/wst/ - Sci-fi/Fantasy Smut Thread

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I'm bumping the thread with the request I fulfilled and posted at the end of the last thread.

The Runaway Princess: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ycWUl0O5uB9kEENIvCXTpjeTYSXra1bOG5hAXm0Fy-A/edit?usp=sharing

Tags: Consensual, Orc + Elf, Pregnancy and Belly Worship.
~ 800 words

>>6543189
>consensual orcxelf

That's a first. Anyway, pretty good job even if pregnancy isn't my kink.

So, raptor vore thread on /tg/ got killed by the mods before the last chapter was out, but I thought I recognized the writting style for the greentext and on a whim I checked Dzamie/Hammerspacedragonwritefag's pastebin
Sure enough, it's there, last bit too,
If you're here I loved it

Posting a link if anyone else wants to see it too
http://pastebin.com/wWFxjJK6

>>6543342
Whose? never heard of him.

>>6543346
He's showed up here once or twice, normally he posts greentext in threads on /tg/ if they give him ideas

>>6543349
That's strange, if he has I've never seen someone of that name. Also, tags would be nice.

>>6543369
Yep, sounds like soemthing that really should have gone straight to /d/.

Also, it seems Lewdanon is still alive, even if he's not with us. http://i.4cdn.org/tg/1447277083427.jpg
http://i.4cdn.org/tg/1447383870645.jpg

>>6543342
He always posts as anon, the name is only from his pastebin
Tags for his story:
Human X raptor F, vore, unbirth, and TF

Someone last thread said other licences than Warhammer were okay, so I will just repost my Confrontation/Rag'Narok request...
I would ask for sexy times of this girl, with her armor partially removed, either receiving both creampy and facial as she ride a dick and blow one or two others, or simply giving a messy titfuck, or else if you feel it better ...
Don't pay attention to the hips, sculptor fail...

>>6543422
Greenmarine?

>>6543434
Yeah, that's greenmarine's work.

>>6543627
I don't recognize it. Was it made recently?

>>6543632
Don't think so, I've seen it sometime ago.

Hey, did that mother/daughter machine sex story ever get finished?

>>6543938
I don't think it was even started. This shit takes time, you know.

>>6544017
The guy doing it said that he reckoned it'd be done by sunday. That was the week before last.

>>6544030
What was the story about anyways? A mother and daughter locked into some contraption?

>>6544030
Maybe he underestimated how long it would take, I dunno.

>>6544032
Kinda a story based on this old hentai comic I found, posted a link to where I found it on e-hentai and he seemed pretty interested. Said he was going to bump it up to the top of his queue.

>>6544035
Well if you find the link maybe I can give it a shot!

>>6544048
I'll have a look, gimme a minute.

>>6544048
Here you go: http://g.e-hentai.org/g/391839/38b142cc13/

>>6544051
Thanks mate, I'll have a look!

>>6544054
Apparently its a parody of something, though I don't know or much care about it.

>>6544058
I'm almost glad that you don't, because if you did I probably wouldn't have been able to make the parody justice. That's the major reason I won't try to write >>6543421. I don't know jack shit about confrontation so I'd probably mess it up.

>>6544059
Oh yes. All I know is what's important, i.e. MILF, Loli, smexytimes.

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Brush pen is hard, yet satisfying to use.

>>6544063
Neat, well done!

>>6544063
Hi there, Inker !
Taking requests ?

>>6543938
I ran into a bit of a wall last weekend, so it didn't get finished then. It's a bit more than 3/4 done. I'm going to try to knock it out tonight. I'm unused to writing mindbreak, so it's taking a bit longer than anticipated, as I've been feeling out what I do and don't like.

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>>6544061
I've tried to fulfill your request. Hopefully you'll enjoy my attempt, and if you don't there's always a chance this anon >>6544166 will do a better job!

So here it is, Mother and Daughter Put in the Machine: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1DYpnIlmiTeOwZs3aHHAVyXyxS_v5EGtj1uXIa0_7C0M/edit?usp=sharing

>>6544166
Ah right that's fine, thanks friend.

>>6544248
Sorry for getting your hopes up last weekend. Like I said, I've never written mindbreak before, so I'm having an issue working out the pacing. I've also been trying to work out what all I want to include, as this kind of scenario is pretty much my exact fetish.

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>>6544065
Thanks

>>6544111
Sorry man, not in the mod right now.

>>6544196
Just finished reading it, and I'm pretty pleased. There's definitely a few bits that could use improvement, though just very minor issues mostly and the whole comes across as feeling a tad rushed (understandable).

But, despite that, I think you've done a great job and you should feel proud of yourself for getting something this good out so quickly.

One last thing, if you allow people to makes notes on the document, it'll make pointing out where you've gone wrong easier for me.

>>6544282
Thank you for taking the time to comment on what I wrote! Maybe I can go back and revise the story and perhaps complement it with your notes to make it even better.

Hopefully I didn't mess something up now, but I think I've managed to turn commenting on.

>>6544063
The result is pretty nice!

>>6544282
Thank you for helping me, those notes were really great. I can really see now what you meant with the whole thing feeling rushed.

>>6544360
We're not done yet, boyo. What's with those <3 symbols that keep appearing?

>>6544364
The dialogue was just ripped from the comic. Because I'm a lazy person.

Anyone know what's up with FleaTrollus? Was thinking of commissioning some 40k arts.

>>6544499
Who's he? Can't say I've even heard of him.

>>6544524
Used to post on /tg/ back in the day.
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/6651818/

>>6544499
What do you plan to commission ?

>>6544538
Well, he hasn't shown up here at any rate. Would be nice if he did, mind you.

Any chance in hell of someone writing a story featuring an evil Sorcerer who transforms people (male soldiers especially) into curvy, sexy female kobolds for him to enjoy?

>>6544718
Only if you write it yourself, we're short on writers as it is.

Aw yeah, first story in like three months!

http://pastebin.com/qGeF3sKB (Male Human x Female demon, mild violence, BDSM, transformation)

As always C&C is always apreciated

>>6544728
For a start, the demon's a bit more unusual than the standard succubus, but in a good way. I liked the bit about the mask, as well as the implication that she may have been a human herself somewhere in the past.

Tag-wise, you might want to mention the candle play. It's not a big element, but it's there. Sex is a little on the short side, but it gets the job done. Overall, nice work and I'd like to see more from you.

ITT:samus aran tentacle hentai

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>>6544718
>Curvy, Sexy
>Kobolds
Pick one.

Jokes aside, got any preference when it comes to the gender of the mage?

>>6545256
Curvy might be hard, but kobolds can be pretty sexy.

i haven't posted anything since this thread moved to d and maybe one person might remember me aaaaaaa i can't even recall my tripcode

anyways i decided to ink this thing i made. here it is.

http://imgur.com/88Fc1K7 elf x skaven (rat dudes)

>>6545273
Actually, there were a couple people looking for you a few threads ago. Welcome back.

>>6545273
>http://imgur.com/88Fc1K7
Pretty nice.

>>6544789
Thanks. Where do you reckon I aught to take it if I write a sequel?

>>6545283

oh fuck now i feel bad.

sorry to anyone that missed me :s

>>6545289
Don't worry, the most important thing is that you're back.

>>6544256
Still here. Y'know, if you're really struggling to get it finished, I wouldn't mind if you just released the 3/4 or so that you've done already.

>>6544533
>seen this piece before
>never noticed the wing
>wing on the left is a dong
kek

>>6545286
Not entirely sure, to be honest. But I trust your judgement on where you want it to go.

>>6545385
So IS there any single location all the creators of /wst/ went?

I enjoyed the shit outta those threads :,(

I miss giving feedback, too. If I had more time, I would have contributed myself. No-one else was fulfilling that "oblivious adventurer gets a sex angel from her god" story.

>>6545360
I don't like to release WiPs, as I have only done it once and have yet to finish that story. I should be able to finish it tonight without much effort. If it's not done this weekend, it'll be finished during the week and posted here, then likely reposted in the next thread. Either way, it will be done soon. My main problem is honestly just trying not to add more content.

>>6545406
This is the closest that we have. There's a lot more of us here than it would seem, the thread's just been in a bit of a rut. We're still getting a couple things out a week, at least.

You'd be surprised what you could do in limited time. I did most of my writing while working on multiple publications and a master's thesis. It's surprisingly relaxing to write smut and a welcome break from techno-babble and drawing diagrams for everything.

>>6545410
How is that a problem!? More content is always good (provided it doesn't mean you'll take like a month or something to finish it). You could always do what >>6544296 did, put up the WiP and then we could both work on finishing it off. The two of us had a great time fixing that up last night.

>>6545420
It becomes a problem when it starts to muddle the intended story. I have both a machine sex and mind control/hypnosis fetish, and they go hand-in-hand rather well. Unfortunately, MC/hypno tends to be very long-winded and is probably not as arousing as most people, so I generally try to keep it to a minimum unless it's the entire point of the story.

>>6545424
Fair enough. What about my offer? Its worth a try, worked out pretty well last night, after all.

>>6545259
>>6545385
>Curvy Kobolds
/tg/ has that covered.

>>>/tg/43634321
>>>/tg/43634547
>>>/tg/43646910

>>6545430
I'll consider it later, but I would like the smut to progress a bit more before I do so. I spent quite a bit more time than intended on story. As it turns out, it takes a bit of work to justify industrial mother/daughter machine sex without resorting to hand waving or the good ol' rape factory.

>>6545437
Very well. Just try not to take all week, please?

>>6545432
/tg/, /tg/, /tg/...

>>6545504
You have a point, but we'll be deleted in minutes the moment any of us even tries to move back; if the mere mention of our name justifies pruning then actually reappearing there would end even worse.

Give it a couple more months at least, and with luck maybe they might have forgotten about us.

Until then, we need to make content here instead. Time complaining and lamenting about shit we can't control is time better spent writing or drawing. Better yet, get those idea guys to come here instead of staying on /tg/, where they can discuss those ideas without being shouted down by "MAGICAL REALM".

>>6545517
Also, it's best to remember that we actually have /d/ natives among us now. At this point, a move back could well fracture what we have.

>>6545517
Kittenmod, or whichever Mods are doing all this pruning, clearly have an agenda against Smut...

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>>6545577
Does it matter at this point? The important thing is that what we had before is gone for the time being, so we ought to make what we have here better instead.

>>6545573
Good point. Oh, and remember that we need to make sure the images posted here are anime-style, I can see some posts were deleted for being too western. When in doubt, use imgur links.

>>6545573
/tg/ just has more traffic and exposure. And it's not like we'd just give them the boot or ignore them.

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Okay, content time. I did manage to get something done this weekend, even if it's (yet another) Shadowrun shortie.

Pixie Tricks
http://pastebin.com/Kz8iduEe
M. Human x F. Pixie (Shadowrun setting, exhibitionism, size play, bodyjob)

Pic and tags should say it all. Enjoy!

>>6545598
I got a piece done myself, after what can politely be called "way too long". It features one of Cuteanon's OCs (as seen in pic related), so if you aren't well-acquainted with her you should check out his tumblr. It's linked in the main list.

Opposites Attract
http://pastebin.com/ixQch7K0
tags: vanilla, knight x evil queen, sex with armor on, humor

>>6545610
>>6545603
>Western art
This'll just get us banned again, y'know.

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>>6545610
And a long story from me. This time it's really really long, so if anyone want to read in whole - brace yourself.

In Depth Negotiations: Secrets of the Red Witch
http://pastebin.com/zYy2Re4J
Tags: Kasrkin bodyguard(m) x young eldar vendor(f), Kasrkin bodyguard(m) x young eldar vendor(f) x Farseer(f), REALLY lots of text, group sex, oral:male, oral:female, vaginal, vanilla, earplay, deep penetration, breastplay, anal, light exibithion/voyeurism, mind linking.

>>6543342
Pretty nice greentext story if you're into vore or unbirth. Encourage that man to write more.

>>6544196
That's a pretty decent take on the request. It does feel a bit rushed, but you're trying to follow the doujin and it's understandable.

If you ever want to expand on it, add more about how the process feels for the two victims, how the resist before finally being overwhelmed (or giving in). But it's a nice take on the request. Good job!

>>6544728
I liked this one, and this coming from someone wary the moment he sees "transformation" in the tags. The story is nice, the klutzy demon is a nice touch and candleplay is criminally underrepresented in the smut here.

One thing is that you might want to expand on the sex proper a bit. I know "heterosexual sex in the missionary position between a consenting couple with the purpose of bonding and procreation" is too /d/ for /d/, but still...

>>6545610
Classical airhead Tenebra behavior. I hope Cute sees this, he should enjoy seeing his characters written about. Good work.

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>>6545623
Hey, don't let me stop you from posting a pic or two then. My folder needs some extra content in it anyway.

>>6545623
>This'll just get us banned again, y'know
Or Kittenmod could just remove the rod up his ass...

>>6545651
How long are you going to whine before you either make something or discuss what we've got?

Together with a nice chap called Rorgaldorn I'm writing a series of short smut-pieces based off of this comic: http://akabur.com/members/displayimage.php?album=71&pid=838#top_display_media

Here's the first installment, featuring Miranda Lawson and two hired thugs on the illusive man's payroll: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1JLgZH_f7vRkdUfyyA67_vXHNfDKKu6wCbm5wjxDlGn4/edit?usp=sharing

Enjoy!

>>6545799
Not bad,although I'm not sure there's much of an audience for that here specifically. I'd rather see original content than a rewriting of something which already exists.

>>6546176
Agreed.

Oh, and if anyone could work on more human on fembot fics, that would be great. There's never enough robosex to go around.

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2/2

>>6546467
>>6546469
Nice sketches!

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Zoanthrope on sororitas action yes/no?

>>6546588
Yes! Very, very much yes!

>>6546588
>Tyranid on Sororitas action

Always yes.

>>6546588
Yes! How can this even be questioned, here of all places?

>>6546176
>>6546405
Maybe you guys are right and maybe I should take this somewhere else, but I'm thinking that I'll post another chapter and you guys can decide whether or not you want more.

The illusive man's revenge - Part two - Bad Varren! : https://docs.google.com/document/d/1dG_8rKFxHOteLLI5n3AKRtjnKXYtRzcGXCv8A4-Ejn8/edit?usp=sharing

Hopefully at least a couple of you will enjoy it!

>>6545636
>http://pastebin.com/zYy2Re4J

Awesome, will try to give some feedback on this when i can.

Been kinda busy myself, uni does that too you. But I've got some ideas floating around tying in to my old stuff from tg and some wow centric original stuff.

>>6545799
>>6546834
That's actually not bad, even if I wonder why you'd just copy a comic rather than come up with your own scenario.

I'd suggest keeping up with what you did in part two and expand on what happens in the comic.

>>6546896
Thanks for your thoughts! I do write my original stuff as well, but I just really enjoyed the comic and thought it would do for some hot smut. I'll take your advice to heart.

>>6546942
I had similar thoughts to this guy (>>6546896), wasn't trying to discourage you or anything. By all means, continue writing.

>>6546960
I'm not discouraged, rather I value any and all opinions. Believe me when I say I appreciate any input.

>>6546960
>>6546896
The thing is, we've been wondering about what to do for part 3 for a while, considering that its one of the pictures with the least going on. My gut's telling me that this one is going to be hard work.

>>6546467
Nice pic, but it looks like the big centaur's forepaw is rather thin.

Unless memory fails me, horses have legs that are equally thick.

Jesus, let this thread die, this is getting ridiculous. No need to keep it agonizing for two weeks like the last one!

>>6548049
Agreed. Focus activity on our usual times (that's Friday evening through Sunday, Eastern Standard Time), when more people are likely to be here, and make sure to actually discuss the content. And make it, of.course. We need all the new content we can get now.

>>6548049
Eh, a permanent thread, even if not very active outside of weekends, would probably increase chances to gather back people still missing. We got Peekaf, skavanon and that Jain Zar/Rowboat drawfag back recently after all.

>>6548101
At the same time it would cause content creation to slow to a halt. A permanent thread requires a permanent flow of new content, and for many people here that's demanding the impossible. Unlike most threads on /d/, we can't survive solely on reposts.

>>6545273
Good to see you back, looking forwards to seeing more of your stuff!

I promised to get this out before the thread died, so here it is.

Phase One
http://pastebin.com/AtSWCNsN
Tags: Machine sex, Milf, mother/daughter, double penetration, excessive cum, mindbreak, impregnation

I am always open to any suggestions or criticism and will probably end up cleaning a few things up before the next thread anyway. In addition to a bit more work on this, I'm looking to get either the long-promised paladin orgasm denial story or a sequel to the oviposition story I posted two weeks ago ready for next weekend.

>>6545273
Oh, neat, glad to see you popping up again. I was wondering if we would see some Vermintide R34.

Was that picture cropped, out of curiosity? It looks like you've sliced off the top and bottom to focus on the Waywatcher.

>>6548666

The top was not, the bottom was, as a means to hide that I super fucked up a part. Feet are weird.

I'll draw more stuff later this week.

>>6548431
Well, this is awkward.... First of all, I want to say that I really appreciate you taking the time to do this for me, and that I think its very solidly written.

However (and this is where I start feeling bad), I think out of both the stories based on the pic series, I prefer the one that Solstice (and me, later on) wrote. Yours. whilst well-written and solidly plotted, focuses too much on how the circumstances in the story came to be, and it felt like it glossed over the actual sex/impreg etc, which was what I really wanted to see.

Sorry. Perhaps someone else will enjoy your efforts more.

>>6549591
That's unfortunate, but you must remember that many authors here including myself recoil from the idea of simply making it just sex with a bare-bones story. It feels like it would have no change over the comic you used as a source, and as I said in a previous thread why even ask for a story if you want the actual story to be so bare-bones it may as well not be there?

That's why just requesting a fetish or "do something like pic related" gets such a low chance of being taken by a writefag. It leaves no room for a story and ultimately ends up being unsatisfying to write and to read since comics and pictures are a better medium if the sex is the only thing you want out of it.


At least that's the way I feel about it. Don't feel bad about it, chalk it up as a philosophical difference and not knowing what you wanted from it. We're not psychic, if you want the person who takes the request to focus on the sex exclusively you gotta say it straight out.

>>6549766
You're right. Most of the time, I don't know what it is about the request that I want in particular until its right there under my nose. Hence why they tend to be so vague, I suppose.

>>6549773
Bear in mind I'm not the guy who wrote that, I'm just saying my piece here because I think it's worth saying.

On the writefag end, vagueness can be a bit of a double edged sword. On the one hand there's room to expand on the base request how I see fit if it feels lacking in some way, but there's no way of knowing if the end result will be even close to what you initially had in mind until it's in your hands.

I know I try to compensate for that by thinking about what it is I want from a request before I make it, myself. Helps a lot in making sure both parties are on the same page, so to speak.

>>6549786
Presumably that was why I preferred Solstice's story, as I actually got in there with him and helped put it into shape.

>>6549789
Is there a particular reason why you don't write yourself?

>>6549789
I can see why. No better way to ensure it's how you like it than to work directly with the author, after all.

>>6549803
I do sometimes, but I find it substantially easier to work off something that already has the groundwork laid. Plus I find coming up with inspiration difficult.

>>6549809
It's not like there's any lack of requests to work off. We practically have more requests than active authors. You can always give it a shot and see what happens.

>>6549814
Looked through the archive a while ago, nothing that interested me. Has to be something that grabs my attention, or that gives me a particular idea. For example, the one I'm thinking about at present is a kinda AU of a story I found on HF the other day.

How can I use Stockholm Syndrome correctly (i.e. in common with how it works IRL) in my story?

The purpose I want to use it for is as a means for a teenage superheroine to remain with the man who kidnapped and impregnated her.

>>6549845
"mind break" is the thing that erotic fiction often uses. Stockholm Syndrome is different and not sexy.

>>6549845
Why would she do that?

>>6549845
I'm not sure about how to do it from the victim's perspective, but it would be pretty easy from the kidnapper's. Have the woman slowly start cozying up to him and displaying traditional affection, despite his treatment of her. It's easier to narrate from his perspective, which is that of a sane person watching someone act erratically, than it is from hers.

>>6549848
Why's that?

>>6549850
Well, partly because the other option is being sold off as a sex-slave to god-knows-who, and partly because of the Stockholm Syndrome thing.

>>6549851
Okay, sounds good. The main reason why the kidnapper decides to keep her in the first place is because he starts having doubts about what his client might do to her. So there's already a twisted sorta affection present on his side already.

>>6549854
>Well, partly because the other option is being sold off as a sex-slave to god-knows-who, and partly because of the Stockholm Syndrome thing.

So, basically she convinces herself it's the better option. Write that out.

>>6549854
>Why's that?
because its a dead end, the victim is always a victim, never actually willing, or taking the best choice in two bad choices. Your story can never go anywhere meaningful.

>>6549856
Isn't that the same thing as mindbreak then?

>>6549857
not at all, mindbreak is something that doesn't need to be associated with torture or kidnapping, its also fictional

>>6549856
How do you figure that it can't go anywhere meaningful?

>>6549859
The way you put it makes Stk Syn sound like a variation of mindbreak. Besides, when did I say anything about torture?

>>6549865
I think you'll be perfectly find with where you're going. Try it out and see how you like it. If you're not sure, drop it here and we'll take a look.

>>6549871
Alright. The first chapter is going to be mostly the same as the one from the original story (which I suppose I'll link as well), but with a few important tweaks worked in to set up how things diverge from the rest of the original story.
Tomorrow, perhaps. Maybe I'll feel better then.

>>6549845
This is relevant to my interests. I'm doing a fic involving the Minotaur, and one of the human tributes gets attached to it because she's one of the few it hasn't eaten yet, thinking she can help it etc. Any tips how I can do this properly without resorting to the "I love your dick so I guess I'm your slave now" mindbreak thing?

>>6550312
I didn't think of sending this when responding to >>6549845, but I think this would be helpful for both of you. It's a story series from Literotica that is not only excellent but also is a great template for what you're writing https://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=1128196&page=submissions. Sadly, he hasn't updated in five years, but the story is great and is an excellent reference for what you're writing.

>>6549591
And this is why I never take requests...

>>6548431
>http://pastebin.com/AtSWCNsN
I'm normally not one to nitpick, but I have a few suggestions on the first line, and since that's the first things the reader will see, I'll mention them. Feel free to tell me to fuck off if you disagree.

>Line 1. "Given the choice, she would have rathered deal with the devil himself. The look on his face told her everything she needed to know, an unholy amalgam of used car salesman and family law attorney.

I would probably change this to "Given the choice, she would have rather dealt with the devil himself. He was smirking at her like a used car salesman or family law attorney."

I'd also probably change "pushed" to "shoved" as that seems more violent and unwilling of the main character.

>line 31. "Nothing about the man looked as if he cared past his job description, appearing more tired than she and even less enthused. She was at least nervous. He was downright bored."

Those sentences stood out to me as really well done and really set the tone. Well done.

Smiled and almost laughed out loud at her "horror" at the doctor taking a drink out of the coffee carafe. Clearly she's never seen the horrors of me waking up in the morning.

>line 77: "no pointing" -> "no point in"

>The walls of the tubes suddenly inflated, expanding into the hollow to wrap around her arms and legs. She yelped and tried to pull her limbs out, but found them held fast. The pads were soft but had almost no give, engulfing her extremities in a manner similar to a blood pressure cuff but surprisingly comfortable.

Hot!

>>6548431
>>6550800
>redundant "well done"s
OK, yeah, I may have had a few drinks before I started and finished this review...

>line 122.

Well, that escalated quickly. And I mean that in a good way, dayum. From this line onward it gets hotter and hotter, and I guess maybe I can see the other anon's point. Don't get me wrong, I definitely appreciate the setup, but this is quite excellent and I pity people who didn't stick around long enough to read it.

>The sight of her mother so bound and panting elicited a new pang of unwelcome arousal. She knew that it was only the drugs talking, but the knowledge provided little comfort as unsolicited fantasies invaded her mind. A pair of gentle hands undid her own garments behind her back, no doubt exposing her in all her nude glory to the other woman."

For some reason this line in particular really got to me. Her and her mother, nude and opened to each other, drugged and about to be forced to watch each other be increasingly stimulated... yes, this is the material of extremely potent fantasies, my friend, thank you. For this reason, maybe change the last clause from "to the other woman" to "to her mother", or "to the woman that birthed her", or something like that? Emphasize that relationship.

>line 137. "Maggie did not fair much better"
It's sadly 'fare' (fuck the English language) but more importantly, I had already forgotten who Maggie was. Is that the mother? I hate to be the bearer of cliche advice, but maybe give them names that don't start with the same letter.

>>6548431
>line 140, "Watching her mother writhe in ecstasy, she instinctively knew how wonderful it would feel to submit". I really feel like there's some ultimate story/theme potential here in the main character following her mother's example as she did when she was a child... something like that. Tap into that. If no idea springs to your mind, I can try writing a sentence or two tomorrow. Again, rule #1 applies, feel free to tell me to fuck off if you disagree.

>line 144. "She was going to be pregnant." I would put this on its own line. It's a huge revelation in the story and deserves a moment to sink in.

>"Fair warning, coming down is going to be hell. Think heroin withdrawal, only worse. Oh, and you get to do it every day for the next month."
Oh my. The mindbreak potential in that is fucking HOT. Plus the ending made me think it won't take too long...

I found this absolutely hot, anon. Thanks for your work!

Does anybody know what the name of the text-based thing, where you play as someone who got turned into a girl and you go through a dungeon getting turned into various monstergirls?

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I think I'll draw more sororitas stuff next.

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So a venomthrope. Couldn't resist.

Insert generic hentai script about lust-inducing venom and mindbreak or something.

>>6550931
With the arms I think it looks more like a Toxicrene. Ah well, same result.

>>6550800
>>6550802
Oh good, someone does like Anon's work. I still feel bad about that, desu, but I felt you deserved the truth.

>>6551000
>desu
Huh? That wasn't what I typed...

>>6551002
Word filters. / b/-tier retards, /pol/ and /v/ mongoloids spammed what you tried to write and a couple other things so hard those expressions are now censored.

>>6550931
Your style is kinda different than before, using something else ?

>>6551015
He got a new pen a while ago.

>>6550800
Most of those changes have been applied. I must confess that my proofreading was a bit sloppy this time around. I generally wait until the day after I finish to do it, but I was trying to get this out before the thread died and didn't take enough time. I hadn't considered "the woman that birthed her" when looking for nominal phrases. Thanks for that one.

In any case, and also to >>6549591, I do plan on extending the smut scene. I just wanted to make sure to get this out when I promised I would, as I had already missed my self-imposed deadline. I intended it to be longer in the first place, but it's difficult to juggle multiple themes at once and I was focusing more on the mindbreak than the actual sex. I realized that it would likely require a full restructuring of the scene to be able to incorporate much more, so I released what I had. With more time and a bit of luck, I should be able to double the length by reworking the pages of discarded material I have.

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>>6550907
Wait, is it Jain?
....
ATATATATATA

>>6551165
You're waifu a slut, Rowboat...

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>>6551189
Say that to my face, coward.

Is "meat-spear" too silly to use as a synonym for dick?

>>6551437
Yes.

>>6551441
Thought so, phallus it is.

So, I know the thread is fairly dead and this might not get seen; but I work Friday through Monday, so I'm going to go ahead and post this now while I have time. A bit more content and some rewriting of the ghost encounter leaves me a hopefully nice little update on Origins - Ghost of a Chance.

http://pastebin.com/Kye50Quw
Tags updating accordingly:
Current Tags: Posession, Masturbation, Ghost Sex
Future Tags: soft vore, possible soul vore/blending

I think I have a clearer idea for how to progress the story now; hopefully it reads well enough.

>>6552040
I'd offer to take a look at it, but I'm not going to be up late-enough and there's no point in doing it if you'll be gone for the weekend. Post whatever else you have done next thread and I'll take a look.

>>6552050
I have the thread up and I'll be able to look at replies even after it's archived - I just wanted to go ahead and post it now so I didn't forget or just didn't post because of work.

Given that it's usually the time when we make a new thread and that this is still here, may as well bump it.

We have been working on new stuff, right?

>>6552951
I dropped my latest offering earlier this week. I'm going to try to go back over that and clean up a few WiPs I have and see if I can finish them up with weekend.

I'm looking for some stuff I could do with human-on-fembot sex. Any ideas?

>>6553023
>It vibrates

>>6553023
>combat model
>animal model
>modifies herself so he can wear her
>makes another fembot for tag team action on the guy
>etc

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>>6553027
Her pussy, you mean? Hm, okay. I was imagining her as being "humanoid, but all shiny". Kind of like EDI in Mass Effect 3, I guess. The second to last one might be neat, with her controlling both bodies at once. Would be hell with pronoun trouble though.

Also, post robutts for inspiration if you please.

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>>6553041
Meant to reply to >>6553030 too there.

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Tried.

>>6553290
Hey, Inker, do you feel like drawing more Sororitas?

>>6553297
Might as well.

>>6553304

Could you draw the IG psyker using psychic powers to bridal carry his Sororitas lover?

>>6553306
What would that even look like?

>>6553319
Probably look like she's levitating in the air horizontally while the psyker has a hand to the side, below her back, and glowing with psychic power.

And the sister is doing her best to look cross with him for using his powers in such an irresponsible way.

>>6553290
I think it looks pretty good. I know it's not your thing, but it's still hot.

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>>6553306
Here you go.

>>6553368
Thanks.

>>6553405
That is beautiful, Inker. Thanks.

Still up for one more?

>>6553405
Wonderful

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More robo

>>6553545
Dandy. I've got some ideas for a fic with her, I'll have to get something started soon.

>>6553545
Hey, Inker, could you have some eldar save the sisters from this pic?>>6550931

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>>6553408
Oh yeah, sure. Sorry, had to do something on my own a bit.
And anyone else who got requests, fire away.
>>6553573
How would that look like, exactly?
Unless you mean an actual battle scene with fighting and stuff?

Hey, just stopping by to let everyone know where I've been.

My old HD died on me and I was left without any backups. I lost everything. Naturally, that kind of killed my motivation to write. I'll probably get back into the swing of things later but as for now I'm just left feeling apathetic

>>6553617
Would you be interested by >>6543421 ? Here's the reference pic deleted by the mods if you are : http://i.imgur.com/rmr2u9g.jpg

>>6553706
Either contribute or don't.

>>6553617
If you could, do a fight scene with Eldar Banshees saving the sisters from the vile grip of the tyranids.

>>6553706
Relax, you'll get back into the swing of things soon enough.

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>>6553617
Krieg-chan with her breasts bared after sloppy blowjob ?

>>6553829
Take your own advice and fuck the hell off.

>>6549426

its still technically this week!

i guess this is not really done since its not inked, but im kind of pressed for time and also gotten to the point where im annoyed with it enough that i just want to move on and try again later

http://i.imgur.com/iFBf95f.png waywatcher elf x gutter runner (rat man)

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To be Lascivious
- That is the mark of the Alien
To be Arousing
- That is the mark of the Alien
To be Desired
- That is the mark of the Alien
To be Soiled
- That is the mark of the Alien
To be Hunted
-That is the mark of the Alien
To be Fornicated
- That is the fate of the Alien
To be Impregnated
- For that is the fate of all Aliens

Forbidden Apocrypha of Nymphe, Roboute Guilliman.

>>6554427
You've got to share the rest of the text. And a gallery of all your work.

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>>6554427
10/10 picture and post

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>>6553023
I would fucking love >>6553030's idea about
>modifies herself so he can wear her

Other stuff is good too, but I'd love this

>>6553706
Aw, I loved your stuff, got stuff saved on pastebin?

>>6554517
You'll have to ask someone else for that- I was thinking of something that would resemble traditional sex a bit more, that's a bit too far-flung for me to work with. Plus, the fetish itself is one I personally dislike and I would be unable to write it properly as a result.

As a reminder, my kink list is here:
http://pastebin.com/NxBnLLEj

>>6554517
>Aw, I loved your stuff, got stuff saved on pastebin?
Yes, every story I've written (and finished) is up on my PB. The only unfinished things I lost that are gone for good were an oooold smut-off prompt about a witch girl summoning Satan and taking it in her beezlebutt and the lizard girl reverse rape story I was writing before the crash

>>6554568
On the bright side, you now have time for new prompts. You're accepting requests, right?

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>>6554606
Well I wasn't planning on it and I don't really have the drive to write anything at the moment. And with thanksgiving coming up I'll have fuck all time to actually write. But at the same time my best stories have always come from requests or discussion in threads that inspired me. So yeah, what the heck, maybe something will spark my interest again. If not, maybe someone with more drive (ha) than I could pick it up.

>>6554640
Feel free to leave feedback and chip in with discussions at least. Otherwise we'll be up here past thanksgiving.

>>6554426
Looks good, but if those knives are supposed to be pinning her arms in place, they should probably be embedded deeper in the ground.

Forced rat ogre oral when?

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>>6553617
Requesting Vostroya-chan joining in for support in >>6553967 request, thats quite an ordnance for a lone guardswoman.

>>6554820

thats a good point, i didnt really pay much attention to that point, i was just focused on trying to make them not look off. i could probably fix it but ehhh

also, later

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Good to see protein and carbs are still with us.

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>>6553776
Doing this one by one.

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Quick question, where can I find more Warframe goodness besides e621 and whatnot, since I looked through all of it.

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>>6553967
>>6554830
Hope this works.
>>6555200
I thought /d/ usually has a warframe thread going? Or did it get kicked to /aco/?

>>6555134
>>6555210
Looking sweet, Inker
Minding if I ask a request of my own? A naked eldar ranger gal, laying flushed and breathless inside her cameleoline cloak during or after sexy times ?

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The Vixen:
http://archiveofourown.org/works/5202542/chapters/11990246
https://www.literotica.com/s/the-vixen-1

When a human prisoner-of-war is forced to become the servant of an arrogant female kitsune, he decides to bide his time and wait for a chance to escape. But extricating himself from the clutches of that mocking, manipulative vixen proves more difficult than he ever expected...

>>6554820

ran out of time on this, probably will finish later. Didn't help that my first attempt I spent a few hours on got over worked to ruin.

http://imgur.com/PKju5mW rat ogre x elf oral

>>6555549
As a basic sketch, that's actually really good. I like the angle and the layout of the characters a lot, so it'll be quite nice to see it when it's done.

How do I write good smut?

>>6555583
I can't really give you a checklist of 'how to write good smut', but I can offer some tidbits that you may or may not have worked out for yourself.
First and foremost, make sure you're writing for yourself, or because you truly enjoy the subject matter. Nothing guarantees a faulty product more than hating making it.
Write everything down; every idea that pops into your head, every inspiration for the piece, every possible twist or turn. Everything, even if you don't think it'll work with the piece or if you don't think it's all that good. It's far easier to cut the piece down than to remember that perfect idea you had a week ago but never wrote down.
Does an idea arouse you? Does it excite you? Do you think it'd make a good story? Jot it down, don't think about what it'll do for anyone other than yourself. After that, it's just practice and revision.
Basically, just keep writing what you like, because there will ALWAYS be someone out there who'll enjoy it, no matter how sick or disgusting you might think your fetishes are. There's always a 'next time' if you aren't happy with your piece, and remember; if you build it, they will come.

>>6555603
Wish I had a coat like that. Especially in this weather.

>>6555210
Thanks a lot, man.

>>6555603
Cios? Is that you?

>>6555755
It's his art but its from a while ago. Don't think it's him

http://www.rkursem.com/poll/view.php?id=6be58f97f0fc9fc49

Place your vote, you can add new options.

>>6555844
What's this poll for anyway? It doesn't really say what the options apply to.

>>6555850
I'm secretly making a shitty monster girl eroge and getting a feel for what people want to see in it.

>>6555855
we should totally have someone make a 40k eroge, too.

>>6555858
As a Rogue Trader or as a Radical Inquisitor?

>>6548431
Pretty good story, given the pitch. The buildup is nice and the setting coherent; which isn't always easy when you base yourself on a rather bare-bones doujin.

As the other have said, the sex itself feels a bit rushed since you seem to try to cram multiple fetishes in at once; but the whole is totally worth reading.

>>6552040
You might want to leave a blank line between your paragraphs to improve readability, but it is readable enough. Nice work on the possession, it isn't something easy to write. Sneaky ghost!

>>6555347
I like it. I'm a sucker for such fluffy stories. Great job on explaining the setting, it reads like a breeze without bogging down and the sex is nice.

A couple of things I'd mention for your consideration: first her 'bossyness/bullying/mocking' is pretty tame, the kind that can simply be shrugged off. Another thing is that the end is quite abrupt, you might want to go a bit more into his internal conflict. (And also, not enough 'touch fluffy tail', but that's a personal kink.) But all in all great work!

>>6554426
>>6555549
Glad to see you again! Good job on both pics.

>>6553706
Ouch!

>>6556022
Those two will be among the various different classes to choose from.

>>6555347
You know, I read this almost right after you posted it on AooO. I didn't know you lurked around /d/ and was considering contacting you and asking if you'd ever considered posting your work here. I like your stuff and we always appreciate more writers.

>>6556077
I don't think you get how eroge usually work.

I need feedback on something. Less for the smut, more for the actual story, such as it is. I need to know if what happens in it makes sense. Specifically what the woman does. You'll know what I mean if you read it.

https://drive.google.com/open?id=0B5EzPaxwR_jIRmhqVFE2akY5VlE

>>6556235
I guess it's good enough, but the thing is that you're just plain overthinking it. Just write. When you have a completed story, then you can ask for feedback.

>>6556475
I need to get that part right. Or everything I've got planned will fall apart.

>>6556478
As I said, I can't tell if it's "right" unless the rest of it is there. There are some things you just have to figure out on your own- I can give advice and point out grammatical mistakes, but the job of writing the story itself can't be outsourced.

Try to put yourself into her shoes- if you were in her situation, would doing what she does make sense? If the answer is no, you have to either rewrite it so it does make sense or scrap it completely. It's painful, but often it's necessary.

Don't feel compelled to make it perfect. Worst case, you know what not to do next time.

>>6556482
Well, the gist of what I've got planned is for to her to stay with him and start suffering from Stockholm Syndrome. That's the tl;dr, anyway.

As for putting myself in her shoes, I don't know. If I were ever in that sort of situation, I'd be in such an emotional state that I don't know what I'd do, or say.

What I'm asking is; does it seem like such a thing could happen that way?

>>6556498
I don't know either, but different people react in different ways to shit like that.

To be blunt, if you don't think you can make it convincing, just drop the idea completely. Better to accept that you can't do justice to it than to end up creating something that feels utterly disappointing to you. There's no shame in giving up.

>>6556505
It seems like it could work to me, but I'm concerned that other people might not think the same way. The guy I usually ask about stuff like this said that it made sense, but he says everything I write is great, so I don't really believe him anymore.

>>6556511
I get the feeling he's afraid to tell you what he really thinks because it might hurt your feelings or something. If he's not going to be honest with you, look for someone who will be. Until then, go with your gut feeling- if it doesn't feel right to you, drop it and forget you ever worked on it. It'll hurt, but it'll be for the best. Psychological shit like that is something most writers choose not to do for good reason, after all- it's just too difficult and unrewarding to make it work.

>>6556498
>>6556505

for myself, the most frustrating, unfun stuff comes when i'm either trying to "save" something, or when im too afraid about trying something new since i might "ruin" something. its best to just do what you want, see what works or doesn't work, and move on, instead of spending too much time trying to rework something.

the one saying about playing Go applies here, I think. "lose your first 100 games quickly".

>>6556539
Ohey skavanon, if it's not too much to ask, can you draw a minotaur doing what he does best on an elf? Her consent is at your discretion, if course.

There's a lack of ripplingly swole minotaur action in this thread is what I saying, and that rat ogre you drew is pretty ace.

>>6556571

no problem. I need more practice on big guys; they're a great way to get familiar with musculature. good form exercise as well.

There's far too little consensual stuff in porn.

I wonder why.

>>6556609
Because it's too...normal, for lack of a better word. Fortunately, nearly all of our work fits into the consensual category. Just look at the list.

>>6556647
True. But it was the "Her consent is at your discretion" part in >>6556571 that caught my eye.

Rapey minotaur stuff is so easy to find its not even funny. Consensual f!Elf/m!Minotaur? That'd be something I'd like to see. Especially if there was some kind of development to their relationship beyond just sex (though that's always a good).

>>6556650
>Especially if there was some kind of development to their relationship beyond just sex (though that's always a good).
Maybe a curvy and semi-fit elf wants to get into wrestling, but the only tutor around is Mister Minotaur?

>>6556656
That could work, yeah. Though you'd have to work to make their relationship develop in a natural manner. Be good if she's like the child of nobility, wants to learn how to fight and the only tutor is this scarred old minotaur.

>>6556658
Or you know, it could be casual romance-less sex. That happens too.

>>6556659
I did consider that, yeah. But somewhat less satisfying. Plus, if they're in a long-term relationship, there's more room to have them try new things in the bedroom.

>>6556660
It's just a picture, stop thinking so hard. The big narratives work better when it's not encompassed in a single pic.

>>6556698
When did I say anything about a picture? I thought this was a smut thread.

>>6556656
>see this
>am compelled to munchkin the fuck out of this idea
>bring her up to bullshit levels in Grappling skill

Big, mean, nasty giant coming to destroy your village? Local elf girl saves the day!...

BY DROPPING THE FUCKER WITH A HIGH-INTENSITY SUPLEX SLAM!

>>6556702
WHATCHA GONNA DO
WHEN ELF SUPERIORITY ROLLS OVER YOUUU

>>6556701
I meant the thing you were originally referring to about the minotaur, which was a pic request up >>6556609

Plus, it's the old stereotype that minotaurs rape and that elves are raped. In a lot of peoples' minds, it being consensual would be unthinkable.

>>6556752
Hence why I think a story subverting that would be such a good one.

Has anyone ever considered female Elf on male Minotaur rape instead?

Or maybe this discussion was meaningless from the start because it's not rape if it's an elf after all.

>>6556775
Minotaurs raping is completely overdone. If you mean the female Elf raping the Minotaur, I'd only believe it if she's secretly a succubus.

>>6556775
I knew someone was going to suggest this. And I agree with >>6556777 its just the same problem but from the other side.

Should I make a first kiss between a woman suffering from stockholm syndrome and the man who kidnapped her seem romantic, or would that just be weird?

>>6556790
Look, just write what you personally want to write and stop worrying so much about its reception. I'm starting to think you should dump the Stockholm Syndrome thing completely if it's causing you this much distress. It's obviously more trouble than it could possibly be worth.

Any further questions, see this particular line in >>6555593:
keep writing what you like, because there will ALWAYS be someone out there who'll enjoy it, no matter how sick or disgusting you might think your fetishes are.

Any further questions are just procrastinating on your part now.

>>6556805
I don't write this stuff for other people. I'm used to no-one reading my stuff by now. I write this stuff for me, and what I enjoy is stuff that makes sense. But I don't have the same idea of what makes sense as everyone else, I'm biased, thus all the questions.

>>6556813
Good point. In that case, write what makes sense to yourself first and foremost. Worry about other peoples' opinions when it's all finished and posted.

Doubt is your enemy as a writer. Let it into your head and you'll never get anything done, I can tell you that from experience. Just keep writing, stay focused on what you're doing, and be assured that you'll always be able to please at least one other person besides yourself. Don't sweat the details, you can always edit it later.

>>6556819
Too late for that. If I get rid of my perpetual self-doubt, I doubt I'll have any personality left.

>>6556824
You'd be surprised by what a little confidence in oneself can do to a person. Just try it. Nobody likes a doubter.

>>6556824
I'm a bit late to the party here, but I have some advice if you're questioning yourself. You're doing this the hard way, by trying to write a logical train of events that makes sense to everyone. What you really should do is write what you want, with little to no concern for if it makes sense. Then, read it yourself. If it doesn't make sense, figure out what you would need for it to make sense. If you think she falls too quickly, throw in an extra scene or two of him being particularly nice. If you think that she should have run away/killed herself/whatever at some particular point, add a scene that gives her a reason not to. Sensibility isn't actually a constraint when you write. Write what you want, then make it work. Then, when it makes sense to you, come back and ask again. Chances are, it'll make sense to us as well.

>>6556864
You're right. Both of you.

I think I'm just putting this off because I've been marathoning Jessica Jones and I feel like David Tennant's character. Its not a nice feeling.

>>6556235
>https://drive.google.com/open?id=0B5EzPaxwR_jIRmhqVFE2akY5VlE
I like stockholm syndrome tropes and write about them and the complex post traumatic stress disorder that results from long periods of captivity; I'll take a look and review what you've got so far.

>As her legs were tied tightly back to her wrists, her body was bowed pushing forward her succulent young breasts.
Normally I don't care, but this is seriously awkward phrasing and took me right out of the story. Not good in the first few paragraphs. Move 'forward' to the end of the sentence. Also, this position is called the 'hogtie' and is often used as a verb; you could use that instead if you want.

>Novice Sister Maria had thought so; he wondered if she still did – last time he'd checked she was still working for the same slave owner, though they no longer sold her as a nun.
"Whoring for the same slave owner" I assume? This tangent leaves a question in my mind and also takes me out of the present moment with Courtney (nice name for her btw, it does make me think of an innocent young virgin).

>He knew, correctly, that she was far too stiff to move much, but she tried with numb fingers to unclasp the ball-gag straps from around her face. She fumbled uselessly for a few seconds while Jason stripped off his clothes until he stood naked at the end of the bed.
OK, this part and the few paragraphs that follow are unrealistic. He should at least secure her to the bed before taking his own clothes off. A person is much less capable of fine motor control after being hogtied for a few hours, true, but they can still make a decent attempt at running away (don't ask how I know this) and chasing her would just be awkward while he's taking his pants off. Moreover, if he's going to cut her clothes off anyway, there's no reason not to tie her in the position he wants her in before doing so.

>Her beasts were firm enough to sit up roundly on her chest,
small typo

>>6556235
>>6556891
>He knelt there for a second, and let it slap against her flat stomach.
Let what slap against her stomach?

>He hadn't said anything to her since he'd warned her about the knife.
? When?

>He managed to get it in her eyes and her mouth, and even in her upturned nose, where frantic air bubbles forced through. Courtney wanted to speak again, but she was coughing too hard. A blast of sperm right into her open mouth felt like it choked her, and she coughed the slimy seed out as Jason wiped his cock and balls off with the remains of her discarded shorts. She considered trying to plead with him again, to say that she hadn’t meant what she’d said… But that would’ve been a lie. At that moment, she’d have done anything to keep feeling that good.
lol. I'm thinking you've never gotten cum up your nose or in your eye. Trust me, it doesn't feel good. You should probably move the "She considered trying to plead with him again, to say that she hadn’t meant what she’d said" part to after the vaginal sex; it would make a lot more sense there.

Other than that, her reaction to the first part - well, the sex is extremely idealized, but I get where you're going with it and by porn standards it's fine - seems realistic. He's acted in a manner that suggests he's not going to kill her after he's finished raping her. However, she should probably still be trying to escape for at least a few more days/weeks in story time; Stockholm Syndrome does take time to set in, and once the threat of the buyer is gone, there's not much reason for her to stay with him. You could have the buyer discover the deception and now they're both on the run? That would give them both a reason to stick together.

>>6556891
I did consider having him tie her down, but that would add complications to the part where they change so she's on top, so I left it out.

As for >>6556897 you've got a good point about Stck Syn needing time to set in, I reckon I could fit that in somewhere. The other stuff I can fix fairly easily, thanks.

So I have an idea I want to work on, and mostly it's just a couple of personal kinks and the like. I'm mentioning it now because I'd love some input on execution and roughing out the fine details.

The basic idea involves two elves; twin sisters, who end up discovering a plot device that encourages/enables them to get together and have sex. The plot device is something I'd like help on, or some other root of 'how do we build up to the fun part'.

From here, I wanted to expand the plot into the twins getting their hot mother involved (they're Elves, so they all look like hot twenty-somethings'.

That's all I have, and I'd really appreciate any ideas for a setting (existing or homebrew) and just general thoughts or suggestions. Thank you all in advance!

>>6556933
The first thing that comes to mind is some form of ritual with sex as a component. There's quite a bit of variability with this kind of thing, depending on what kind of characterization you want to have. The ritual could just require sex of any kind and the sisters could choose to do so with each other out of convenience, zero chance of pregnancy, or to foster some long-hidden affection. It's also possible that the ritual requires some component of the taboo, either the incest, lesbianism, or both. Either approach gives justification for including the mother, as more stuff in->more magic out. As to the effect of the ritual, I could care less. I don't even think that there's a need to reveal that at the start, if you choose not to.

>>6556945
I definitely like that idea!

As far as the sisters go, I think what I want to emphasize is that before the ritual, they're neutral about the whole idea of sex with each other. After the ritual, they realize that it's -amazing- and want to keep going.

>>6556957
In that case, I would probably suggest that they decide to fuck each other because they're the only ones they can trust. You can play up their sisterly relation, then contrast it with the new experience of incestuous lesbianism. It could be interesting. If you wish, you could also always add in an amount of discomfort and uncertainty, making them keep doing rituals as an excuse to have sex as they slowly abandon the pretext. Then, they can use the same excuse to bring their mother into it.

>>6556963

This is all very helpful! Thank you. I'm definitely aiming for that reluctance to start but then that progression to wholly embracing it.

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My current line of thought: things like pic related, with a cyberpunk scifi setting where four-legged cyborg looks have become a fashion trend. No slavery/legal status changes, more like peer and social pressure making it popular as a voluntary thing.

I'm still deciding on story stuff, but I'm thinking something with either a blind date ending up as petplay kink, or a girl and her new dog ending up as bestiality and role-reversal kink.

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>>6556036
Thanks for the feedback. You can tell I'm an escapee from the old /gfd/ threads on /r9k/, given how 'gentle' the 'femdom' in my stories usually is.

>>6556132

I've been writing a few monster-girl stories lately, some of which have only a tangential connection to gentle femdom, so I'll be posting them here.

I've a slimegirl story to upload next, but I'm always interested in hearing what kind of stuff people would like to read, so any suggestions?

>>6557068
Please write something with ghosts/possession. I'm writing my own I posted earlier in this thread,and I would love to see how someone else handles ghost sex or unwilling masturbation via ghost. Something like that.

Barring that, driders are my favorite monster girls.

>>6557054
I'd like to see the petplay idea. We really don't have anything like that.

>>6557068
Honestly, I'm with this guy >>6557184. I'd like to see your take on undead in general. Your smut is alright, but I've always liked how you do romance. Undead have great potential.

>>6555549
This is looking like one of your best, man. Hopefully we'll see the Packmaster getting in on the action afterwards.

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why are elves with dicks so delicious?

>>6557068
Engulfing, if you go for slimegirl goodness. Put that gelatinous body to good use.

Revised vote for that idea.
http://strawpoll.me/6084224

>>6557507
I'd like to add "angel" to mine. But really, just do them all.

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>>6557526
Sure thing, here you go.

>>6557537
I was thinking of the more traditional variety with feathery wings, halo, and big tits, but thanks anyway.

>>6557541
Actually the one I posted is the more traditional version, but yeah I'll see about including something like that, though I don't think I'm going to do just a human with two wings and a halo, but something not too far off.

>>6556933
>>6556963

Back brainstorming on this idea: I'm thinking that the ritual is self-referential and reinforcing. Elements and practitioners that are "Like with Like" are auspicious and have improved magical correspondences.

So like, the logical progression is 'girl/girl' then 'sisters'; 'twins', etc.

>>6557545
Maybe glowing white skin or something?

>>6557569
Not a bad suggestion. But yeah, big tits are go.

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>>6554451
>You've got to share the rest of the text
Write it would as easy as write Codex Astartes.

>And a gallery of all your work.
Later, sorry.

>>6554452
I should draw this picture again.

>>6557601
Cute jenny

>I should draw this picture again.
For what little its worth that'd make me very happy.

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>>6557605
It's good to hear anon.

>>6557676
I'm actually the same guy who requested it in the first place months ago. It was great then but you've really improved since as well.

>>6555578
>>6556036
>>6557316

thanks for the replies; I'm glad you folks think its looking alright. i've messed with it a bit, but im kind of hesitating to work on it more now, since while my rough sketches are coming out better than before, my inking techniques are still leaving a lot to be desired.

case in point, i inked the sketch of the gutter runner and waywatcher, and while im not going to say its RUINED, i'm also not really happy with it. http://i.imgur.com/rxMx6v5.png

like it doesn't help that im reading guides and looking at references from things like Berserk and some other artists and holy shit i have a lot of room for improvement. i wish i had a better sense of what i was doing, or what i should be doing. eesh.

>>6556719
/r/ing elf femdom involving a amazoinan (or simply /fit/) elf ladyknight showing a human why elves are always better

>>6557054
>I'm still deciding on story stuff, but I'm thinking something with either a blind date ending up as petplay kink, or a girl and her new dog ending up as bestiality and role-reversal kink.
My first thought was to suggest mixing the two, a bling date with an unmodified girl and a guy with a fourlegged bodymod and have it lead to petplay and bestialityplay

>>6557068
I love gentle femdom and would love to see more stories involving monstergirls in that style
Though how much monster do you like in your monstergirl?
Cause I prefer them obviously feminine but still pretty monstrous

>>6557601
You should also draw more chibi eldars, that's too cute to be heresy.

>>6557732

okay i went and fucked with it more. it comes out in a very rough, sketchy way thats pretty much my signature style at this point. i keep trying to draw otherwise, but im pretty sure there's a fundamental skill im shit at that is causing me to be unable to make more clean art. the dangers of being self-taught.

something is really off about the way i use line thickness and use tone. i'm pretty envious of some other artists in this thread that are able to do a bit more cartoony/clear style with real solid, smooth lines, since when i do it it just looks real off for a variety of reasons.

anyways enough kvetching, i'll post something different next time.

http://i.imgur.com/HjolBpZ.png elf waywatcher x skaven gutter runner v.3

>>6557886
Remind me again why you're not getting rich from drawing for RPG books and spending it all on hookers and blow?

>>6557886
Seriously, from the perspective of someone who messes up stick figures when he attempts to draw, this is great. I can imagine you see a lot of things you'd like to improve, but you're being way too hard on yourself.

From my pov, the only thing that looks slightly off in your drawing is the elf's hand. Too thick, too 'claw-like' (by lack of better term). But it's pretty minor.

>>6557886
Although this is practically a work of art anyway, I think you went a mite overboard on the shading. Makes it harder to pick out the details.

>>6558269
>http://i.imgur.com/HjolBpZ.png
Definitely agree with this. It's hard to see the skaven in particular. Could you do the lineart in pen and then maybe color with something else? Or post some lineart so maybe one of us can take a crack at shading it somehow?

Looks like we finally hit bump limit.
New thread on weekend then?

>>6558324
Yup. Until then, guys (and presumably gals).

>>6558279

Oh yeah, I defiantly did; it was a bit of an overreaction / experimentation. I have the old versions of the thing posted elsewhere in the thread, if someone else wants to play with it. ive also got the old versions in my imgur album (http://imgur.com/a/fQC6O).

I don't really have anything to color with, and I've got no experience in that sort of thing, unfortunately. Maybe I'll branch out into doing that, at least as a change of pace.

Thanks for the kind words, as well. I moved onto working on the rat ogre / elf piece, and I took effort to avoid chicken-scratching as much, and sticking with my fine pen. Think it is turning out better. I can already tell I've goofed a bit in places, but some of its correctable, some of it is live and learn.

http://i.imgur.com/OmpSg7g.png rat ogre x waywatcher elf (wip)

see you next thread

>>6558279
here's more clear lineart of it, also. trying to learn how to be decent with a tablet.
http://i.imgur.com/2gh9bgi.png

>>6557732
>>6557886

The first one's certainly the better of the two - there's a nice balance between the scratchy style and clarity. It might be a strange thing to say, but at times I think there's almost too much detail even though it's drawn very well - the combination of Kerillian's outfit and the Skaven's natural texturing means the areas around where their bodies meet are very busy. Colour might help - I know you said it's not something you've tried before, but it might be worth farting around with.

>>6558416
This, though, is really really good. I can't see much there to offer feedback on, just that I'm looking forward to it being finished.

Hopefully you'll see this before the thread 404's.

>>6558466
Actually, one more idea - one way of circumventing the detail issue might be to draw the female characters naked, or at least mostly so. As well as making the pictures less busy, it also emphasises the contrast between the two partners.

>>6558468
>>6558466

thanks, I agree with what you've said. I'm glad you're still enjoying the stuff I make!

I'm probably going to not get into coloring, just since I still feel like I have a lot to develop with working with ink. the detail issue is actually pretty important for me to think about. with ink, there's a real need to develop a means to create distinction between different areas via different line styles/thickness/etc, and to know where detail is needed or not. the issues im having with detailed spots not reading separately means i need to figure that stuff out better. thanks for pointing that out.

still, just having the women be naked is something i should do too. shading flesh is really hard, and i need work on it as much as anything.

i'll have more stuff for next thread

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I'll be reposting in next thread anyway, but whatever. Pic related came from a tumblr request for a "How about a mind broken Sister of Battle strapped/fused into a Tyranid organism to be used for breeding in the field?"

I enjoyed designing the 'nid, almost more than the sister getting impregnated. Hope everything looks clear enough.

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>>6557184
>>6557237
I think I have an idea for a sexy poltergeist story. Thanks anons.

>>6557805
>I prefer them obviously feminine but still pretty monstrous

Me too, anon, although I do like some of the weirder 'creepy-waifu' types.

>>6558476
No worries dude. It's just as interesting watching you develop artistically as it is looking at horrible beast men ravishing sexy ladies