General Critique

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>made up basketball team for school portfolio

>>251464
>may be served raw or undercooked
>this will make you sick

Why is that there? Is this some kind of public liability disclaimer? I'm so confused.

>>251465
Did you deliberately make it a goatse homage?

>>251474
it's a common disclaimer for almost all restaurants and is illegal to not have something like it on your menu

>>251476
good thing no one outside of 4chan will see it that way

>>251474
basically saying that if you ask for it, we can give it to you completely raw. but you shouldn't be a fucking idiot and do that because you'll die

>>251464
The graphical burger could be a little more exciting (or visually tied-in with the beach setting), and I don't know if I like the font for "Beachside Burgers," but it's friendly and easy to read.
5/10

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had to do a poster for bladerunner and incorporate elements of bauhaus.

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Reposting in this thread with a few changes.

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for an interplanetary "rideshare" service

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posted this one right before the last thread 404'd
nehi stands for northeast housing initiative btw

>>251464
burger ugly asf rework it entirely (proportions ugly, thickness n thinness of all that shit ugly + inconsistent, space between it all ugly and inconsistent etc)

>>251844
agree with this. those lines don't look like tomatoes or lettuce, that brown brick looks nothing like a burger patty, and those buns are completely flat

>>251827
>alcoholic energy

intruiging

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work in progress

roast me

>>251827
that blue pattern detailing thing in lower corners looks ms-painty for some reason

>>251851
Stiff and clearly traced. Has no energy.

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>>251851
the body shape is ugly
low quality
blood drips are too big

but is not ugly at all, just need some fixes

&, just wtf is going on in the background here, xactly? I'm not seeing justification/purpose/jusfforthefuckofitbecosnice here anon.

>>251871
I really like the style of that. Any tips?

>>251843
Pretty cool, my only personal opinion is that I'm not seeing the whole "Nehi"
Instead what I'm seeing at first glance is "Neh"
But that's just my take on it

>>251871
seems to have shrimp's eyes

>>251896
Good point. I'll probably end up making the spacing in the "I" a little tighter

>>251464
I feel like you say burger too much for the minimal design you are going for.

It's a burger place, so:
Beachside Burgers
Classic....
Stuffed...
Green Chile...
Sliders...
Veggie...

All lower case and title font look childish and don't match with the background you have. So change the background.

The background could be more transparent to be less distracting.

The graphic burger is just not good... Probably not needed either.

Aim to print this on a 4x6 card or something small; 8.5x11 is overkill for the complexity of your menu.

>>251827
>Alcoholic Energy Drink
Like Four Loko?
Wasn't that stuff banned?

I like the colors and layout, but I don't like the goat. The other one was better.

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made this for >>251610
what you guys think?

>>251967
Looks great. Hope you charge him money to use it.

>>251843
I was lurking in the last one, and I don't have enough expertise to critique properly, but I really thing this is coming together nicely. It's modern, but not bland like every redesigned FTSE500 company logo, it seems like it'll be timeless and I think the typography choices fit well with the shapes

>>251827
I like the idea. I'm not sure how this would look, but maybe try having the white in the gradient at the bottom go a little farther down?

>>251990
Thank you so much! I'm a freshman GD student so that really means a lot to me.

>>251791
i like this

>>251967
desu looks like it would suit a auto parts store really well

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>>251827
Me again.

I feel like this one is all wrong. Thoughts?
Do I need to go full color like the goat?

>>252035

Or a college sport team

>>252037

The goat really stands out compared to everything else. Maybe less detail on the goat?

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>>252037
very often those package designs use simple shapes (no gradients) combined with text warping/arcs.

>>251464

That burger does not look appetizing. I wish the patty were meatier, the lettuce was leafier, and the tomatoes were thicker. I also wish they were wider than the buns. I dislike the transparent background a lot. Do a solid color or a pattern.

>>252037
>>252043
I would say make the goat a red silhouette, maybe keep the eyeball.

>>251791
>bauhaus
>capital letters.

Pic one faggot.

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First time ever attempting graphic design, some logos I made in photoshop. Please roast me mercilessly but also tell me how to make them better.

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made a poster for the film nights of cabiria
its a b/w movie from 1957.

>>252086
They're all very bad.

What you did right though is iterate on multiple ideas which a lot of people skip. I would suggest doing this on paper first (or just with a graphics tablet). It's much easier to see if something is going to work or not.

20 quick ideas sketched out very roughly, refine the couple that stand out. Only present the one that works in the end.

As a general rule of thumb, logo's don't have textures and 3D is used sparingly if at all (usually suggestive of perspective without actually being 3D). The edge case being you're making a logo for some edgy music label, which you're not.

>>251465
I hate the fuckin' Eagles, man.

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Personal logo idea.

>>252084
>elements of bauhaus
>elements of
>elements

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>>252227
Alternate colors.

>>252227
make sure to create monochrome version with outlines and halftone patterns for halftones

>>252086
why don't you do capital as in the top of a column, a stone ionic capital can be your logo

>>251791
Bauhaus doesn't mean just geometric stuff, black, white and red.

It's ok, but the details are totally useless. The smoke, for example. Or the flying car (that could have been placed better)

>>251871
I'm extremely jealous to have never thought of that style. Genuinely upset. It looks great, I love the colors. Wow.

>>251871
Maybe at a little more somethin' somethin' to the nose though. If not, it already looks great.

>>252099
there i something wrong that i don't know.

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R8 my first photoshop

>>252073
Beautiful.

The whole columbian coffee and northen lights thing is a little wierd, but beautiful.

>>252469
https://www.behance.net/gallery/32508123/Nordic-Lights

Funny i recently saw it. Here is a link to full project on behance

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>>251482
What are you on about? Raw beef is fucking delicious

>>252498
Sure thing Frenchy..

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For a small bottle recycling company.
The name of the company starts with "B"

>>251465
Bretty gud, not a fan of the "S" in "ES" though

>>252521
They are recycling five-liter bottles? Then i saw it first time i though its the nipples or sockets.

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Very early WIP for a personal project I'm working on

Ignore the type, I just haven't deleted it from when I scanned the original document

Looking for input on the actual concept and then ways I can improve this particular attempt

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Logo I'm working on for a client trying to get sponsorships for some sort of trophy truck event. company name starts with an S. Thoughts?

>>252550
Learn more about your client

>>252551
how is this relevant to the design?

>>252552
Because your design could be shit if it doesn't fit the client specs

>trophy truck event

I don't get trophy or truck from your design

>>252552
Completely relevant.

>>252553
oh okay I see. I misspoke. It's for his company that will be entering their truck into different events.

so it's less specific than just one event. I'm thinking of changing the gears to yellow and having the S wrap around the gears a little more as well making the S bigger in proportion to the gears

>>252555
client asked for gear motifs and an S for Swift Designs Racing

>>252555
Alright here's just my opinion, and I don't know a whole hell of a lot about cars so take it with a grain of salt

No part of your design says "truck" to me. Don't get me wrong, it's a pretty as hell design. But I just do not get truck from it.

What kind of events are they entering it in? What kind of truck is it, what is it for?

>>252556
Read that afterwards. Technically I guess that fits their specs but I still don't get "truck" from it really at all.

>>252557
Fair enough, thanks for the input it is much appreciated, I'm not really a car person either so it would probably help if I was. It's also a very rough first draft but I just needed some kind of input.

>>252558
If that is what they asked for then you did a good job

I might make the ends of the S taper off a bit more though so you don't have those sharp edges at the tips

>>252559
cool thanks! I'll play with it some more.

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>>251827
>>252037

Me again, again.

I've put the "mad goat beer" shit on hold until I have that serendipitous moment, to loose up I tried to draw a custom font tonight.....

This typography experiment didn't pan out, it's filed in the backroom, but I thought I'd post it regardless.

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>>252855

Oh and here's another conceptual project, but I like the way this one is turning out. The end game is a brochure + webpage mock up for the portfolio. I'm intimidated to render a 3d version of this product design but I think the combo of sketch up and AI will get me there.

>>251851
Looks like a crash test dummy

>>251885
>>252429
>>252430

I really hope you guys are all being sarcastic.

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Creating a business card for myself (front/back). Would apprecriate feedback.

I'm not a graphic designer, but I enjoy doing things like this for fun

>>252878
Logo is bad, like really bad.


sans serif copy is fine but it lacks a fluid legibility on the back side.

Colors are ok but black would be better than grey considering your complimentary color choice doesn't benefit more from one to the other.

>>252878
>>252880

Oh and that little "1" has got to go.

>>252880
Thanks for the feedback, picking a font is proving to be tough

>>252882
It's a dot-to-dot drawing

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Hey guys, not a critique as such, but something I need to know.

Which horizontal line of colour-sequence suits best here, line 1 or line 2?

http://strawpoll.me/6607293

Answer in the 'poll if you'd be so kind, though if you want to mention something here too then that's cool.

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>>252521

Try some brighter colours

>>252248
what are halftone patterns and halftone?

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Doing a intro for a youtube channel. I wanted to keep it short since I personally hate long intros.

Hows my illustrating lookin? I think i gotta go over the animation again, try to make it a bit more organic.

>>252961
what did you animate it in?

i think the stars should look more randomized, they almost look like a pattern.

>>252962
After Effects

>>251464
Honestly, it looks good, but you should try using a different background. Not necessarily solid colored, but maybe something with an extremely subtle pattern, almost like recycled paper or something.

>>252864
Not bad! But I feel like I've seen that E somewhere else before. I can't put my finger on what.

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>>252961
Update

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Redesigned Leica logo for design class. Did it in indesign cause I don't know illustrator well enough.

>>252463
it doesnt feel like 1957 or a movie poster at all

>>252548
Not a fan of that typeface.
>>252550
Cool design. Something about where the black connects between the gears is throwing me off.
>>253148
I really dig it. I agree with the guy who said the stars looked too much like a pattern. Type looks really cool. For some reason it looks slightly off-center but that could be me. The way the type comes is seems a little bit weird to me and doesn't exactly match the rest of the animation. I'd say just try a couple of other ways to do that. Dope though!

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Book cover for Stephen King's IT

>>253164
9001/10

>>253167
Thanks mate, made my day

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touched up the USA basketball logo, is it an improvement?

>>253152
>logo
>done in indesign
dropped

>>252521
Condoms or tits/10

>>253264
So if I hadn't mentioned that detail, you would have given me genuine critique? Shame

>>253264
who cares, it'd be easy enough to vectorize whenever he wants to learn

>>253263
The flag is a field of blue with white and red strips. Your's is backwards.

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Design I'm doing for a school yearbook. Page 1 of 4, where the rest will list out different awards. Thoughts?

>>253148
Looks quite nice, good job. Nothing wrong with the typeface (that another reply pointed out).

>>253303
I like the graphics in the background. The type is positioned quite nicely, however it would look much better if you tracked the top line of text so that the "S" from speech lined up with the "A" from awards.

Personally, I'd most likely go for a solid colour for the text too. Probably black since it would contrast nicely with the background colours.

Will look nice with a little bit of tweaking

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>>253273
>current logo

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thoughts?

>>253537
cute style but a huge mess. everything is too close without fitting together nicely. space it all out a lot more unless you're going to hand-letter/vector that type to fit snugly and with some logic

Also, look at the thumbnail version here in the thread. You can see several areas are so pinched that they will bleed or anti-alias together if it's used at small sizes anywhere

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Im making posters for our Model UN club and I wanted to do a constructionist one. The explanation is that in a circle all of the outermost points are an equal distance away from the center, symbolizing the (apparent) equality of Nations at the UN. Can I make this poster better in any way? I think Its pretty good, but it feels like it's missing something.

>>252521
nips

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>>254383
Added some stuff

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Left or Right?
or should I start over
names and logos have been changed obviously

>>254389
Please don't do those lines in red. They're a good idea, but it's too bright for its role in the composition.

>>254383
>>254389
Terrible.

>>254394
Right is better, the two fonts on top are shit.
On the right one - justify the typography on the same line, you are riding the edges way too much.

>>254413
I know its terrible, but can it be improved? Im an amateur so I have no idea what I should be doing.
>>254406
Alright, should I make them a very saturated blue or something like that?

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What does it make you think of?

>>254431
The Orthodox Church of Helvetia from Sora no Woto

>>254413
Is Swiss font family finally dead? rip

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>>254431

>>252086
>>252108
I feel this video would be useful to someone in this guy's position. It shows the basic flow of iteration and forming, as well as progression and ideas.

https://youtu.be/zOPA0NaeTBk?t=396

>>252466
There's nothing to rate.

Also wrong board.

>>252906
The pink/purple to far too intense to start off with.
Line 1 is best, but I think B->G->P would look great too.

>>253148
Look brilliant. I would make two small changes though:

1) The first downward bounce of the text is too long for it look as natural/organic as you said before. The rest of the animation is fine, but fiddling with that first bounce down would help I think.

2) I agree with the others that the starts look too much like a pattern. I reckon you could solve this by changing the distances of some of the stars from the edge, and by having some within the fringing of the moon, too.

>>254431
Ginetta

>>253148
Nice but I think the background is too stale, you should brighten it when the circle pops probably.

>>251849

pre-mix jaegerbombs are a thing

>>252073

>nordic lights
>colombian coffee

wat

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>>254431

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>>254431
made me think of the google chrome logo

>>251465
I like where this is going. Try having the knockout part of the basketball curved as though to follow the curves of the eagle. Instead of presumably just being a white stroke set really big.

>>253263
Looks great. Minor change to make it better: have the top prong of the star reflected by creating an angular dip in the basketball line above it.

>>253537
It's unreadable and takes too long to determine what it is.

>>254394
People hold business cards with their left hand most of the time. If you pick Right, they will be awkwardly shifting to check the number while calling. Pick left anyway, it's more readable.

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Hoodie design i made for a class im taking.

>>253148
try again without a powerpoint preset for the text

>>254594
Why is the umbrella handle thinner than the letters? If you're doing a design where you incorporate other objects into words as letters, the weight has to be virtually the same if you don't want it to look garage-sale-tier. Nice concept though. This has a lot of potential to look very good.