Order of the Stick #1023: Last Call
I feel like you could do a thog edit of this entire fucking arc.
Just take only the four or five actually inportant panels in the arc, stitch them together, and pull out all the useless words.
i think the challenge ought to be to keep as much of the plot intact as possible while cutting out as many words as one can
So has this guy ever explained his proposed campaign setting?
Surely any NDA has expired by now.
You could cut it down a bit more while still making full sense. You do lose some nuance, though.
I added a little thing, so it's not quite a classic Thog.
I asked him personally about it a few years ago when people where considering a fundraiser to buy the rights to the submission from WotC. He basically stated that the NDA was very strict but that some elements of his submission ended up seeing print elsewhere.
>Thog doing someone you care about
>I friendly character
Will we ever see Thog again?
Will Rich Burlew ever stop hating the best character he's ever written?
I think this as short as you can make it without losing any of the "plot"
Sabine might find him in Hell and then make use of him in her revenge against Tarquin.
>The gods, taken as a group, do not have our best interests as their highest priority
Wow, do you think that because a solid half-plus of them are Neutral or Evil, or because the stake is literally everything that exists?
I know Roy's basically supposed to be Fantasy Picard or something, but goddamn if he doesn't run his mouth on things that are COMPLETELY OBVIOUS.
In fact, shouldn't he be happy if one of the gods breaks the rules, so the vote goes null and has to be retaken, and the godsmoot rules have to be rewritten or something?
>Evil Vampire admits that he's going to go tamper with the vote
>"Quick, send me after the Vampire to prevent the votes being tampered with"
>"But that would tamper with the votes"
y u do dis
This, so fucking much.
It's not clever, it's stupid, and it never should have been allowed. This 'conflict' only exists to generate last-minute tension and resolve the vampire plot, which could have been done much faster much better.
Who wants to bet the king claims that since the council had to be vamped for them to produce a 'yes', he votes 'no'?
If not a smidgen of common sense from the Dwarf King God
Then my guess is that Durkon won't be saved by Xykon or Redcloak
Nor will he be saved by Roy & Friends
Instead Durkon will, upon returning home, come to his own rescue by manipulating Durkula into doing something against his own best interests.
Probably after learning what really happened to his Dad/Mom/People.
Also, the vote might actually still go through and the world might be entirely destroyed; only for the main cast to be stuck beyond the Gate, and then find out the Scribble doesn't need to be destroyed.
Otherwise Durkula's prophecy might instead come true in a different way, and Durkula will just start murdering Dwarves whole-sale.
This reminds of old Chick Tracts versus new Chick Tracts.
>what if: Thog joined the Order of the Stick
Roy is more suited for an antagonist or supporting cast anyway, a fighter who overthinks everything because daddy issues? Boring and preachy.
It's honestly the shittiest fucking arc I have seen in the entire duration of this comic.
It's fucking baffling how terribly this is written. I would rather be back on Namek right now than this shit.
>A webcomic creator writes his comic to be terrible and plodding because he wants you to hate it
>A webcomic writer lays on heavy and long the stupid to get readers to be as frustrated with the situation as the protagonist at its center
>some people are too dumb to get this and think he's just bad by accident
>Rich Burlew wants you to think he's an incompetent writer
>Rich Burlew wants you to know he doesn't know how to convey information without directly telling the reader.
>Rich Burlew wants you to know that he doesn't know how to make a compelling character arc
>A webcomic writer shits up his webcomic so that people know how shitty it is
>People don't realize that it's on purpose
>YOU STUPID FOOLS
>Instead of writing a situation that is actually compelling and not completely stupid, he wrote a situation that is completely stupid so his protagonist could call it completely stupid, because we as readers would agree and identify with the feelings of the protagonist, as we rightly view it as completely stupid
>This is good writing, and not just a bad writer being bad
Not sure if b8ing for (You)s or Rich found /tg/
So what you're saying is he is literally doing the writer's equivalent of pic related.
It's the end of act 1 of this book, dude. It's the start of this plot, not the end of it.
Anyway, Rich pointed out that complaints about the pacing are mostly complaints about the update schedule, and that he writes for the trade, which I respect him for.
God damn /tg/ frogs
Making my serious edit despite a lot of other posters already having it covered.
Do it again.
This time try and be creative, we've already seen people cut the script down without losing the information or the joke.
No need for 30 brevity edits. So do something different.
We need to start The Thog Tournament to determine which one of these plentiful Thogs is worthy to post his shitty edits at /tg/.
Not everyone in the room heard Durkon say that. Durkon is doing that on his own, without any help from an official delegate in the room. Half the people in the room support the result he's trying to rig in his technically legal, though shady, manner. You are reaching for a reason to be upset. Just bitch about the pacing or release schedule more.
>T-they didn't *hear* the evil vampire proclaiming how he's going to rig the vote even though everyone's there and there's not a single shred of dialogue to support that justification
Go to bed Rich.
Got you one better
So, we know from Durkon's vamping that when a Cleric gets vamped, they switch to a deity appropriate to their pantheon, hence Durkula's spirit beign a servant of Hel rather than Nergal (the deity of the vamprie that spawned him)
So how is it that the followers of an elemental cult outside of any pantheon became servants of Hel one and all?
Appropriate god of your pantheon gets first dibs, the siring vamp's God gets second if the new vamps have no God to claim them.
Theoretically if neither has a God who wants them, they're first come first serve.
> Didn't cut one word out of Roy's second speech balloon in panel 3
Nobody cares who Thogs first, only who Thogs best.
Erfworld also has three people. Writer, linework guy, colorist.
Also apparently Rich is chronically unwell or something, though I don't think he's ever specified what it is he has, just that he has something.
Even shorter version.
At this point I'm stretching it.
I like your ideas, but I prefer the dialogue to retain some flow. Here's a hybrid of yours with my earlier edit.