/efg/: Erotic Fiction General

Typically we don't start new threads until the old one falls off the board, if still possible please delete this one OP.

If not, how do people get to 50k novels?
I like writing but my ability to piece together a string of scenes is shitty at best.
Should I just stick to writing light novels?

>>7380950
Thank you so much for the feedback!

The areas you pointed out did feel like they were lacking something so I'll try and improve them accordingly.

I'm tempted to skip the battle scene all together since it isn't as important to the story. I think having a scene before the battle, and then transitioning to the aftermath might work out alright?

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>>7378916

Anchoring for part 2 of Bel Chandra spanking story

Part 1:

https://pastebin.com/XtGin19A

If you need an outline:

Guy fights monsters with sword or gunfire
Belchandra does little help if at all during fight, preferring to laze around and chastise him for sloppy fight techniques n shit.
He comes up with a plan to separate her from her joy and pride: arms.
He does so, and outs the struggling lady onto his lap to spank her juicy blue jiggling ass red (or purple, whichever one works)
She swears and rants throughout the spanking while he simply enjoys the feeling of dominance and her blue ass.
He gets friskier as it goes on, fingering her asshole to her shock.
She bargains mercy, but he rejects and fucks her ass as punishment.
Throughout ass fuck he gropes and spanks her blue booty until he cums inside.

This is what I have in mind, but feel free to modify outline to your preference. Thank you so much for your hard work anon!

>>7381047
Eh, the last one is literally in the last spot on page 10, it's fine

For those who are looking for more erotic fiction with and without substantial plot, I'd like to highly recommend https://anonkun.com/
It's the go-to place for quests these days, many of them being 18+ or even smut-focused. A "quest" in this context is a story written by one (rarely several) authors where the players vote on the story progression options.
It can also be a good place to practice your writing and get appreciation from other people.
But as anywhere, some stories there are good, some are shit, and some are fucking dead oh god why please come back to meeeeeeeee.

Oh yes, and everything is allowed there. From chaste vanilla handholding to slut loli tentacle bestiality that would put Sparrow to shame.

>>7381088
I've been wanting to try a quest for a while now but for now, I think I'll practice with regular fiction a bit more before I do anything as interactive as a quest.

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https://pastebin.com/fB5SPcz0

I wanna turn this into a script (for some femanon to act out one day) but I'm not very good at script writing. Help would be nice.

>>7381043
>prev. thread: 7365349

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I've got a request for anyone in to writing slave stuff.

Story follows a recently captured slave girl in a Greek/Roman-inspired fantasy setting. She's young, about 16-17. She gets purchased at an auction along with a few others by a minor noble. Said noble is throwing a party and has invited much more powerful families. The slave girl is intended to be a party favor/part of the entertainment.
The sex stuff should focus on how she gets passed around. Guy A has her blow him while he's talking to a friend. Guy B later fucks her in the ass next to the water fountain. Two guys have an arm wrestling match and the winner takes her into a bedroom. One of the noble women gets creampied and has the slave girl clean her out. The owner chooses her and one of the male slaves to fuck as entertainment during dinner. A noble has her partnered with his virgin younger brother to "make him a man," all the while watching and offering advice and instruction.
That sort of thing.

The main points should be an auction scene, a scene with her getting cleaned and dressed for the party, none-to-subtle carrot & stick motivation to behave, and then the party.
The slave girl herself should be reasonably pretty and have some previous experience with sex, though she'd certainly out of her comfort zone. It would be cool to have her be foreign to the slavers' culture, but she knows enough of the language to get by (though specific orders can be unclear and confusing at times).
There shouldn't be any falling in love or even making a real connection with people. Alienation is the name of the game. That being said, her eventually deciding to roll with it and enjoy the experience since she has to go through with it anyway might work.

Also I just realized this would have to be really long so no one is realistically going to pick up the request.

To the CTF anon who sometimes drops by, I'd love to hear any ideas you might have.

>>7381043
Do /erg/ posters like the Globalized Fetish threads? There isn't one up, have they been banned or something?

>>7381297
I don't care for them much myself, but as far as I know they haven't been banned.

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Here's something to start the thread off with.

My writing has a thread of humiliation running through it, possibly extending from my public nudity fetish. It's come up in PWA, GFH, and even as early as the first entry in my G4E fanfiction.

But I recently saw a trailer for a movie called Girls Trip. I might have the wrong movie. In it, a woman is trying to get to another building to get to the bathroom. She uses a zipline, but gets stuck halfway across and pees on the crowd.

I find this neither erotic nor funny. But what's the difference? Is it because she's in danger? Is it because she can't retreat? Is it because a character in written work is simply more imaginary than a real actress and thus easier to get past? Is it that the movie labors to put someone in this position for a laugh?

What do you think?

>>7381321
Maybe the character herself was not relatable for you. Other than that, in general, even if I'm fetish X, I don't find every single piece of image or story appealing which revolves around it. It's like taste, I guess. Something works, something doesn't, even if they seemingly fall into the same category.

Like I'm all in for strapons and gentle femdom, role reversal etc., but the pegging scene in Deadpool was a total turn off for me.

>>7381088
> slut loli tentacle bestiality that would put Sparrow to shame.
Count me interested. Link?

>>7381421
https://anonkun.com/stories/a-shapeshifters-quest/SWNroDXr4KZigA6sc/home
I don't think you'll be disappointed.

>>7381441
Okay I'm definitely saving this to read later. This is some good stuff.

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>https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mzDVaKRApcg

Hello.

At 17,402 words (13,409 of which is taken up by the sex scene), this is my longest - and greatest - piece of erotic fiction I have ever written.

I humbly hope that when you read this, you'll enjoy every mite and mote of love I put into it.

Thank you.

Fun in the shower, rimming, and prone bone anal with a scylla wife: https://pastebin.com/V0CDdJtB

>Tags: m/f, monster girl, scylla, tentacles, anal, m on f rimming, prone bone, fun in the shower, vaginal and anal fingering, female orgasm, married couple, romance

Followup post inbound.

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>>7381595
Though I'm proud of it, I still have some misgivings that you all can help me on.

I feel like part of the reason my dialogue feels weak is that I put too much emphasis on the surrounding characters actions. Having the speech bogged down by expressions and actions - it might make the dialogue itself feel less 'punchy.' What do you think? Maybe it's just a matter of taste and style?

Other than that, I want to know if the shower tease is something not really suited for the medium of text. I've been told again and again that the most important aspect of smut is the emotion behind the actions, so it may seem like a lost cause to try and make something sexy and fun to read when 90% of it is description. What say you?

-

And if you don't mind me calling you out specifically, HCPG, I have two things to ask:

First, you mentioned in your Higher Than the Sun critique that I should avoid saying things "looked like" things, your reasoning being that it's as redundant as saying "in my opinion" before every sentence. I'm assuming this doesn't apply to when you're describing abstract objects for the reader, because saying that a lube syringe is literally a 'weird-looking pen' might be a little off-putting to said reader.

Second, you mentioned that I had some problems with repetition in the first part of Fat Bottomed Girls. Considering this sex scene is nearly three times as long, how badly did I handle it this time? There are a few points where I think I might have gone done the thing you told me not to done do, but it was sort of an effort to give a reminder to the reader. A little 'don't forget this sexy thing is still happening while you're thinking about this sexy thing!' What do you think?

How much would you say a normal-to-big dick weights?

>>7381595
>>7381598
Oh, and in case anyone cares, this is a follow-up to this story: http://pastebin.com/HEQmMThw

Tags for this one: m/f, octopus girl, monster girl, consensual recreational drug use, romance, tentacle on male (no penetration)

Okay, everyone.

It's been awhile since I was on this thread.

Last story I really liked and bothered to get into was Snek's "Worlds Apart"

So what's been at the top of the charts since then? Anything with Impreg and Pregsex by any chance?

>>7381662
Snek did a couple more, Snek 4, Highway to Krell, Or Die Alone.

>>7381595
>>7381598

My dick has diabetes now anon. I hope you're happy.

>>7381671
None of those have impreg or pregsex though.

>>7381624
I don't know what you are asking.

>>7381704
the physical weight of a slightly above-average penis

>>7381818

Erect or flaccid? Also put a length and girth to it.

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>>7381624
I assume it would be close to the same volume of water, or similar in weight to the same size of any kind of meat?

Take a condom, fill it with water or dog food, weight it, and when someone finds it, tell them it's a science experiment.

>>7381818

Never over a kg.

Why do you even want to know?

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>>7381884
So... to find that image I posted, I typed "futa scientist" into Google to get a thematic picture.

And this came up.

This is a 26-page short story that is sold for Kindle on Amazon for $2.99. Clicking the author's name brings up some more short stories, and sixteen other authors under the "Customers Also Bought Items By." Most of them are lady names, with a few dudes in there like R. U. Wild and Brock Spurtz.

There is a LOT of futa smut on Amazon. I really didn't think there would be. Some of the listings I saw are really short, like 6K words. Now, PWA is 5K words and is popular, but... would that be worth three bucks all by itself?

I am encouraged because it seems writing about this isn't as unpopular as I imagined. But then again... I'm also discouraged because... I don't imagine these sell very well. Is that what we're doing? Just putting perverted thoughts to paper to barely scrape a few cents together, along with hundreds or possibly thousands of other perverts writing the same stuff? Are these writers cynical or deluded? Both?

I should just focus on my stories and my commission. But if these people like futa stuff, I've recently hit the 50K mark on GFH. Could they even handle so much futa action?

Snek, you've put stuff on Amazon, right? What's been your experience? Anyone else put things up for Kindle?

>>7381923
Nah I've never been able to put anything up on Amazon so far because of payment issues.
They refuse to do business via Paypal and so the only options are bank transfer and check which I don't want to do for privacy reasons.

>>7381923

Best you can do is try and see what happens.

>>7381929
Are you afraid Amazon will leak your personal information to your family and everyone will know you write porn on the side?
Come on man.

>>7381929
>>7381932
Nah, I'm kinda with Snek on this one.

Where do you put the e-books, then?

>>7381938
I imagine anything that isn't the digital equivalent of selling your book out of the back of your car will need your information to pay (and tax) you.

>>7381598
You are correct on the first point. That is an obvious exception. I'll answer the second point when I get to reading it. I am unfortunately on a business trip, so I'll get to it as soon as I can. Despite being terribly critical of everything, I rather like your stuff.

>>7381932
Everyone important to me knows already, but there are a lot of regional issues with banking and taxes that I just don't want to deal with at this stage.

>>7381938
I give them away for free.
I host them on Patreon for convenience but anyone can access and download them, and I provide the links on other sites too where they'll let me.

Anything with shapeshifters or anyone made of anything like snakes?

https://pastebin.com/G923XzTs

>PE on a plane.

Guys, I'm trying to learn how to write smut. I tossed this up with zero editing to know if you guys see anything wrong with the way I write on a basic level.

Help?

>>7382645
>PE on a plane
>didn't title it "Trouser Snakes on a Plane"

Come on now.

Also, it's "on cue," not "queue."

This is fine for a first attempt. It's very frenetic, but it also seems like it's dancing between first-and-third person, in that it's written from third-person perspective, but we're intimately connected to his thoughts like a first-person book.

>>7382756
>but we're intimately connected to his thoughts like a first-person book
Isn't that really fucking common though.

>>7382942
I'll put in some thoughts or whatever that the person might be experiencing, even though I write in third-person almost exclusively, but this story had the energy of the speed of thought somehow.

>>7382645
1. Definitely needs some editing work. Obvious spelling and grammar errors abound. It's a hard read. Also, why is all of it spaced out like it is? Solid paragraphs would help.

2. Stay in one perspective. Usually thoughts are labeled as such.

3. It's not great to make your protagonist sound like a complete shitheel from the get-go. I mean, if that's your kink, go for it, but I already didn't enjoy him after five sentences in.

4. 'jumbo salami'

Final Rating: Don't write with a boner. I mean sure, some people can and do, but they come back and edit it to be coherent for another reader. This really smacks of what you said - zero editing. You could use more description as well, really put the readers in the scene.

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3000 word update, new content at “Move over a little"

Or Die Alone:
https://pastebin.com/WYh3N6HP
>no tags yet

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>>7383173
>Final Rating: Don't write with a boner.

He's right. You should write with your hands.

So it turns out snek was missing the major outline I sent him this whole time. Somehow, using nothing but a few general scene descriptions and a handful of global did and don'ts, he stayed remarkably close the outline and only had a few key deviations(mostly in how the characters interacted).

For future reference when commissioning a writer, save and send all your commission details separately and do not be me and expect snek/your writer to magically remember one email early in the chain of 35+ emails. Whoops.

>>7381682
Not to worry; I got just the thing for that: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hJNBImo7Xu4

>>7381993
Good to hear, good to hear, hope your travels go well, and http://i.4cdn.org/wsg/1493160343766.webm .

>>7381696

Is he ever going to do any with those tags?

Are there any stories out right now that are as good as "World's Apart"?

Any good stories with Impreg and/or Pregsex at all.

>>7383699
none of his aliens can crossbreed with humans so probably never and I'm pretty sure he stated at one point pregger stuff isn't one of his fetishes.

>>7383708

Figures.

>>7381595
Did you use Waifu2x to make this picture?

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Holding out hope for workplace harrasment of Chatalie
>>7372270
>>7378343

>>7383795
Yes.

>>7383699
He doesn't do impreg and has shown negative amounts of interest in doing anything else involving the kinda stuff he did in worlds apart
There's one guy who's into impreg but he's here very infrequently
Speaking of which, hey broodlord, if you're around, how's the werewolves story going?

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>>7383708
>>7383930

Wow. Really? Everyone made Snek seem more awesome than he really was.

Oh well. Fuck him, then. Royally.

>>7384035
Well I WAS gonna suggest you list what you liked from worlds apart so I could advise you as to fics with those things and/or suggestions as to how to do a request with them that'd be more likely to get picked up, but then you has to go and be an ass

>>7384035
He's not that good, he just has extremely vocal fans and panders to the ubiquitous femdom fetish. If you want impreg and pregsex, better to make the request to the thread as a whole in the hopes that someone else picks it up

>inb4 Shiny Umbreon tries to justify paying literally hundreds of dollars for smut again by way of his usual Snek ass-kissing

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>>7383930
>shown negative amounts of interest in doing anything else involving the kinda stuff he did in worlds apart

Could have probably gotten more and better vanilla stories out of him if people had been more constructive, now he's sworn off virgins/vanilla for good and we have nobody else taking requests for it.

>>7384174
The criticism was constructive, he's just a prima donna who's spent too much time being coddled by sycophants and flatterers.

>>7384176
If that's true or not, you've still cut off your nose to spite your face, and now we have zero people doing vanilla requests as opposed to one.

>>7384188
What kinds of vanilla are we talking about here?

>>7384069

Inb4? You realize the current fic he's been posting is an active commission from me right?

Also, I'm guessing youre the same OMG SHINY PAYS HUNDREDS OF DOLLARSS!!1111 guy from the last time I commissioned him, and youre just as wrong about it now as you were back then. Current forecast for total cost is $170, and the last one was under 200 also. Maybe the third time's the charm?

>>7384176
Snek responded to any constructive criticism he was given, but most of the criticism was people just yelling at him for not writing it how they wanted him to. Snek admit he fucked up on the plot (I believe several times at that), but it did little to stem the constant whining and demanding.

>>7384192
Evidently the type that makes sweeping generalizations and blames other people for its failure to make a request that isn't "write something with vanilla in it for me, and no I'm not going to give you something you might actually be able to work with".

You need to provide a story to go with your sex acts of choice, or you may as well be watching regular porn.

>>7384202
No like... I'm literally asking what kinds of requests. I'm not the anon you were talking to.

>>7384200
Mostly because he never gave enough shits to show he cared by rewriting the damn thing as was requested. Responding to constructive criticism does involve actually going back and making changes that take it into account, not just nodding and smiling while doing absolutely nothing like he did.

>still bragging about paying for porn that everyone else gets for free

Yes, we know you have more money than sense, stop acting like that's a good thing. Does he pay you to defend every single thing he does too?

>>7384209
I dunno, I haven't seen any vanilla requests for ages. No wonder nobody's offered to write any.

>>7384214
>people ask for a fic where a Borealen grew up on earth and had a human BF but has to return to her home planet and comes back has a full Borealen to reclaim her human bf from all those years ago
>he wrote exactly that
I still don't get why people were surprised when he wrote a Borealen acting like a Borealen. That's what I expected the story to be like and that's what we got.

>>7384232
Because the whole gimmick was that she had near zero exposure to their culture, and so to make her into another snu-snu animal Snek cooked up the perpetually unconvincing "it's all in the genes, they can never, ever act differently than their stereotype" bullshit everyone specifically wanted him to AVOID.

He had the perfect chance to give the species some depth and create a loving relationship free from the dominance/submission bullshit that he can't seem to let go of, but instead he sacrificed depth on the altar of his femdom fetish and then played the victim when he was called out for it. Why wouldn't the vanilla fans be sickened by that?

>>7384237
All his stories are really vanilla how much more did you want him to go? And it's weird how you keep acting like Borealens are incapable of love just because it isn't written the exact way you wanted to be written and their way of expressing it different from humans a bit.

>>7384242
Vanilla in all ways, including expressing love like a normal human being and not a borealean. That's where he failed, and where he refuses to admit he failed.

Dominance and submission have no place in vanilla and never will. Where can love thrive when both parties are obsessed with who's the one in charge? Vanilla discards the dom/sub dynamic- both parties are equal and treat each other equally. If he had known that, he would have never taken the request to start with and left it to someone who can actually understand true love.

>>7384257
That's a very narrow view on "true love" and you also come off has just wanting two humans fucking instead of a Borealen. This really comes off has you're bitter he didn't do exactly what you wanted him to do. Regardless how feel about the story, I, and many others, got what we expected out of it.

>>7384266
Let's ignore the fact that Liz was a Borealan in name alone due to having near zero exposure to their hyper-competitive shithole of a culture, because you'll handwave it away anyhow.

That may be so, but I'm not the only one who felt that way..His definition of vanilla is too far away from what I and other people wanted, and so if anyone wants to make vanilla requests they'd be better off asking someone other than him. So, is that other anon going to voice his actual request or have you scared him off?

>>7384242
>really vanilla
>Exclusively dom/sub sexual relationships
>Disinterest in partner's personality
>Frequent violence
>Blatant manipulation
>Aliens
>Size difference
What exactly is your definition of 'vanilla'?

>>7384214

You have it backwards my friend. I pay him, not the other way around. And yes, everyone gets that porn for free. I'm not just ok with that, I like that a ton and it's one of my favorite parts of commissioning stuff. I love knowing the fact that I helped bring to life art/writing people can genuinely enjoy for free. Sure, I could take that money and put it in some stocks or a CD and more money, and I even agree that the fact that I waste money on stuff that doesnt benefit me financially means I'm bad at money.

But, I don't give a shit. Enjoy the free porn if it suits your fancy.


>>7384272
>>7384274

You two clowns are both forgetting that Snek admitted he misunderstood the intentions for the relationship and outright said he did it wrong. He knows it did not meet the requirements that were generally expected, you're acting like he went EVERYONE IS WRONG I DID THIS PERFECTLY over and over.

>>7384279

Derp, 4chanx extension is randomly dropping my trip

>>7384283
>>7384279
Then why did he never go back and change it? If he really meant what he said, he would have gone and fixed it like everyone was asking. That's literally all he would have needed to do to get people off his ass. If anything, that makes him look worse since it means he knew he made a mistake but just didn't care enough to fix it.

>>7384290


Because it was an unpaid request. He moved on to do more promised requests that people were waiting for and then a commission.

Tell me you would bend over backwards to appease people who were yelling at and insulting you after you invested time and effort into something for them to enjoy for free, especially when you had people who were much more patient and also willing to give you money still waiting in line. If you honestly believe that, you are a lying sack of shit.

>>7384290
One set of people wanted that, not everyone. Why ruin it for the people who were perfectly happy with it?
He also did it for free, it's not like anyone had veto rights.

>>7384292

Fucking hell this thing needs to remember my shit

>>7384272
>ear zero exposure
Did you miss the part where she spent several years on her home planet surrounded by Borelaen culture and had adapt to it?
>>7384274
The femdom he writes is really light and gentle femdom when it comes to polars. The character personality bits could use some extra work. The violence is rarely sexual and at most just barely above hickies when it is brought into play. Ursi was really the only manipulative one at first, but she dropped that after she realized he wasn't has important as she thought and then generally just like being with him/interacting. Borealens are pretty vanilla aliens even polars and they're really not that big. None of the sexual acts have been extreme stuff and all the fetishes involved are really tame. Hell, most of the stories written back when we were on /tg/ were much less vanilla than his stuff.
>>7384290
It's 10,000+ story you want him to rewrite and he's been swamped under commissions pretty much since then and the ones being paid for are of course going to take priority.

>>7384292
>>7384295
Not only was it free, he also had art commissioned, so he would have lost money on World's Apart, two character digital paintings can't be cheap.
I don't even know anyone else who buys at for their stories.

>>7384292
As a matter of fact, I would have, because I'm not a smut profiteer and would prefer to make everyone happy. Or do you think that they would have kept complaining after I specifically fixed things to appease them?

The people who ostensibly want to give me money surely would have the patience to wait a little longer while I show my willingness to actually give people what they want, as opposed to giving them the message that they don't matter unless they pay me.

>>7384298
It's just one small segment of the story that needs fixing, not all of it. Don't make it sound like more work than it is in reality. Not like it matters since he shits out thousands of words a day.

>>7384305
all his patreon money is used for those drawings and he's barely getting over $100 a month

You shitters should just call this the Snekguy and D fiction general, they're the only people whose fics you care about anyway.

>>7384307


Well hey, you're a lying sack of shit. You MIGHT have done that if the people who wanted the changes were asking nicely, but no fucking way if they were all being whiny assholes who were insulting you for not doing it right.

>>7384310
Not into dickgirl shit so I don't care for any of his stuff and I've skipped several of snek's stuff due containing nothing I care for. We have other writefags still around, but most seem to write mostly niche stuff.

>>7384307
He put off paid work to do a free request for /efg/ and you call him a profiteer? That just doesn't make a lick of sense.
I forget how long the story was exactly but it was fucking long.

>>7384310
What did D ever do?

>>7384316
>Would you have done it?
>>Yes
>No you're wrong

Why is this always the only response you have?

>>7381923
GFH Could be a serial short story, or multiple Chuck Tingle books.

>>7384327


Because you're constantly wrong.

>>7384331
>Because I have no other arguments and am too narcissistic to consider that people don't all act like me.

Fixed. Unlike some people I can mention, I don't care if people are asking nicely or not, a flaw is a flaw. If it needs fixing, I'll gladly fix it and certainly wouldn't have allowed things to escalate to that level of hostility in the first place. Let's not forget that people were being "whiny assholes" because their attempts at being polite were ignored or put down by snek's parasitic band of bootlickers, and that you were one of them.

>>7384341

That's hilarious coming from you, someone who's so amazingly narcissistic that you honestly believe you would do that shit for free for people who were being shitheads to you, while you had other polite requested and paid commissioners waiting in line for you.

By all means, tell us more about your fantasy world, I'm morbidly curious.

>>7384341
In other words people who enjoyed the story as it was written and didn't want it to be changed to suit your own preferences?

>>7381923
I buy alot of transgender erotic fiction.
Usually i use Amazon but a few authors use smashwords as well and Sixpack uses lulu.com maybe those are options though i bet they're avoiding paypal to cut down on fraud.

>>7384349
It's this thing called realizing you fucked up and being willing to own up to it as a show of good faith. Do you really, truly think the people being shitheads were doing that because they hated me as a person and not out of disappointment?

If he had only done that, those "shitheads" would have been his staunchest allies. But I guess that's too complex for your black-and-white world where everyone either loves or hates Snek to handle.

>>7384350
He could have compromised by making two separate versions of that scene as he did in the past, but he didn't. That alone would have fixed everything.

>>7384363

I don't give a rats ass about why they did it, if people can't act like mature adults when theyre getting free stuff from me, they can go get fucked regardless of what some narcissist on 4chan thinks. That's is how a real person is going to react, too bad if that doesnt fit in your fantasy world.

>>7384376
Perhaps you should start acting like a mature adult before you tell others to do what you refuse to do, then. You've been a gigantic asshole to everyone since the first time you've shown up on the threads, and quite frankly I'm not sure how Snek can even tolerate you.

>>7384380


I know, because my behavior does not comply with your fantasy world and so you legitimately can't see why he keeps on working with me again and again. I know I won't ever be able to get you to see anything but what you want to see, but there's always hope.

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>>7384389
Because you tell him everything he wants to hear and because he loves his ego being stroked. Of course he's going to want to work with you when you worship the ground he treads on.

Pic related, snek and you in a nutshell.

>>7384389
You mean hope for you not to act like a smug, self-satisfied jackass who can't understand the concept of doing the right thing because it's right? I agree.

And thanks for showing everyone you shitpost with your trip off. "4chanX left it off", my ass..

>>7384376
> when they're getting free stuff from me
I'm sorry, I didn't realize you were the one who wrote all of that. You're just his human ATM as far as the thread cares. An incredibly egotistical, rude, self-righteous ATM, so shut up and give him his money so he can be more useful than you could ever hope to be.

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>It's another "Shiny vs that one guy who hates Snek" episode.

>>7384404
>one guy

>>7384404
Meh. I'm sick of it. It fills threads with vomit and makes it harder going forward to accurately criticize or praise writing decisions that snek makes.

>>7384405
>implying that it's not Shitty that they really hate

At least Snek can write.

>>7384405
If it's several people then they have an extremely small pool of insults.

>>7384416
You don't need a thesaurus to point out that someone's being a hypocrite and a jerk.

>>7383382
YOU should write a spinoff to GFH where Merri teases Selena until she agrees to cum inside her. Or a wet dream Selena has where she doesn't have a refractory period, and can cum infinitely. OR about a "futa supremacy" scene she did in the past where she was supposed to make the guy cum without getting off herself. She cums accidentally while he's fucking her. Unintentional orgasms are +.

>>7384404
>>7384405
Implying shinys not the only one tired of the same stupid bullshit.

I just want to masturbate but, half of the thread has to be about how some whiny autist hates snek.

>>7384406
Well that's why he won't do vanilla anymore, people polarized the discussion until it became a black and white issue and forced him to take a stance that he probably wouldn't have taken if they had been more constructive.

>>7383708
>>7384035
>>7383930
>Write muh fetish.

>>7384394
Excuse me sir, I shitpost constantly with or without my trip, I'm just getting used to the settings again after going through a reinstall.

>>7384404


Fuck it, I went to go play LoL with friends instead. At the end of the day, they're wrong and there's no changing that. They can shitpost, I can commission, and the cycle continues.

>>7384435
You know, if you would just keep your mouth shut then maybe they wouldn't be so compelled to try and troll you. You're a veritable magnet for them.

>>7384462

It's fine man, this is 4chan. Trolling comes with the territory, if anyone shows up around here and can;t deal with being trolled, theyre in the wrong place.

>>7384409
And I haven't forgotten about you, random anon who quickly became my #1 fan. When I write again, I'm dedicating it to you.

>>7384328
How long ARE the Chuck Tingle books, anyway?

This story turned out to be pretty plot heavy and fluffy for a /size/ story, so I thought I might post it here.

First Day: https://pastebin.com/WymuuY6v

tags: (shrunken male; gentle giantess; mouth play; soft vore/endo; insertion)

Comments/criticism are always appreciated, thank you for reading.

>>7384829
Judging from the Goodreads and Amazon descriptions, pretty short.

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>>7384781
>this again

Didn't you already post this in this thread? Did it get deleted?

>>7384322
>What did D ever do?

I write, every day, so even though I'm a slow writer, I usually have something to contribute every few weeks or so.

I'd really rather not be folded into this argument between Shiny and whoever else. I don't actually get that much feedback from here, and I don't want to be used as a lever against someone else.

>>7384362
>I buy alot of transgender erotic fiction.

You ever read my stuff?

>>7384423
Those ideas don't really fit where I'm going, since Selena is very disciplined, but... well, we'll get to it eventually.

>>7384493
Oh it's not you I'm worried about, it's everyone else since you keep provoking them.

Didn't someone here actually offer to rewrite the offending bits of worlds apart? What happened to that?

Are recommendations for stories that contain some decent amount of:
A) Fluffy stuff like handholding? Smut is fine, I'm just asking like as a somewhat important component of the story.
&
B) Some degree of language barrier between characters.

I've already read that Outpost story by uhh snekguy was it? Pretty good, fit B) more than A) but it was close enough. Anything else on the list like that? I remember REALLY enjoying Chapter 1 of that Mothgirl story which was basically A) and B) to the max but the dude who posted it hasn't updated anything in ages.

>>7385039
Most fics only have one or the other, and B is practically unheard of.

>>7385071
OK, then any good recs for A)-heavy fics?

>>7385080
Love Coils by Cynical Writefag is one of the best for that.

>>7384054

*Sigh* Fine.

I liked World's Apart because it was vanilla and cute as fuck. Human getting it on with a ferocious looking yet actually gentle fem makes me expand like to other. The scene where they make love before she leaves was the real good stuff.

It was friggin cute how they loved each other and the slight awkwardness of figuring out how each other's bodies work.

If nothing else, it was just written very well with good pacing and grammar that didn't make me want to rip my eyes out.

I like to imagine they went on to elope without her parents permission and have kids. (Usually Dom from monstergirl with swollen belly because of usually sub human male is my fetish) That is my headcanon, so deal with it anyone who hates it.

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>>7385039
Is that a request? I like fluffy romance, and once I hade a foreigner character, so I might look into it if you would like (and if the time allows).

>>7385039
Mask has a story, The Voyage Home I believe it is called, that has good language barrier content. Not so much is the column A area, though it does get sweeter near the end. A bit.

>>7381043
How are you liking the game so far Nier writer?

>>7385137
Spoilers ahead:

I love it and I hate it. It has a very well written story. Like how basically the Adam and Eve segment foreshadows 9S story arch and other structural things similar to this. I love how Taro is a master baiter, who lures you in with 2B, then it turns out she's not the main star of the show after all. It's also wonderful how you, the player fall in love with her, then she not only dies before you, but you watch every single second she suffers before it. I've read plenty reports in /v/ threads where guys confessed that after a while they just simply couldn't look at 2B as a sex object. That's just wonderful. I love how depressing everything is in the game. Even though I'm still not over it emotionally. If there would be more games like this, then the industry could be saved.

Hopefully I'll finish the story in the upcoming days. It's around ~6000 words now. Sorry for the wait, and I really hope I can live up to your expectations.

>>7385158
You take your time. Just write what comes to you. Have you gotten ABCD yet?

If so and ONLY if so then go here

https://pastebin.com/zCF57Lxq

>>7385173
Not the nier writer but that reminds me I need to get that fourth ending

Guys.... Please. Please get back on topic. If you're having longwinded, well written arguments with people, you're feeding the trolls; you might be feeding them with class and well founded counter criticism, but you're feeding the trolls.

Stop it. Get back on topic, stop arguing. Shiny, Snek, all their fans, you know better.

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>>7385173
I've seen E as well.

Apparently I've missed that side quest. I was rushing at some point because I was too hyped by the main story. I plan to start it from all over again some time soon.

The story is basically settled before the time of the game. There won't be 2B manning up, but if you like the end result I might write more, because there's definitely plenty of material and interesting characters here. Like Devola and Popola, A2 and the pod, T-shirt date, and also the part you've mentioned.

>>7385185
It's not a side quest. It's part of a weird mini-companion novel. I don't think the whole thing is translated. And remember. Write the story you want to tell, not one you think I want to hear. I can't wait to read it. :)

>>7385177
Snek hasn't actually posted since his last update yesterday.

>>7385081
Not bad although the writing leave a little to be desired, might just be a question of taste on my part though.

>>7385122
Sure! I'm more of a fan of the idea when it's used with regards to alien/fantasy creatures but all's good!

>>7385125
Gonna' check it out next, thanks for the rec!

>>7385177

Hey, be nice. I did in fact stop to go play LoL, I knew I was causing a shitstorm. Also snek literally never even posted anything after the update lol

>>7384852
>Didn't you already post this in this thread? Did it get deleted?

Voila. Check that out. The request got deleted.

I didn't think the mods would actually do that. Keep that in mind, people who want to repost requests every thread.

A lot of people seem to be getting their requests deleted. What's up with that?

>>7385565
Probably the ones that spammed their requests a dozen times.

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>>7381074
>>7378916 →
*lights the Ten signal*

Yo Anon, wanted to know if there's been any updates on part II of the Bel-Chandra story? It's just been a few days and admit I'm getting pretty anxious. I understand if irl shit's gonna take you away from focusing on it for awhile though.

>>7385494
Holy shit it's a Christmas miracle in April

Assuming it was only the spam requests that got hit

>>7385588
I'm the OR of the request, not the guy writing it.
I assume exams are being a bitch and are getting in writefag's way at best.

>>7385602
yeah that's true, and obviously that shit takes priority over writing for horny anons.

This thread has got me wondering, how do you really define 'vanilla' in a smut context?
I feel like we're just going to have more debacles and disappointments unless we can get a working definition together

>>7385694
I define it as sex with mutual love or at least mutual lust, with everyone's consent, no particularly out-there kinks involved (i.e. no futa, nothing too blatantly inhuman though some things like monstergirls or aliens can be fine to an extent, definitely no real harm to anyone involved beyond maybe scratching or hair pulling), no dominance/submission stuff outside the specific context of the sex act, and so on.

In short, it's easier to define vanilla by what it isn't.

>>7385694
Here's my best go at one

Vanilla is synonymous with romantic in this thread's usage, so I'm going from that

Vanilla needs the feelings of the two characters involved to be
>strong
>sincere
>mutual
>romantic
>pure of intent
I would also say that vanilla involves the characters knowing or getting to know each other, and developing feelings BEFORE they have sex.
Monogamy and sexual/emotional fidelity are also inherent to the vanilla concept
Although the above points already essentially imply it, genuinely consensual sex is obviously also part of what makes vanilla vanilla
Anything I missed?

>>7385694

I think the most accepted definition is "no weird shit and a loving couple having wholesome sex"

>>7385713
Even casual fuckbuddies or a one-night stand qualify as vanilla to some extent, since even if it's purely physical at least it's a mutual thing.

In some people's views, it also means there's no fetishes more extreme than stuff most people IRL wouldn't consider too weird. (Futa is one of those things, unfortunately for the more traditional /d/eviants reading this.)

>>7385749
Maybe, but in the way it's used here it always means romantic as well. I don't think I've seen one non-romantic request use that word here

>>7385694
Are we talking vanilla sex or vanilla relationship? Because those are two different things.
Like, a futa girl and her trap childhood best friend engaging in tender mutual-first-time sodomy after confessing their feelings for each other would certainly be the latter, but not the former, and casual oral sex between two strangers would be the former but not the latter

>>7385749
I think futa could be considered vanilla on /d/ at least, as long as it's the only fetish in the story and it's otherwise a simple romance. Of course, the percentage of people who don't like futa will complain, but those who don't mind would likely still count it as vanilla.

>>7385759
See the post above yours, when vanilla is involved most people want both the sex and the relationship to be vanilla.

>>7385761
>when vanilla is involved most people want both the sex and the relationship to be vanilla.
Do they though? I've seen a LOT of requests involving non-vanilla characters having a vanilla relationship, it practically seems to be this thread's favourite thing

>>7385763
In their eyes, as long as the characters follow a humanoid body plan (e.g. two legs, two arms, one head with a discernible face, genitals like ours or at least compatible with ours, etc) they're vanilla. On the other hand, I also have a stricter definition of vanilla than they do.

>>7385763
I think when people say "Vanilla" what they really want is "French Vanilla" in the MTG sense. In Magic card design lingo, a French Vanilla creature is a creature with exactly one simple ability and nothing else. So in porn terms we could say "French Vanilla porn" would have one non-extreme fetish and no more.
>Futa and Vanilla
>Monstergirl and Vanilla
>Trap and Vanilla
>Size and Vanilla
Would all be valid combinations while adding rape, mindbreak, or breathplay would not be compatible with the concept of "Vanilla" (or at least it would be a REAL tough sell). Similarly, mixing in too many fetishes would automatically make it too complex to be considered vanilla.

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>>7385763
>Do they though? I've seen a LOT of requests involving non-vanilla characters having a vanilla relationship

I think that's almost everything I've written for /efg/... futas love futas, slimegirl loves human, catgirls love catgirls, croc-girl loves a dumbass...

To be vanilla, it seemingly has to have 'vanilla' characters and 'vanilla' romance, but even perhaps 'vanilla' sex? No feltching or candle wax or buttplugs with horse tails?

Maybe there should be a point scale for how outside the norm something really is in those three criteria. But then again, nobody will agree how 'out there' their fetish is, because we all think our fetishes are normal.

>>7384349
>I won't fix something because the people who mention it signaled it insultingly
Don't be that guy. That's a bad thing to bring up even caught in an argument.

>>7385694
For me, anything that involves two consenting reciprocating parties and no specific fetishes, with the caveat that trap, futa, and same-sex does not disrupt the "vanilla" tag.
That definition is flexible.

>>7385960
I just find it strange that people would come here for that, of all places.
I don't know the state of the other writefag generals on the site, but surely /h/ would be more suited to that? Or are we just far more active?

No update to "Or Die Alone" tonight?

>>7385969
This isn't a /d/ thread. Not a purebreed one. It's a /tg/ exile, and /tg/ already is pretty centric on the vien diagram of this website.
For a more explicit answer, /h/ is a radioactive wasteland with bottom of the barrel average quality. I mean, so is 95% of /d/- or the h-boards at large- so that doesn't mean a whole lot, but as far as I know; not only is there no other good lewd writefaggotry general, but on top of that even mild stuff futa-on-male or trap on trap (it doesn't even have to include more out there or hardcore elements) would get me kicked out of /h/.

Even when you browse the numerous /d/ futa/trap/mg threads you get 95% garbage art. This is all the proof you need to know that you this isn't really the good place to discuss this stuff.

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>>7385976
It's on the way, was super busy today.
Got another 600 words to go.

>>7385969
There are no other active writefag generals which would tolerate this thread, and /h/ is pretty strict on "if it's not an imagedump, we don't want it".

>>7385976
2000 word update, minimal editing because I have to go to bed edition. New content at "How long do we still have to go?"

Or Die Alone:
https://pastebin.com/WYh3N6HP
>no tags yet

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>>7385588
i'm alive but my school workload is currently doing its best to change that, so progress has been much slower than i would like. i'll try to get some more work in on pt ii tonight though; rest assured i won't leave you hanging

>>7384852
>Those ideas don't really fit where I'm going, since Selena is very disciplined, but... well, we'll get to it eventually.

Damn. Unintentional orgasms are some of the hottest things on the planet. It's your job to not to explode in someone, and they're so hot that you do anyway.

You should write a spinoff about how Selena got that good. Hopefully she endured a lot of accidental orgasms and gave a ton to other futas.

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>>7386232
I figured as much, and yeah, school work is a bitch so i feel, and I know that's more important. I really appreciate the response though! Looking forward to it whenever you're able to finish.

Here's a writing challenge.

>Mon Musu universe.
>Homestay program advanced to America by order of President Trump and Shinzo Abe.
>His base demands Awoos!
>Smith is sent over to help with the difficult transfer as a punishment for not doing any work.
>The first guy she meets with is really nice.
>Happens to also be into coffee and makes Smith some really great French Press.
>Picks a blend, grinds the beans, and does all the tricks like stirring the coffee before pressing it.
>She still likes Darling's coffee better, but she feels kind of guilty about the effort he went through.
>Decides to give him a really easy Homestay and get on her way rather than fucking with him.

What would the easiest MG be for a single guy to house?

>>7386483
>>7386527
Y'all're going to need a lot more coherent and detailed of a pitch if you want even the slightest hope of getting picked up and written

>>7386697
meh I give up

>>7386699
there's always the option to write it yourself

Here's a request:

Tags - M/F, Hound Archon x Bronze Dragon, vanilla.

D&D 3.5 mentioned Hound Archon Paladins could select a bronze dragon as a mount/partner in the war against the hells. As this puts the dragon in the juvenile/ young adult area it seems reasonable to get a story of two being forging a relationship, with attraction and awkward first times and all that good stuff.

Alternitavly, and advanced / epic Hound Archon goes a size up, making the dragon max out Very Old for a more "experienced" encounter and more risqué activities.

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>>7385271
>the writing leave a little to be desired
I apologize if my work didn't fully meet your expectations. What was wrong with it if you dont mind me asking for a bit of feedback?

Why do some people's requests keep disappearing?

>>7387196
Because they've been repeated so many times that they've started getting treated as spam, I guess.

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2000 word update, new content at “No, I wanted to explore planets, not fight on them.”

Or Die Alone:
https://pastebin.com/WYh3N6HP
>no tags yet

So... anybody working on anything interesting?

>>7387342
I'm continuing my habit of writing a couple thousand words of total crap and deleting it after to slowly get gud
I'm also working on outlining in detail the reverse trap western story I'm planning to write when I'm finally something resembling decent

>>7387032
Shit man it wasn't /bad/ and I can't really put my finger on it per say. Like I guess I felt it moved /really/ fast, like whiplash fast at points? Kids being kids, cute declarations of love, phone rings BOOM WE'RE MOVING TOMORROW GET PACKED. Felt weird.

Don't apologize, it was still miles above most of the stuff I end up trying, there was just something about the style that didn't quite click for me.

>>7381047
>how do people get to 50k novels?

didn't see this till now

I just hit 50K in Grande Futapest Hotel, a project I've been working on for... three months?

If you told me I'd be writing that fast a few years ago (and that's not really THAT fast), I'd be astonished.

Just keep writing. You'll get faster, or at least you'll find the subjects you like writing about.

>I like writing but my ability to piece together a string of scenes is shitty at best.
>Should I just stick to writing light novels?

Stick to whatever you want to write right now. If you have a choice between writing and not writing, choose to write. Even if it's stupid or it sounds bad, do it anyway. Get as many words and stories behind you as you can, and you'll get better.

>>7387335
Cuddles incoming.

>>7387477
>didn't see this till now
Me neither lol.

>>7381047
I set myself a daily quota, if you write 2000 words every day for a month, you can produce a 60,000 word story.
It's all little steps, you write a little at a time and eventually it all adds up.

>>7387359
>reverse trap
So a totally normal guy?

>>7388737
reverse trap is a girl pretending to be a guy

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>>7388740
May I ask what is a difference between a tomboy and a reverse trap?

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Requesting someone write a story where Mari from Evangelion pees herself.

>>7388786
Are you just going to cycle through every character you know?

>>7388785
A reverse trap looks and behaves the part, a tomboy 'merely' behaves the part.

>>7388787
I'm not the other guy.

>>7388790
That seems unlikely.

>>7388785
The girl needs to be seen has a boy for whatever reason, think Mulan

>>7381297
I'm partial to them, but they tend to be difficult to actually write into a story unless you know what the plot will be right from the start.

>tfw the only smut you feel like writing is so gruesome you'll never be able to show it to anyone

>>7389253
You'll never be able to top XS in that respect, believe me.

>>7389259
Not familiar with that name, care to elaborate?

>>7389263
Xiombarg's Storyteller. A veritable master of erotic horror, with emphasis on the horror part. I'd try to describe some of XS' works, but...they really have to be read to be believed. You can find those works on the master list.

Just don't look at them if you've eaten recently, that's all I'm comfortable saying about them.

>>7389268
O-ho, challenge accepted. I've seen some nasty ones in my time, let's see how these compare...

>>7389268
Her ork x elf yuri loli story is cute.

>>7389268
Huh, these first two I've read (Snake Dance and Xenophile) each contain elements of the story I have written that's too gruesome to show, and the one that I'm thinking of that's too gruesome to show.

Most vexing.

>>7389326
On the bright side, this means that they can in fact be shown if you remember those were shown on 4chan too.

>>7389328
Not really. Neither of these contain any snuff.

>>7388785
It's
>she sure acts a lot like a boy
Vs
>Shit, I thought she was a dude

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2500 word update, pallin' around edition, new content at "Could he actually be enjoying her company?"

Or Die Alone:
https://pastebin.com/WYh3N6HP
>no tags yet

>>7389104
I've never actually understood the premise of the threads. I see the name, and move on.

>>7389367

Gonna need a link to the source of that image right there

>>7389330
You didn't look at the one with the fairies, did you? Or the one by the elegantly named "Sexual Hitler" with the space marines literally drowning a girl in piss?

>>7389488
I'd have gotten there eventually if my interest hadn't wandered.

Trying to work up the nerve to start on this one of mine now, just to get the wretched thing out of my head so I can pretend to be a normal human being for a bit longer.

>>7389330
There's a snuff scene with some bestiality in the second or third part of the Darkest Dawn story. Pretty sure it's still up on the /tg/ smut list.

>>7389502
Yes, it is, it's the one with the High Elf and the Cold One (for those of you who hadn't played Warhammer Fantasy, it's basically a dinosaur).

>>7389417
Fairly sure I'm the one who had him save it.

https://nhentai.net/g/182662/

>>7389959

Bless you kind sir

Any writers about who are interested in writing incest of the fluffy sort, specifically sibling or cousin type?

>>7390014
>incest of the fluffy sort
more like
>incest of the furry sort

>>7390014

What kind of siblings/cousins?

Older female - younger male? Vice versa? Same age?

>>7390038
Younger + older brother, older is crossdresser and submissive.

>>7390038
I was thinking two cousins of about the same age, or two half-siblings who were born so close together at they almost seem like twins

The only concrete difference between science fiction and fantasy is that in science fiction you write '[character] said' and in fantasy you write 'said [character].'

>>7390596
There's so much wrong with that statement that I'm not even going to bother listing all the ways it's wrong.

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Im trying to find stories where mothers feminize their sons. This seems to be something of a rare niche, which is kinda surprising. Can anyone recommend any stories or authors in this vein?

>>7390609
I know of absolutely nothing like that.

>>7390134

no way fag

>>7390485
>two half-siblings

Same mother or same father? I think writing about same father would be easier for me.

>>7390762
No, your fag

>>7390609
How would you prefer a story like that? The mom having sex with the feminized boy? How old the boy supposed to be? What is the main appeal of a situation like this for you? Do you imagine the boy fighting against it or liking it? How far should the mother go? Just dressing him up or even putting him in chastity?

>>7390762
Not OR here, but for very close ages, it's really only possible with them sharing the father, so there you have it

Blaaah, I live again.

Nothing new yet, but I did put some hours into one of my older stories.

The new one I am working on is from the monsters perspective. It will be a pretty quick and dirty piece of smut material. I wanted to try avoiding using more common adult words like pussy and ass for describing the action, a fun challenge for me.

Anyway here is polished up version of Ravaged, I like the new ending I added. Leaves things open for something different.

Tags for the link below: Monster(male), M/F, Rough, Knot, Large Insertion, Stomach Bulge, Cumflation(minor),Rapid Pregnancy, Birthing, Gangbang, Anal, Enema, Transformation.

https://pastebin.com/vHa934MM

hey, i've never been in one of these threads.

let's say i'm practicing drawing comics. would it be ok for me to just pick a story and use it, or would i need to ask permission from the author?

not doing it for money or anything, just practice.

>>7391240
You should feel free to pick just about anything, most authors would be happy to let you use it as long as they can see the result.

>>7391240
Asking would be common courtesy. You could also ask if someone is willing to write a comic script for you.

>>7391240
I'm sure any author would be happy to have someone draw something based on their work.
Just ask to make sure it's ok first.

>>7391240

Yeah no writer is going to snub is nose at free illustrations for their work.

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2000 word update, new content at "And what about Polars?"

Or Die Alone:
https://pastebin.com/WYh3N6HP
>no tags yet

Payoff tomorrow I think.

>>7391174
Hey, nice to see you back in the thread.

>>7389417
I didn't have the sauce.
>>7389959
But now I do!

>>7391240
I'd say it's polite to ask but I doubt anyone will refuse.

>>7391410

Thank you!

Fell off for a while there because it's hard to keep active when I don't feel like I have anything to contribute.

>>7391174
Dang, I really like a lot of these tags, but I just can't get into noncon

anyone taking 100% flaming homosex requests?

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Cuteanon just whipped this up in Flockmod. Good to see Kay-Ohss got involved too.

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>>7391457
>anyone taking 100% flaming homosex requests?

I got a feeling you're not asking for lesbians...

If you are, then I might go for it.

>>7391635
He lives?

>>7391658
Yes, the flockmod is still plenty active. No real pattern to when he pops in, so it doesn't hurt to take a look in there every so often.

>>7391635
What's Flockmod?

>>7391663
Collaborative drawing/whiteboard app, cuteanon popularized it during our /tg/ days:
http://flockmod.com/tgwst/

>>7391635
>>7391658
Can someone explain to me why so many drawfags only seem to draw on Flockmod?
Do they save these and upload them to a Tumblr somewhere so that people can access them or something?
Don't they want their work to be archived and seen by more people?
It's like if our writefags only wrote updates on Twitch streams and then never released them in a format that people could access.

>>7391675
As an artist, I enjoy the simplicity of the program. Just pick a color, adjust sensitivity, and draw. Plus, it's easier to connect to than drawpile. I just wish the canvases were larger.

>>7391675
It's a collaborative app, so multiple people can draw on it at once. Plus, it's possible to chat and draw at the same time with it, which is nice.

And they do save the pics, Cute's tumblr is on the list but if you can't find it it's http://tenebrascastle.tumblr.com/.

>>7391675
Cuteanon here.
It's very interactive, I enjoy the direct communication with watchers / other artists / whoever happens to be there.

The artist in me is more interested in the creation process and living the art, no so much the saving and archiving, I guess. Maintaining a nice archive is just time spent not creating, which is boring.
I don't care so much if my art is kept or saved, but I do enjoy having a live audience. It's very direct and personal that way.
Disclaimer: pretty drunk, but you know, in vino veritas and all that.

>>7391710

Wow, I love your style of art! You have a fantastic talent.

>>7391174
Nice to see this again.
And prefer this ending much more than the old one.

[spoiler]only better thing would be multibreast or a spinal shift[/spoiler]

>>7390596
What a weird way to start a conversation.

I've got an open request about a small farming town and its giant, monstrous wolf-like guardian. The guardian protects the village from roving monsters, and in return the villagers hide him from the roving monster hunters, and allow him to hunt a portion of their flocks. The request is for a short story or drawing based on any scenario that might ensue.

Some ideas: the yearly spring festival involves the town gathering to celebrate their guardian, braiding and weaving flowers into his fur, presenting cooked beasts, playing games with him, and at the culmination the girls who became women that year collect and gather the guardians semen and ritually spread it over the new crops.
Or perhaps a female monster hunter discovers the guardian hiding in a farmer's barn, but is trapped and 'persuaded' by the guardian that he is of no threat to any human.

>>7391710
No shit, you're one of the things I miss most about old /wst/. I wish I knew where everyone congregated after that one turbo-sperg shat up /tg/ so much they banned the threads. I sure as hell don't want to just browse Fanfiction.net or the plethora of garbage on Erotica or whatever.

>>7391675
The better question would be why they deserted the thread in the first place. Back on /tg/ they had no problem taking requests and posting the results in the thread while drawing in the flockmod.

Here? Not a single drawfag remaining.

Yay, something new. Just a quick and dirty smut fic I hammered out

Tags: Monster, Drugs, Tentacles, Extreme, Large Insertions, Stomach Bulge, Cumflation, Mindbreak.

https://pastebin.com/LqPKZ7LL

>>7392167
>quick
>6k words
Can I be as quick as you?

>>7391240
That would be like the happiest moment of my life.

>>7392167
Typos
>She the contorted features of her face
>hide.His
>changed when jer tilted her

>>7392444

Thanks for catching those, two proofreads and a run through grammerly and I STILL miss shit.

>>7392169

My creativity comes in spastic bursts. So when I do feel the urge to write I dive into it until that spark fizzles out.

So in the span of maybe three days now, I did an edit of the old story ravaged. Also I wrote 3 chapters out of a planned 15 chapter major story, that one probably will never make it to completion.

Then I when I stepped back from that one I wrote Early Riser just because I wanted to write from the monster perspective while limiting the use of colorful smutty words.

Then my urge to create runs dry and I'll vanish for another three months or more until I am able to actually produce content.

Any updates on the Bel-Chandra fic?
I don't want to rush the writer, but I don't want to miss out if it's already been posted on another thread either

>>7392712
Just checked out my anchor post. I don't think he's posted the other part yet

>>7381598
Less than a week (barely) is still an acceptable turn-around time, I guess. Sorry I took so long.

The discussion at 138 and also at 774 doesn't seem entirely natural, given their relationship. I could understand the former, to some degree, as a rhetorical one. The latter, not so much. They appear to have been together for years, so why would these questions even be posed? Would they not have come up before?

I was planning on writing something about strip teases being hard to write, but then I reread your post and realized that you already noticed the same thing. To be honest, it's the weakest part of the story, but I would not say it was anything bad. It's just an exceptionally hard thing to pull off. Attempting to describe a purely visual event with words is always difficult, much less when the topic is sex.

Dialogue is overrated. I think you did perfectly fine with writing out conversations without that many words.

I liked how you worked in all of the color changes. It's subtle, but it helps draw the reader back to the girl's unique traits. It went well with the story. I had no issues with repetition here. As you said, what was there was intentional and served a purpose.

I also quite enjoyed the length of the foreplay. This is pretty much exactly what I mean when I suggest to extend the scene before penetration. The lead-in and pre-care were the strongest parts of the story. The length of the scene strictly improved it, as the smuttiness only grew thicker as the scene evolved.

Good show.

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Hello /efg/, I have a gift for you:

"Chance Encounter"
https://pastebin.com/dtCdZqzC
F. Human x Succubus, lesbian sex.

This is a sequel to "The Apprentice's Gambit" with the same main character. You don't really need to have read it to follow what happens since this is an effort at getting better at writing same-gender pairings.

I would really appreciate feedback on this one, for I find same-gender fics hard to write, and I would like to know how to improve. Don't hesitate to tell me what you think I did right or wrong.

This being said, enjoy!

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2000 word update, new content at "His heart was pounding like a hammer"

Or Die Alone:
https://pastebin.com/WYh3N6HP
new tags:
>large breasts, long tongue, kissing, handjob, size difference, biting, scratching, consensual

>>7392681
Any chance you could finish off that Samus story with me?

>>7393215
Overall impression is positive. Bal' is built up well, as is her relationship with Niels. However, I felt the flirting scene with the waitress could have been extended. On a related note, you don't give physical descriptions until 127, about a third of the way through the sex. I feel that would be more appropriate earlier, 1, so we know what we're jacking off too, and 2, to make the flirting sexier. Bal' taking in the "sights," having her flash some skin or sit just right so her clothes give off her figure and making the waitress almost drop a glass, that sort of thing.

Several times the pronouns get confused, making it unclear who is doing what.
58. "The young woman turned her attention to her, and their eyes met."
the second her should be Bal's name. The first sentence mentions Niels, making it seem as though this para. is from his POV

78. She couldn’t begin to guess it was a succubus she was talking to, she was merely happy to find a woman responding to her not-really-subtle advance. It didn’t matter. A tasty mortal is a tasty mortal, she wasn’t picky.
Use names or other descriptions more often here. I had to read this bit twice to fully understand with all the shes and hers.

98. Katlyn clearly couldn’t wait, but she cowed the young woman with an assertive glare
minor, nitpicky example, but this is a dangling participle. Is Katlyn cowing, or is the succubus cowing?

100. Basically the whole opening. Who can't wait? Who is doing the grabbing?
Just use names a bit more. As a rule of thumb, you should probably use names in the first sentence of each paragraph.

118. As her licks and suckles upon her clit and lips increased,
Everything before this was from Bal's POV, so the licks sound like they are Bal's. "As the girl's licks" would work.

126. just use names more often, some actions are unclear

140. need comma after "bonelessly"

168. I think that should be "kindness WITH kindness," but it does work as-is.

>>7393323

Fuck yeah, let's strike while the iron is hot.

>>7393386
You also have a tendency to mis-punctuate dialogue. You typically have a statement in quotes, end it with a period, and then have a separate sentence describing it. While this technically works at times, the way it's written is sounds like the following sentence should be part of the quote-sentence. Or, at the very least, it makes things sound choppy.

22. “Tomorrow morning.” Niels pointed ahead.
This one works. The speaking and the pointing are two different actions.

26. “You could.” He sighed again.
Same as above, but borderline.

28. “Oh, I am, believe me!” She sulked
"She" should be "she." As written, the she sulked bit is describing how she is speaking.

Even when you are technically not making a mistake, this style is very stop-and-go, which makes the conversation choppy. To have it flow better, try things like:
"Tomorrow morning," Niels said, pointing ahead.
"Oh, I am, believe me," she said with a sulking huff.

At other times it really is more of a punctuation issue:

64. “How would you like me tonight, Master?” She asked coyly
she asked

68. “My room?” She insisted
she insisted
(the question mark is terminal punctuation for the quote, but NOT for the entire sentence)

70. “Yes, Bal’, your room.” He said gently
room," he said

84. “Well, Katlyn, they call me Bal’.” The succubus purred
Bal'," the succubus purred

Typically, words like purred, said, hissed, complained, and roared are actively describing the quote and should be part of the same sentence.
Just keep in mind that you should still use them sparingly as the dialogue itself should inform the reader as to the speaker's attitude.
"Well you can go fuck youself, you little cunt!"
This wouldn't need much description unless it's being said in a way that is not obvious from the words themselves.
"Well you can go fuck yourself, you little cunt," he hissed into her ear.
From the words it looks like shouting, but if the speaker isn't, that's when you describe it.

>>7393392
Great. If the chat doesn't work, try reloading the page.

>>7393397
All in all, I enjoyed the story. Most of the issues I mention are just me being a Grammar Nazi and nitpicker, but I would still suggest addressing some of those concerns.

The characters are likeable (pretty much a prerequisite for most smut) and the narrative is straightforward and fun. Bal going behind Niels's back is great, though I feel it would be more effective with the girls trying a little harder not to get caught. Doing so would add tension and suspense.

I apologize for being so long-winded.

Keep up the good work! It's great to see you posting.

>>7393405

Well I hope my tablet supports the chat. I guess I'll find out in half hour.

>>7393416
Probably not. Just stick what you've got in the doc and I'll try and keep up.

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>>7381043
I've finished the Nier Automata fanfic.

https://pastebin.com/gKDPQbJw

Tags: sexual discovery, romantic, yuri

I hope you like it as much as I liked writing it, and I especially hope that OR will be satisfied. Any criticism is welcome, especially grammatical advices, since English is not my native. If you enjoy it, let me know, and I might continue it.

>>7393110
No worries, bud; I'd be willing to wait a month or two for your insight as long as it was guaranteed.

I completely concede on the first point. I think I was trying to add some character insight while also slowing down the pace with some dialogue - you know, so it didn't feel like too much of a rush between A an B - but it fell flat as a flounder. Next time I try that trick, I'll focus on their current events.

Well, that's encouraging to hear in regards to the teasing. But, for the purpose of research, is there any particular story you (or anyone else) know(s) of that manages to pull off a dance well?

>Dialogue is overrated.
Oh, no no no, NO, bebe! We can't be going around saying things like that! Dialogue is practically the meat AND the bones of a character; if you have flimsy, phony dialogue that's unfun to read, you'll have flimsy, phony characters that are unfun to read about. And since so much of good smut seems to hinge on believable and relatable characters, that goes double here.
Well, in my very subjective, very misguided opinion as an amateur writer.

I'm very glad I nipped that repetition issue in the bud, and I am even very gladder that you had some good CONCRETE things to say about the story. You're one of only three people who did and believe me, I appreciate that. Immensely. Because being called a good writer doesn't mean jack diddly if you're never given a single fact to back it up.

Thanks for continuing to be your incredible, stupendous, irreplaceable self, HCPG. Believe me when I say you're probably 60% of the reason why I soldier on.

>>7393717
Tags please

>>7393721

Sorry about that!

Devolution - A younger sister turns her older sister into a monkey.
Tags: Monkey tf, identity death, non romantic, not sexual, female protag
https://sv-los.tumblr.com/post/160059343205/devolution

Moonlit Waters - An orca trainer has to say goodbye to a whale he's formed a close friendship with. Or does he?
Tags: animal to mermaid transformation, mermaid to human transformation, straight sex, male protag
https://sv-los.tumblr.com/post/160172662880/moonlit-waters

>>7393689
I may have been unclear with respect to dialogue. Direct quotations of characters engaged in dialogue is a dangerous path. It is obviously necessary to some extent, but there is a reason why not many people like to read plays. Alternating direct quotes are an eyesore and are hard to follow. The style does not translate well to writing. Full transcripts of conversations are boring, uninformative, and stilted. What you do here is roughly what I recommend.

As far as authors or stories that do foreplay very well, I don't have particularly many suggestions. Smut generally seems to come in two types: short and smutty, or "I wanted to put some sex into my 140-page story so I could post this on Literotica". I like both, but neither format lends itself particularly well to foreplay.

The best examples that come to mind are in genres that are all about foreplay: mind control/hypnosis and BDSM. Both rely heavily on what happens before penetration to set the mood and to drive the smut. I find that Tabico is exceptionally good at this, but I'm not sure that it is easy to see if you are not into lesbian hypnosis. Not all foreplay needs to be explicitly sexual, so long as your intended audience is aroused by it. For some people, that can include women being corrupted by parasitic aliens. For other people, not so much.

The closest story I can think of to what you write would be Serpent and Shoemaker, though I doubt you have not read that one. While it's heavily focused on D/s, I think that Submission by Goldeniangel (Literotica) is a good reference. RSAnon also does a generally good job of it, though his work is not always quite so explicitly sexual. I will also suggest Belgianon's Strange Bedfellows to anyone who will sit still for long enough for me to make the suggestion. Perhaps it's just right down my strike zone, but I thought it was a perfect example of teasing the reader, despite how short it is.

>>7393285
Awww toss I've been waiting for this. Loved the story so far.

side note, a girl getting bigger after eating is really hot.

>>7394074


Aye, that's why I had it put in there

>>7394074
>side note, a girl getting bigger after eating is really hot.

These are the moments in life that make me go, 'huh?'

>>7391457
I have a pretty long bisexual idea I'd like to commission and I haven't been able to find someone for it.

>>7394129
Are you offering to write it? Because that's what he was asking.

>>7394129

I'm doing commissions. I'm

>>7394086

>>7394147
Shiny, he meant an author so he obviously didn't mean you. Unless you'd like to write his idea for him, that is.

>>7393636
>those tags
Brutal.

>>7394150

I am an author. I've started doing story commissions, and I was offering to write.

>>7394170
Wait, who are you?

>>7394133
I was answering his question by saying that people don't seem to do gay requests. Because I've had no trouble commissioning straight ones, but bisexual stuff is impossible.

>>7394170
Cool! Can you link me to your pastebin or commission page?

>>7394177
>>7394183

I don't have a dedicated page with commission info, since I literally just started, but my tumblr is http://sv-los.tumblr.com/

So far I've done one request and one commission, the latter being the one I prefer people read.

I'm testing the waters at $10/1000 words, but that can change with time. I also can write most things, and am told that I'm real real good at duplicating established characters.

>>7394183
Snek does some really good bi stuff but he's harder to book than El Chapo. (Get it, book as in arrest? Sorry, I'll go away.)

>>7394150


I was just agreeing that it's a good thing, he quoted snek posting my commission

I'm always writing shit, then looking back at the depths of my own depravity and feeling ashamed and/or nervous of posting it, even anonymously.

Anyone else have that problem?

>>7394231


My secret method is to acknowledge that your writing is utter garbage and then post it anyway. That way you can only go up from there, if no one likes it then thats ok because you already saw that coming. If someone does, it's a pleasant surprise

>>7384832
I am not a size guy but that was enjoyable.

>>7393285
Finally got to reading through this. Character development is pretty good even with the dialogue being a bit blunt at times. Shift at the end is pretty abrupt but if they both go at each other it'll be better than the usual state of someone ending up a puddle.
really try to remember to not have one of them 'lose' here, especially since you just wrote in how that wasn't how they were acting.

>>7393817
I liked the orca story, however the sex scenes seem a bit brief for the length of the story. I did love the twist at the end however.

>>7393285
feels like she's reverting back to the stereotype a bit at the end there, hopefully it doesn't go that way.
IMO it would be cute to just have them them just masturbate each other for a bit, keep the same contrast but have him going after he fluffy nethers with his relatively small hand.

>>7394350


Trust me, I made it clear to snek that they are equals, there's no losing going to be happening.

>>7394434
Ive decided to wait till its done. Less stressful that way.

While i hope that shiny can keep her (forgot cat's name) from becoming bog standard rapecat snek has a tendancy to write certian sexual power distributions, that's his thing. I still hope the two of characters will end as equals, that'd be nice.

>>7394458
I get that, but you probably want to keep a rolled up newspaper on hand to keep him on track.

Seriously though I want to see Boyd firing back at her, not just sinking into her (not the whole time at least).
Even if he's opening up and softening up here it doesn't preclude him being an active and vocal partner, and certainly doesn't mean he should just immediately fall into Standard Polar Seduction.
Especially since his resisting of it is part of what makes him attractive to Lorza.

>>7394487

For what it matters, I review each update and have him make changes accordingly. If he misses the mark, I can easily have him fix it.

>>7394381

I'm glad you liked it.

I do wish I did more with the sex stuff. I have another commission lined up for tomorrow, so I'll take that feedback into account.

>>7394169
I know, right? I was thinking about going to hand holding territory, but then I realized that would be too much for this board.

>>7391457
Like the other anon said, could you be more precise with your request? For some reason, whatever I start to write, I end up adding yuri into the mix. See >>7393636, but I've went further with that in other stuff.

>>7393817
Oh no, I totally understand that - dialogue's all about the illusion of reality over reality itself and all that jazz. It's just that it's still perfectly possible to be terrible at illusions. But if you really think what I'm doing is an okay path to take, then I'll take that path with a nice pair of running shoes.
Still, that won't stop me from going sick with envy and doubt whenever I open up an Elmore Leonard hardback.

And I was actually referring to the dance part specifically when I was asking for examples. Dances, or anything else that falls into the category of "Attempting to describe a purely visual event with words." Still, I'll give these a look-see, or at least the ones I haven't read already. You're correct on Serpent and Shoemaker, and I'm already a big fan of RampantSerenity's shorter works. Biiig fan. We're talking 36" drum fan big.
And while we're on the topic of suggested readings, have you ever put anything out on the internet, bud? Maybe I was dreaming, but I swear you mentioned you had some works of your own out there. I'd love to see them.

>>7393386
>>7393397
>>7393409
>I apologize for being so long-winded.

Seriously, don't! Thanks a lot for the analysis, that's exactly the kind of feedback I need. Particularly the part about dialogue, I was thaught to 'keep verbal and physical action sparated' back in the days.

Looks like I still must pay even more attention attention to making clear who's doing what; which has been my bane with same-gender pairings.

Thanks again, and glad you enjoyed it.

>>7394543
The only thing I can think of with a literal dance is The Sacrifice by Pandarus (Literotica). Unfortunately, it's extremely long and probably forever unfinished, as he hasn't updated since 2011. Still, it's an excellent story and does actually do an alright job with dancing.

You remember correctly, I am a writer. I try to keep my writing and my reviewing/editing as separate as possible. Having your reputation as a critic and your reputation as a writer totally independent of each other helps to separate the actual work and protect it from association. If you're that interested, I may drop you an email later.

>>7394669
Interesting. Do you remember the specific page where it happens?

And that's completely understandable. Whether you want to email or not is up to you and your comfort zone. Don't want to feel like I'm imposing anything.

>>7391639
Hey, D., I see by your works that you seem to like futa/female eating cum, which also happens to be a fetish of mine. (And your descriptions of how tasty and irresistible their cum is made me wet my panties more than once)
So, have you ever thought about making a whole story with this concept? Say, a chef that is transformed into a futa and find out that her cum is the best condiment she ever tasted (also a potent aphrodisiac that make those who taste her special flavoured food wanting to jump on her) or something along those lines.
If not, guess I'd just be delighted to find another of those scenes in your stories, just keep the good work as I'm sure I'll keep looking feverish at work by reading your stuff

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>>7394704
>So, have you ever thought about making a whole story with this concept? Say, a chef that is transformed into a futa and find out that her cum is the best condiment she ever tasted (also a potent aphrodisiac that make those who taste her special flavoured food wanting to jump on her) or something along those lines.
>If not, guess I'd just be delighted to find another of those scenes in your stories, just keep the good work as I'm sure I'll keep looking feverish at work by reading your stuff

Well... I deal with come in food in PWA2, but as far as a whole story all about it, not yet. Maybe an Iron Chef style show where they reveal that the secret ingredient is come. One of the contestants is a futa, the other is a very perplexed but non-penised woman who is given a "loaner cock" from Props. She keeps masturbating while she's trying to cook, and her poor sous chef has to keep catching it in measuring cups and other such vessels, perhaps one time unable to get a proper vessel in time and having to catch it in her mouth...

Even if I didn't do that idea, it would have to be that whoever was eating it knew there was come in it, though. I wouldn't want to do it in a way that she's hiding it from the people eating it, because that's gross. I think I researched cooking with come before for a similar idea, and I found a few people who were trying to trick their significant others into doing it somehow.

Now THAT is just plain evil.

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>>7394778
>come
From where, you poncy bastard.

>>7394814
I know. I can't STAND spelling it 'cum' unless it's 'precum.'

>>7394566
>I was thaught to 'keep verbal and physical action sparated'
That is good; you should separate them. However, I think you are confusing action and dialogue tags (he said, she said bits). Many people make the mistake of using actions AS dialogue tags:
"I'm afraid," she shuddered.
This doesn't work because you can't "shudder" words. But you can squeak, or whisper, or shout.
"I'm afraid," she whispered, shuddering.

Ones like sulked and sighed are iffy, they could be argued either way. When it comes down to it, overly descriptive dialogue tags should be used sparingly (that is, use them when you WANT to draw attention to a line). He said and she said are usual sufficient, and you only need those when you need to make sure your reader knows who is saying what. But adding actions after the tag, typically with a comma in between, is fine, as long as you don't over use them. Doing so is NOT the same as using actions AS tags, nor is it the same as using overly descriptive tags (anything other than said or asked or says).

Sorry for all the ALL CAPS stuff in this one. I wish I could underline or use italics on 4chan.

>>7395080
>"I'm afraid," she shuddered.
But you can use untagged dialogue if it's obvious from context:
"I'm afraid." She shuddered.

>>7395127
Of course, and that is a good point. I only meant what I said in the context of keeping the quote and tag as one sentence. He already uses that particular style extensively, perhaps too often, so I was trying to show him his other options.

>>7395080
>I wish I could underline or use italics on 4chan.
It'd definitely be useful at times, yeah. But I think I get what you're getting at.

Thanks a lot for your help, I really appreciate it.

>>7381043
Anybody remember a story about a guy who has to marry a Dragon girl who was a bully when he was a kid and they have crazy sex to unite humans and dragonpeople

>>7395266
The Dragon's Heart by Taiyakisoba
https://archiveofourown.org/works/6475483

>>7395265
Any time.

>>7395271
I don't have anything to give you but know you have improved my day tenfold, that's what I appreciates about you

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2600 word update, new content at "She shuffled down into the sleeping bag"

Or Die Alone:
https://pastebin.com/WYh3N6HP
new tags:
>blowjob, deepthroat, creampie, oral

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>>7394074
Glad you're enjoying it! I hope I can make the sex scene pay off.

>>7394350
They're going to be more flip-flopping between who leads for the first few scenes, and then I'm thinking the finale will be entirely mutual sleeping bag sex.

>>7394434
>>7394487
Keep in mind these scenes take a long time to write, and what you're seeing now is only about 20% of the overall product. If a character appears submissive initially, they may switch roles later.

>>7395678
We passed the bump limit already, jackass.

>>7395694
Bump

Hey didn't we have a discord?

>>7395878
We still do. The link is here:
https://discord.gg/w82qKSV

Reminded that Wiki still exists: https://fourleaffics.miraheze.org/wiki/Main_Page

>>7396119
Reminder that nobody cares about "our" wiki.

I request a story about a Dalek getting a job as a phone sex operator.

>>7396168

I am seriously tempted.

>>7396168

https://sv-los.tumblr.com/post/160216495520/a-4chan-request

>>7396251

HAH! Love it.

>>7396251
Fucking great, SV. Thank you very much!

>>7396257
>>7396314

:)

Also this thread's about to explode. Is there going to be another?