to go for nineties look but its just not working

>>303923
Why is the bottom part larger than the rest? Also you selling coffee or what?

>>305493
I fuck with this actually, looks like a shitty daytime cartoon from my childhood

>>305493
Try adding a third color to the mix. More "confetti" would also be good.
Have a look at the logos of classic Nicktoons if you need some reference pictures: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_programs_broadcast_by_Nickelodeon#Former_programming

Also, I know the 3D effect is most definitely not meant to be uniform, but 2 letters stand out way too much to me.
The E looks bizarre, especially around the middle and the 3D effect doesn't keep up there either.
The S has its 3D effect pointing forwards while all other letters point at an above-sideways angle. It should be in line with the rest cause it's the only letter that looks like that.

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logo for a small independent bike messenger/courier company.

I feel like its pretty much there, possibly a little too much black in the top right?

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version with black tyres and thicker inner circle

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ahem... correct spelling.

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lol fucksake, sorry for image spam i keep seeing things to change.

sorted out the black balance and rotated a little for easier readability

>>305436
Still would appreciate some /crit/

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>>303152
r8

>>305553
eyes are kinda creepy
feather textures are unnecessary and just make it look like hes sweating
otherwise not bad

>>305590
agree with this crit. either ditch the feathers or find a better way to draw them because they look shitty and distracting and don't read well. and the eyes don't look like duck eyes at all, the shape is all wrong and they're just generally unappealing.

your text is also all lumpy and fucked up. why? the kerning is also pretty bad, and the tighter tracking on "MIGHTY DUCK" vs "MESSENGER" looks ugly and unbalanced.

I'm also not convinced the motion lines coming off the duck are done the right way. The big heavy stroke around the blobby white tapered line doesn't look great. Have you tried other things? Have you tried leaving them out entirely and adjusting the composition of the logo to compensate for their absence?

>>305410
I understand you're trying to mimic a DOF effect by blurring the layers as they go back, but having the sun perfectly sharp kills it and makes no logical sense.

>>304999
Your layout isn't too bad, but the font just screams "cheap crap" to me. I kinda like how the fixed width effortlessly conveys a techy hacker aesthetic, though, so I'm not inclined to discourage you from that direction.

First result on Google for beautiful fixed width fonts: https://typography-daily.com/blog/2013/05/22/10-great-free-monospaced-fonts-for-programming/

Give some of those a try and see how they work.

>>303905
In addition to what everyone else said, your overall aesthetic choices are just bad. Not only is the typeface you're using ugly to start with and then made worse with bad kerning, the double stroke makes it extra awful. Needless complexity is the last thing you want in a logo, and the strokes provide that in spades.

The rounded interlaced shading on the sphere is a dopey cliche to start with, but your execution is particularly bad and unappealing.

Sorry to say, but the overall design is just bad and ugly and needs to be stripped down to the studs and reworked dramatically. There isn't much about it that can be salvaged

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>>305553
the red dots are things i got rid off, do that
blue is what you need to fix
1. kerning
2. the space between the shadows on the wheel seems a bit too tight
3. the envelope could be a bit smaller, maybe emphasise the angle?
4. the third 'speed trail' thing looks a bit weird, maybe make it a bit smaller?
5. eyes look negative, you don't want a negative look on his face, make him positive, just change the shape of his eyes slightly and raise them up? add some funny little eyebrows, but don't make them too big
6. front tire looks flat whilst back tire is in a wrong angle
7.fingers look a bit squarish, round them up or add some cute claws?

do that and i'll try to catch some more, that's my suggestion, you don't have to do it but I think it would work better that way, otherwise it's a solid idea famalam

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>>305602
this one sorry

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>>305603
this one will be easier

>>305604
and if you want to keep that negative look on his face you need to emphasise it to the point it looks silly

>>305436
>>305585
color choices are ugly and don't do a good job of representing the original album cover, which itself uses color well

the art itself is boring and doesn't convey any sense of emergency or disaster. good minimalism subtracts unnecessary details while retaining the original meaning, but what you've made doesn't mean anything. they just panels of bland shapes, not cataclysmic scenes.

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I just made this for shits and giggles in GIMP, it's the cover art for a friend's EP.
Problem is I have absolutely no idea wtf I'm doing, I just grabbed random shit and pasted it all together and fucked around with it for like 20 mins tops and got this.
How bad is it?

>>305617
can you fucking resize it like a normal human bean?

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>>305618
sure

>>305615
Alright thank you!

>>305617
It's hard to say whether an album cover is effective or not without knowing more about the music, but I can say that the colours are pretty nice; they contrast enough to make the plane pop. Because it's a large, singular image, the cover pops out and is pretty memorable.


I feel like if you straightened the blurred background image so that the building' straight lines aligned to the the purple square's it would look far better. This may be impossible if the picture of the building is just large enough to be on the image and rotating it would only leave gaps.

>>305622
yeah i can't really do that unfortunately since the source image was small enough already and I had to upscale it in order to cover the whole height of the frame.

If I rotated it I would have to crop it even more

>>305513
>>305506
thanks for the critique, you nineties nicktoon was exactly what i was going for, and yea the E is pretty bad but i kinda like the S, maybe ill make a few more letters have these impossible angles so it's not as weird

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organizational chart for local student club, sorry it's all in norwegian. Was fucking anoying to make, because they just kept wanting to add things.

>>305627
Not him but since you've already decided to blur the background image from upscaling it, you can just take the original, rotate and upscale it so it lines up better, then blur it. I'm not sure if you're using gaussian blur or motion blur, but if you give it motion blur in the same direction the plane is moving it'll look better. You can also just make the image smaller (~1200-1500px is a respectable size for an album cover, unless it NEEDS to be 2048)

Also I'd recommend making the plane just a bit smaller so the edges of the plane aren't being cut off.
Are you planning on putting the artist name and title in there somewhere, or does he just want a cover that says EP and nothing else? If it's just supposed to say EP, make the letters a bit bigger, maybe try a different font (depends on what type of music the album is, can't recommend anything without having an idea at least) but even if you just keep it in the same font that reads EP and nothing else, you should at least move it a bit further away from the corner. Doesn't have to be much, just enough so it doesn't look like it's awkwardly nearly clipping out of the square.

For being someone who has no idea what he's doing you did an alright job.

>>305649
Also since I'm feeling nice, if you really can't crop it any more than what you have now, I could probably just photoshop together a bigger version of the original image if you have it. All you really need to do is copy a section and stitch it together and if you cover it up with blur you won't even notice it.
Just one last thing I noticed: what are those grey borders on the top and bottom? Did you add those as a way to fill in some extra room or are they intentional? If they're intentional, get rid of them.

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>>305648
As a whole the image looks neat, clean, very professional. Aside from the text alignment and the additional group boxes near the very bottom this was more or less just nitpicks and minor complaints.

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>>305651
>,jpg
Wow, way to make myself look lika fucking idiot.

Does anyone have good reference or inspiration sites for edm's? I've just been adding myself to a bunch of mailing lists, but I would like a place just to view concepts .

>>305651
Thanks for the feedback man, I'll try the things you suggested, nice to have some fresh eyes on this, I'm getting tired of looking at it.

>>305652
>looks neat but adds nothing
here we go we have another victim of the muh functionality meme

>>305662
Look, I don't need everything to have an autistically clear purpose, they stick out to me as odd elements in an image trying to be minimalist.
The bottom ones with the 6 groups is acceptable, but the one at the top with the 3 green groups looks ugly.

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Halp I'm new to this

>>305649
thanks for the critique, everything you said makes sense to me, some of the stuff you recommended I did try to make but apparently failed misserably like the motion blur angle.
and about the top and bottom lines, yeah, i think those were artifacts left over from the background building pic, i hadn't even noticed them up until now tbf lol, thanks for pointing them out!
now as for the pic, I'm not gonna fix it since I already delivered my friend with the cover pic and he's already uploaded it to Bandcamp i think, but if you wanna fix it for some kind of artistic fulfillment I'd happily provide you the stems i used
thanks for the input, I'll keep it in mind next time i do something like this, very grateful

>>305670
So the picture you first posted is basically the finalized version and you didn't change much from it? Shame. But I guess that means you know for next time to take a bit more time working on the product before sending it in, I suppose.
>but if you wanna fix it for some kind of artistic fulfillment I'd happily provide you the stems i used
I was thinking of it more as a way of doing a small favor, but if you've already sent it in there wouldn't be much point to it.

>>305672
don't sweat it too much, it was done for free

>>305667
...so what do you want critique for? What's the image supposed to be?
If your intention was to make an square cucumber cut out to look like an E sinking into an ocean of molten cheese, you did a good job.

>>305667
looks good, but doesnt stick out of the background
make some kind of shadow on the bottom, or mess with colour tones a little,
Heck do both, the bg color is really yucky

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>>305738
Another

>>305684
It is suppose to be earth color. I fucked up there. hahaha.

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pls be gentle

personal branding
Name: J***** B*********
Number: 6

>>305745
Not particularly attractive, doesn't really convey any sort of meaning. None of the elements of the shape are lined up in a way that make sense to me, and the gradient color is not appealing. Maybe in context it could look better, but I doubt it. Seems like you're trying too hard to make something out of nothing. Try to find a better idea to work with.

>>305745
At first it looked like a Chinese copy of the Super Smash Bros. logo until I noticed I wasn't supposed to focus in the negative space, then I just saw a really strange S.
I think you're gonna need to start from scratch if you want to convey your initials. I can vaguely see a J-shape if I entirely ignore the top 2 halves, and if I ignore the negative space then it sort of looks like a 6 but could just as easily be confused for an S, and I can't see anything resembling the letter B.
Like the other anon said, the gradient is ugly.
Start over.

>>305745
please
it looks like something a 'pro gamer delta force ultra knives' would have on youtube as their logo

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What letter(s) come to mind when you look at these images? Just your first glance, gut reaction.

Would appreciate it as I'm a bit lost with this, thanks a lot.

>>305764
ct or a

>>305764
25% a
25% l
25% t
25% c

>>305764
The only letter that is clear to me is a lowercase a. What letters am I supposed to be seeing?

I like the overall shape of this, but the negative space "separation" parts are ugly and poorly executed on all three examples. They need to be thicker. Right now they just look like you lazily masked it off with a thin stroke, and they disappear almost entirely when the logo is scaled down.

>>305765
>>305766

Thanks. Would you say it's a stretch to pitch the first logo (The tope one) as 'a' over all but also incorporating a 't'. The company is called 'auto-tune'

>>305770
Just missed including you in the mass reply. The image is supposed to be a lower case 'a' yeah. The negative spaces were indeed masked off in a hurry as previews to throw up on here. I'll keep in mind the issues with scaling though, thank you.

>>305764
I only see "at".

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>>305774
this is my quick and dirty recommendation for making the "t" aspect of the logo read better by keeping the intersection of the t cross intact. I think the "a" shape is so obvious that you don't have to worry about diluting it a bit in service of the t.

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>>305777
I agree, that looks more pleasing to the eye.

The logo would be for a streaming service so the logic behind the break in spacing being top sided (As opposed to the bottom side example you've provided) was that it could also be read as a musical note - much like the Beats logo lifted from Kuwayama's work.

I suppose the fact that not you or anyone has commented on it means it's not very obvious. I'll play around with the width more and see how it goes, though now I'm leaning towards the image you mocked up. In any case, thanks for the feedback it's very helpful.

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First inkscape work. Is it bad?

>>305786
for a trace, there shouldn't be so many little niggles bud. zoom right in and get it perfect.

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This is my first time doing a poster, please fuck me as hard as you can, my penis is ready.

>>305833
looks silhouette looks like it was cut out by a kindergartener with safety scissors. there's no reason it shouldn't be cleaner. I also don't know what the green symbol in the middle is supposed to be, but the line quality is awful.

The overall style is okay, the execution is just lazy and bad.

>>305847
Fuck you, it was good for me too. thanks.

>>305887
I like it, but the two colors dont contrast and makes it difficult to read.

>>305887
The O and the A works like they are having sex while dancing. The background color needs to change tho.

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So an anon recently called me out for being blind
Sorry.

anyway how shit is this and why?

>>305904
Too complex to be an effective logo. There are too many elements competing for attention, none of the elements are easily identifiable (I've stared at it for a good 30 seconds and still have no idea what it's supposed to depict), having the name incorporated into the logo like that is cheesy and amateurish and something that should be avoided unless you really know what you're doing, the grey outline around the whole thing looks like trash, the color scheme is awful and looks like it was picked out of your art program's default color palette, the lines are horribly aliased and make it look like it was done in MSPaint (logos should be made in some sort of vector graphics application like Illustrator so they're scalable), having your slogan surrounded by a rounded rectangle like that is ugly and amateurish, the font choice for the slogan is bad (the font itself looks cheap and tacky and it isn't even kerned well).

Finally, the "font" used for the initialism looks like it was hand made in the worst way possible ... the retro-techy aesthetic looks dopey, like it was made by a naive 15-year-old. Maybe it could be salvaged if it was executed perfectly and surrounded by greatness, but as it stands right now it's not working at all.

I don't think anything about this can be salvaged. Sorry, man. You have a lot to learn.

>>305887
i'm just a random dude, but when you show that logo to me, I read coast west not west coast

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>>305887
I don't hate the idea, but like the others said, your color palette blows. Maybe in the context of a full-fledged brand identity I'd be able to see some underlying brilliance to the grey/yellow/blue, but I strongly doubt it and I think you should try something else.

The interlocking letters also need a ton of work. You need to customize your letterforms to fix all of these problematic spots. If that's beyond your capabilities then you need to give up on this concept and work on something else, because as it stands right now it looks lazy and dumb.

I'm also not a fan of the smaller font. That W is atrocious.

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>>305847

I listen and maximum effort. I realize pen tool is really ez to use.

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Just made this, I think it's decent. What do ya think?

>>305933
you're right, it's decent.

it looks vertically cramped, i would consider setting the overlaying the type in the foreground or changing the orientation. also, your choice of typeface is a bit awkward. it's mid-way between 'scrappy handwritten' and 'clear'. either go full clarity with a normal Serif (Clarendon?) / Sans-Serif (classic Helv) or actually write the title by hand.

>>305934
consider overlaying the type*
Just Fuck My English Right Up Famalam

>>305933
Like the other anon said, it's vertically cramped. You could move the hand down to just a bit below the wrist and it would be fine.
I don't know how to feel about how everything else matches up though. The monochrome hand and background go well together, but the wireframe finger gun feels out of place and the font is even worse, it doesn't fit with either.
You could draw the outline of a hand making a finger gun instead and it would thematically fit with the rest of the picture much better. And if you do, try to make it the same size as the hand in the background because as it is now the wireframe looks like someone else's (much bigger) hand.
Maybe turn up the brightness and saturation on the outline or wireframe if you decide to keep it.

>>305933
some of the lines don't fucking meet, some of the lines went over. what is anti-aliasing?

Can't you trace properly, jizzus, you are tracing from a picture for fuck sake, it is easy as fuck.

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I made this logo for my class because every summer/winter we hold a fair and I'm extremely new to adobe illustrator and I'm not sure how to improve it, my worry is it looks too basic and uninteresting

>>305938
looks aggressive for a fair. Is someone going to get murdered at the fair each year? LOL

>>305933
I'm repeating some of the stuff the others said, but anyways, this is all that comes to mind:


The handwriting is off and doesnt look good, also the letters s and t are too obviously the exact same so it has a free font vibe to it. I would use another font.

The hand doesnt have a realistic looking shadow on the background, light comes from the left on the hand, the shadow is also on the left. Also on the thumb knuckle thing of the real hand its not properly cut out.

The lines are not connecting properly on the drawn hand. Also you would have to specify what this is for, because legibility is a thing (poster, flyer, ??). The type and the hand are not aliased properly. Last thing: I know you want to do like a crease thing on the thumb, but all the lines connecting there and creating this weird hump look strange to me.

Otherwise, the concept is good, in case there is a backstory to it.

>>305940
good point I'm making a less militant looking one now

>>305602
thats amazing feedback thanks mate

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Inproved version

>>305738
Personal opinoins; I like it.
Grabbed my attention and made me look for a bit, but, I can't easily figure out what it is.
And the ULTRA GOOD MUSIC is very hard to read.

>>305764
at
at
cl

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Which one is the best?
And how can it be improved even more?

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>>305963
Maybe better proportions?

>>305979
Thanks for the advice! I'm going to start working on it tomorrow

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Go on then /crit/ rip into my latest piece

>>304452
yes good eye

>>305978
long shadows are a meme and will age like milk. don't use any of those ones.

None of the versions that are nested do so in a particularly convincing way. ugly overlaps abound, where elements aaaaalmost line up but don't quite make it. They should either line up precisely, or not at all. See critique image in >>305909 to get what I'm saying.

With all of that being said, I guess the bottom left one is the one that works best, but it's not an especially satisfying or interesting effect. You might have more luck working with customized letterforms to get them to mate in a compelling way.

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made this today

>>305993
trite as hell and ugly, but your VHS effects aren't even realistic. the only thing worse than a cliche is getting the cliche wrong.

be original.

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Never did design before this one, it's a business card for the business I'm starting soon.

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Alright senpai, my penis is ready for all kinds of pussy. Rape me hard.

>>306026
Here's a tip:
Try imagining what that would look like on an actual business card. Not full scale on your screen.
Now start over.

>>306032
It's just a screen shot, actual file is business card format in .pdf

>>306026
It looks tasteful. But the colors need to contrast more. Because business card is small. And be mindful of the font. Way better than what I did when I first started. Haha

>>306035
Thank you, it's still wip, I'm gonna dabble with contrast on that one

>>306034
My point is that it's gonna be a lot harder to see what the entire left side of the card is supposed to be. You can see it at that resolution, but try to imagine it at actual business card resolutions.

>>306037
Sure, gonna scale that side to be larger, have it as a separate file

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Design for a t-shirt
How shitty is my typesetting and font choice?

>>306067
A lot