ITT: Reality Check ragequits and not a single fuck is given, berserkers, The Art of War (and how it doesnt apply to your fanfic), the only interesting HiE is Hydroelectric dams in Equestria, noone can write Spike, Pony Creator still exists, Voiceguy gets cuck'd but he's more distraught over having to read Bleedinfics, talking your parents into reading horsewords, little birds are made when a Ford Falcon gets fucked by a Toyota Tercel, halfswording, self inserts that dent being self inserts, some poor bastard started reading Blooming Moon Chronicles, no one knows what the AU tag is for, Regi drowns himself in tears, and counting down to Bowie in Equestria fics
Tired of the same old 'Human goes to Equestria to fuck his herd of underage waifus' formula? Burnt out after reading that Fallout crossover? Well, we've compiled the best of the worst in order to bring you our absolute average!
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>Need a somewhat average writing prompt which was last updated last year?:
>how do I write fanfiction?
>Riffs & Reviews:
>Prompt of the Week: Your favorite musician dies and appears in Equestria
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I fucking give up. There is literally no point in continuing to write in fimfiction. I can't seem to make any headway with my stories(I'm on my seventh fiction, and I only have 30 followers, which your supposed to have at least 50-100 by then.)
I just don't know what to do. I feel like nothing is working.
Are you writing E-rated comedy or SoL? Because unless that's the case, you're putting yourself down prematurely. Not to mention basing your worth as a fanfic writer on completely meaningless numbers.
Fine, whatever its my own personal musings. But it still doesn't change the fact that I barely get any views on my stories. Nor do I even have any feedback, having to go to lengths to ask in a group for it.
Lol, this is why I write trollfics/crackfics all the time.
Posting any story in fimfiction is unreliable. Why even bother working hard on a fic when you can just shit out a story and get the mad views.
Seriously, what a waste of time.
>not writing for you
>not writing to improve your skills as a writer
>not writing the stories you want to write and fuck everyone else
>caring about the quantity of people that read it as long as there are some people that legitimately enjoy it
Reminder that the reason the majority of popular stuff is popular is because it's watered-down to the critical point of having the most mass appeal and the least quality it can get away with.
>this is why I write trollfics/crackfics all the time
implying that its a conscious decision to write shit
>you can just shit out a story and get the mad views.
if by 'mad views' you mean less than 100, then I guess?
>Seriously, what a waste of time
Yes. Yes, you are. Yet we still tolerate your bullshit.
Been a while since I read any sadfics. I've read Yours Truly a good while ago.
Got any recommendations?
Welp, as per usual I'm writing a million different things that I will probably never finish. MPL related I have on the go a story set four generations after the death of the mane five with alicorn twilight the only survive and a Yugioh crossover the blends the pilots of the two shows as well as the lore with actually fitting custom decks for everyone this time unlike the other crossovers where everyone gets net-decked.
But I'm sure my D&D campaign, Don't Rest Your Head campaign and generally laziness will prevent me from reaching any sort of completeness.
>a Yugioh crossover the blends the pilots of the two shows as well as the lore with actually fitting custom decks for everyone this time unlike the other crossovers where everyone gets net-decked.
I have no idea what any of that means, but wake me up when every pony is doing their faggy card battle bullshit while riding motorcycles
>Regi drowns himself in tears
it still hurts, anon
STARMAN I MISS YOU
How would a human ride a motorcycle while playing a card battle game?
besides ponka had that goofy bicycle-helicopter. thats kinda motorcyclish
>I bought Blackstar today
people still buy music?
stop being a woman. Goddamn I'm willing to bet youve never even met this person.
Dead people whom youve never met shouldnt mean anything to you. Save that for the handful of people you actually give a shit about
dude, i didn't even break 100 until i had 25 stories.
I have over 2000 now
>stop being a woman
>implying only women ahve emotions
>implying there's anything wrong with women
that's some pretty hardcore sexism bro
How in the bloody hell.
I'd probably be sad if I found out if any of you guys died, despite not actually 'knowing' who any of you are save very few exceptions.
>caring about followers
Why? They don't even really help with story or even blog post views.
You want to get featured? Write a comedy oneshot or some "filly Twilight bugs Celestia over whether the light stays on when you close the fridge door." Getting featured's easy. Getting featured while writing the story you want to is where the challenge lies.
Ironically shit is still shit.
>alicorn twilight the only survive
It's not one of those "who wants to live forever?" angstfests, is it? Because that subgenre of Twilicorn ran its course well over a year ago.
Eh... I guess if you enjoy writing it. I couldn't imagine any anime crossovers--let alone one so strange as one centered around a children's card game--being all that good or blending the two universes terribly well.
Just wait til Simon or Garfunkel die
they're both 74and /mu/ plays The Sound of Silence for twenty hours.
>How in the bloody hell.
If that's Regi, it's because he was really memey back in the day and got a lot of ironic followers for shitposting and "first commenting" on stories. Then he got gud and got even more followers.
Full meta's banned. Just write a story about the stallion Rigid Air going on a horsecock journey.
theres always deniability. write your story about an effeminate minotaur that sucks horsecock all round the land, then feign surprise if the commenters mention that there just so happens to be a fimfiction user with the same name
As someone who used to write but gave up because I lost interest, I can only say to write for yourself. If you start to do it for others like I did, you'll burn out instantly and the fun will be gone. Also, the follower number doesn't mean shit in my opinion so don't take that as a measurment of your writing skill. It's the likes and dislikes that count in my opinion. Keep it up writebro, but only if you do it for yourself
memes, and then i wrote a ton for a while
I became sort of a cult personality, i got featured a few times, and i was the most prolific author by story count for a little over two years
>they're both 74
>Full meta's banned. Just write a story about the stallion Rigid Air going on a horsecock journey.
I endorse all of this fully. Please, brave anon, the world needs to know about my hundred horsecock escapade.
Welp, lost my voice. Throat is all sore and shit, and I can barely speak.
I'll probably still read something, for comedic value, something super short, and even more garbage than a bleedin story. Sorry Bleedin.
>watched labyrinth yesterday
>going to watch the man who fell to earth and merry christmas mr lawrence today
But what a way to leave.
>I'd probably be sad if I found out if any of you guys died, despite not actually 'knowing' who any of you are save very few exceptions.
The worst thing in my opinion is not knowing when someone dies, because their relatives, if they even have any, wouldn't post about it here.
nice digits m8
Is it a bad idea to attempt a Lovecraft inspired story for my first fic ever? I have some ideas floating around in my head but I'm not even sure I can get regular characterization down, let alone getting it right with such an out of place plot occurring.
what happened to blooming moon anon?
did he get halfway through the first book and off himself? was david bowie blooming moon anon? no one else in the history of ever has read that series. we may never find out what happens in it
...Is that the secret of Blooming Moon Chronicles? Is it like some pony King in Yellow? Do we never hear of people who have read it because the text devours them in some Lovecraftian way?
This must be the work of an enemy Stand.
>Damage Transfer: If someone reading touches a page in The Book, all that is described within that page is transfered to him, be it diseases or injuries, no matter if the page was ripped or not. Takuma uses this ability in conjunction with the memory of a car accident he was involved in to kill his victims.
Blooming Moon Chronicles is The Book.
But The Book only records its user's memories. And besides the fact that Stands are manifestations of its user's fighting spirit and can't be "mass produced", they're not visible or tangible to normal people.
This is not how Araki-sama envisioned the glorious JoJo canon.
>This must be the work of an enemy Stand.
"You thought it was Dio. But it was me, Blooming Moon, all along!"
You just found a very impressionable young Twilight Sparkle and she asks you what do you read in your free time.
Just look up Jojo'z Bizarre Adventure on derpibooru.
"An autistic fanfic luring in autists and people who want to laugh at it!
Little do they know, the moment they start reading, they are unable to stop!
With time, their bodies start to decompose and the victim cannot even react as their rotting eyes try to take in the last few sentence of the story.
That is the power of my Stand,
Guys, I am trying to end my depression and my first objective is to read pony fics again. Give me your best suggestion so I can get hooked.
"Sadness" is generally used to define a lighter state than "Depression". I do know than depression as a clinical term is diferent from the social meaning of the word, but social meaning and dictionary meaning rarely are in good terms. They like to have petty fights over punctuation and all that crud.
"Social meaning" is not what the definition of depression really is and it really fucking upsets whenever someone implies it is.
The twist is that clinical depression and situational depression are chemically identical. The difference can only be seen when situational depression ends.
The best way to figure out which you've got is to go to a 12 step program, assess and resolve your issues by progressing through at least step 5, and see if you've still got depression.
I'm not Regi.
lol ye becuz were so hardcore here on dis website for mean people
It's not "4chan" triggering me, it's someone's ignorance.
If you've got depression, you're not motivated enough to go through any steps that require effort. Not because you don't want to or because you're too lazy, it's just because you have no motivation to do anything.
Your "appropriate treatments" are drugs with serious side effects and worthless talks with a psychologist because nobody has any idea how to properly treat depression.
>If you've got depression, you're not motivated enough to go through any steps that require effort.
That doesn't mean than the situation is permanent, just that you are in a state that stops you from terminating it.
It isn't a
situation, but a
>SET Depr = 1
>IF Depr = 1 THEN goto A
situation. Very diferent things.
Oh my! Two terribly complex and situational sciences that greatly depend in the subject, psychology and farmacology, can't fix the problem in five minutes! The horror, the horror!
>That doesn't mean than the situation is permanent, just that you are in a state that stops you from terminating it.
I'm saying you CAN'T terminate it.
>Two terribly complex and situational sciences that greatly depend in the subject, psychology and farmacology, can't fix the problem in five minutes! The horror, the horror!
Not "can't fix the problem in five minutes", it's can't fix the problem at all. Do you even know anyone with clinical depression? Because I do. Antidepressants don't make you happy, they just give you enough energy to move your ass, and they fuck your organism over in the process. The entire treatment is absolutely worthless because nobody knows how depression actually works.
Also psychology isn't technically science.
You know, over time one realizes (Or should, at least) that when you say "Actually" or "Technically", you are just being petty 90% of the time.
>Not "can't fix the problem in five minutes", it's can't fix the problem at all
And I know farmacologists, and do you want to know something?
If a farmacologist really took the effort, most of those things can be solved.
Thing is, "The effort" is a fucking huge effort, because farmacology is a very complex science even if you don't take into account all the situational conditions, and the necesary medicine often has a price too high for the customer. So farmacologists, to avoid a workload that should be shared between several profesionals, just go for the traditional approach, which is giving medicine that fucks with the patient until they find the one that fucks over them the less and is within their budget. It isn't evilness or pettiness, is a kind of distancing and pragmatism that you need when working with the life of people.
That our knowledge of the body is limited? Yes, but not as much as a lot people believes.
I'm just correcting you, I myself have learned that in this very thread so I might as well tell you just so the next guy you argue with won't ridicule you to avoid a topic.
I know it's not their fault, I know it's not impossible and I know they don't mean to hurt anyone, but the truth is, it's better not to take antidepressants until more reliable treatment is developed, unless you're willing to risk the side effects.
Hey, if you want to talk about something, feel free to start the discussion.
>until more reliable treatment is developed
The only thing I can think off being fully reliable would be brain programming, and if brain programming is developed within my lifetime I'll escape from society in general. Too creepy.
In Murky Nº 7, gore is generally well used.
That is, used once per twenty chapters or so.
What the hell does GDocs have against the word 'stare'?
Every single time I've used that word, it automatically changes it to 'started'.
"Oh, look at me. I'm Google. Since I'm now used as a verb, I discriminate against other verbs."
>Using a platform were you have to jump through hoops to get your files in your computer
>Not just using libreoffice and being able to edit your own files without giving a fuck about your internet connection
Look, I don't even have to start with the botnet thing to prove that GDocs is shit. Just use some file syncing program like mega to have the files backuped and synced, and if you give a fuck about privacy a 7z file's encription is basically unbreakable to anything but brute force attacks.
it was right the first time. Druggos who live on farms. mass quantities of llello will cure everyones problems, including depression.
thats not being ironic, thats just being stupid
its easy to understand why everyones is depressed once you learn what they think is passable fiction
This post is a piece of art, definitely.
Just look at it. For a first it has that particular condescending /lit/ pestilence to it, that general air of "I am being clever, only in ways you don't get", that you learn to recognize as the same that pervades /b/ and /v/ in diferent forms.
For a second, it has the "You are a idiot" element, which playfuly fools with the "And I am not an idiot" element like a preacher with his little cherubs. As a last, it tries to disguise itself as ironically idiotic by forgetting basic punctuation, such as writing thats instead of that's.
Stale memes. You can do better, champion! You can be an hero!
Your question is dumb, so instead here is the lowest-rated fic I've read that I at least somewhat enjoyed:
I.D. - That Indestructible Something (2.6:1 vote ratio)
And another that I liked:
A White Mare (8.4:1)
(Note: not the same as "The White Mare")
That doesn't mater much. What matters is the power of the character relative to other characters. He should still have a challenge, no matter what, which is why a lot of fics nerf Twilight in some way or another.
>tfw you finally get inspiration in a drunken stupor but mein kampf, WoT Thunder, your 50 GB lewd folder and everything else starts calling you
We haven't really seen proof her doing is impossible for other older and specialized unicorn, and she was on-par with one of said unicorns during a fight.
Quick question, what do you consider Glimmer's age to be? I don't know why, but I'm going towards the late 30s-early 40s
>bmc #1, ch. 6-10
Luna and Scrivy are on a mission to retrieve some artifacts from the old Everfree castle for Celestia. Upon arrival, they're attacked by four Nightmare spirits that offer the usual "vast cosmic power" and so on. (Our pure and virtuous heroes are not tempted in the least, of course.) Luna destroys them all, though one somehow manages to hide for a bit inside Scrivy's memories, so they have an excuse to look at Scrivy's unbelievably tragic backstory:
>parents beat him
>lock him in a literal doghouse when he misbehaves
>make him sleep outside like a proper mudpone slave
Afterward, Luna and Scrivy spend a day with Twilight and friends. Literally everyone knows that they're in love, but they still haven't said anything to each other. Eventually they go deliver the artifacts to Celestia.
Then we get to Chapter 9.
>Scrivy is missing
>Luna goes to ask Celestia what's up
>Celestia's decked out in her old battle armor, with the Elements of Harmony forged into the helm
>Celestia monologues for a bit
>she's had visions of Ragnarok
>Equestria needs to go to war or her ponies will be too weak to survive
>also, mud pones = worst pones
>Luna and Twilight think that's a load of shit, so Celestia tries to kill them
>she also tries to kill Scrivy, who she's brought to use as leverage
>Luna returns to NMM form (but not evil, mmkay, just misunderstood) and the two fight in mid-air
>Luna wins by stabbing Celestia in the chest, and smashes the elements
>suddenly, Celestia realizes that she was totally wrong! friendship and harmony is 100% the way to go
>rather than let Celestia take the blame for her bullshit, Luna announces to the public she's gone evil again, and then runs off to hide in the woods making out with Scrivy (who she magically cured and maybe made immortal)
>the end (of book 1)
I thought we were headed for your standard Empire/Rebellion storyline, but I think this outcome is actually even worse!
Progress: 76585 words, or 1.72% of the series
Yeah, you'd have expected her to have carried on in life and get to stuff a few years after his incest brother had gone away.
I can just hope for some writers to make her more rounded than just "hurr durr muh frund went on his predicted destiny but I can't let him go because I'm a special snowflake"
Speaking of it, any non-ship/punishment fics rounding her up? Fics in the writing are okay too.
I kind of think there's a lesson about characterization to be learned from comparing Cadence and Glimmer.
Cadence sucked when she came out, she was quite possibly the worst thing about ACW. Where the fuck did she come from? Who the fuck was she? The problem about her appearing suddenly and out of nowhere was that she came in a very central spot, but also because people didn't like the possibilities in Cadence's unknown sides and history. Her existence represented what a lot of people didn't like. She still isn't much liked in the fandom, honestly.
Glimmer was the other way around. Most, and that's what I'll be working with here, people liked her when she came out. Was it because her episodes were that much better than Cadence's episodes? Not really.
It was partially because Glimmer was inserted in a more peripheral area, but mostly because people liked the possibilities she opened up for. We didn't know any more about Glimmer than about Cadence, but Glimmer's existence and her unknown sides and history opened up for a lot of cool possibilities. Why did she do what she did? What would she amount to? A lot of questions like that.
Chrysalis/Changelings is a bit like that too, in that the existence of Changelings opens for so many good possibilities, hence they became prevalent in fan works.
>get inspiration in a drunken stupor but mein kampf, WoT Thunder, your 50 GB lewd folder
Hell someof the best fics ever written were inspired by mein kampf, WoT and lewd.
use your drunken inspiration to write a lewd, kampfy fic with tanks and jets :^)
But then something happened. Cadence was fleshed out, not in the sense that we got to know more about her past or history, but we got to know her a little better as a character. And that probably helped dampen a lot of people's dislike for her. The increased exploration of Cadence mostly worked.
But when it was time to expand on Glimmer, the result was so laughably bad that it legitimately ruined her character. The thing people liked the most about her was the possibilities her character allowed, but when the show gave her such a bad motivation, you ruin all the work you can build with further.
What can you learn from this?
That you shouldn't trust new characters into the middle of the story. That you should design your characters in such a way that people want to know more, that they find the potential in their unknown past or future interesting. And that you should never hint at something being really good (Glimmer gave a lot of people the idea that her backstory HAD to be good) without being able to actually provide that. And perhaps that some things are better left to the reader's imagination, which will probably overgo anything you will actually be able to pull off. It's really just about setting the stage so that the audience can ask the good questions, and let them find their own answers. That's kind of what engrosses someone in a world or story.
Nah man, it's totally about them saving the world from Ragnarok.
Though I did notice some of the later fics are rated mature. Not sure if that's for sex or for gore though.
AAG didn't kill me, 7DSJ didn't kill me, I don't think Blooming Moon will kill me either.
What, you don't think it's reasonable for Celestia to suddenly turn evil and then suddenly turn not-evil? Plus, Luna spends the whole time moping and talking in Ye Olde Englishe! What could be more in-character than that?
By the way, the olde english is probably my single least favorite thing about this story. The author is just replacing every "you" and "your" with one of "thou", "thee", or "thy", apparently selected at random.
>AAG didn't kill me, 7DSJ didn't kill me, I don't think Blooming Moon will kill me either.
AAG and 7DSJ, as retarded as they may be, have a fanbase. anything with an existing fanbase cant have fatal levels of toxicity.
But no one talks about bmc. there is no
>Though I did notice some of the later fics are rated mature. Not sure if that's for sex or for gore though.
>moonrise [E] [adventure] [romance
>lunar lights [T] [adventure] [romance] [AU]
>starlit knights [T] [gore] [adventure] [AU] [dark] [romance] [tragedy]
>metemphycosis [T] [gore] [adventure] [AU] [dark] [romance]
>because love conquers all [M] [gore] [adventure][AU] [dark] [romance][tragedy]
>decretum [T] [gore] [adventure] [AU][dark][romance]
>absolution [T] [gore] [adventure] [AU] [dark]
>synthesis of the athiest [T] [adventure] [AU] [dark]
>the hermits tale [T] [AU]
>glory be [T] [adventure] [AU] [dark]
that is a clusterfuck of tags, though not the worst combinations I've ever seen. seems like its mostly dark, gory romantic adventure. with a hint of tragedy thrown in. sadly no sex tag
I wouldn't say it's a bad idea. Maybe a bit ambitious.
I do. Not that canon will ever actually clarify it.
>was david bowie blooming moon anon?
>he contracted liver cancer after reading it
>linking to Reddit on 4chan
Shiggy Diggy Doo, where are you?
Depression, noun: (1) a state of feeling sad; (2) a psychoneurotic or psychotic disorder marked especially by sadness, inactivity, difficulty in thinking and concentration, a significant increase or decrease in appetite and time spent sleeping, feelings of dejection and hopelessness, and sometimes suicidal tendencies
Sorry, but I'll defer to Webster's over some random Reddit post.
They've both been used in the show.
According to my favorites, The Conversion Bureau: Landfall (http://www.fimfiction.net/story/104200/the-conversion-bureau-landfall) is the worst rated fic I unironically enjoyed. [spoiler[If memory serves, the Anthro tag's due to him slowly transforming into a pony.[/spoiler]
If you make the OC the story's villain, they can be insanely overpowered.
Same reason she didn't just teleport to the surface in the Halloween episode and why the princesses are constantly BTFO--because it would ruin the plot.
I used to like that fanfic because of its huge worldbuilding and actual interesting OC's + at the start you don't know shit about what is going on. It had problems sure, but it tried to be all about Rainbow Dash
trying to move on from the mane six dying.And then by the end of book 6 the author basically went "nope, fuck that", made Dash leave the Noble Jury crew, and even worse, brought back the mane six in ghost form, pretty much destroying the while point of it all
The one I like that a lot of people seem to hate is probably Romance Reports. It gets a ton of flak but the criticism all seems to be centered around MUH SHIPS, and since I read Like Fine Wine first, I knew going into it that
Twilight ended up with Cheerilee instead of Lunaso that didn't bother me at all.
Inverting the question is a fun exercise too but I always give the same answer, motherfucking "Beating the Heat." Kind of ironic given my above statement re: MUH SHIPS, but this one really sailed past that and straight into Spike-the-Butt-Monkey territory which has always pissed me off.
I just came here to tell you to never read "Misunderstandings" by the author Rogue "Faggot" Wolf. It's easily the worst fanfiction out there with an even worse ending. The author is a fucking lazy crybaby who needs to hang.
Had to look it up and yeah, I actually did read it. It's not that bad but I agree with you on the ending, it was total shit and the guy just gave up on it.
some minor plot point affecting the ending that he forgot to plant the seeds to. until the penultimate chapter, where he realized that the ending would be a total asspull from the far, far right field because he completely forgot about it
pity, because it actually was pretty decent until that point
I know the feeling, Anonymous. I know the feeling.
I still have to laugh at the end of unity pact
"Ok lets vote on the new laws for humantown. Show of hands, who is against abortion? OK great, thanks. Now show of hands, who is in favor of murdering tiny, defenseless babbys who are adorable and have never harmed anyone? Oh only the racist guy with the tattoo of hitler fucking mohammed on his forehead? great abortion is banned. what a glorious day for a fair and balanced democratic process"
I don't think I've ever seen one. The closest are the "NMM wins" AUs like Through A Glass, Darkly (http://www.fimfiction.net/story/124490/through-a-glass-darkly) or the evil!Twilight fics like Severing (http://www.ponyfictionarchive.net/viewstory.php?sid=364).
Hey guys, I need some help. I remember reading a story a few years back, and remember quite a few details, but can't seem to remember the name, or where to find it.
Celestia and Luna intend to pass on the rulership of Equestria to Twilight, so that they can die, and move on.
There is a scene where Celestia and Luna ask for Twilight to move the sun/moon. Once she does, she turns around, and see they've both aged immensely. They die a few minutes later.
There is an earlier scene where Celestia gets into an argument with Twilight, and her mane catches on fire, destroying something of importance. Luna talks to her afterwards, and convinces her that chasing after Twilight is a bad idea.
Help here is /really/ appreciated guys. I really want to read it again, and it's stuck in my head, but I can't seem to find it.
>What the fuck is the whole series about anyways?
Its one of those cool ideas attempted by a moron
Basically a college dorm gets Final Countdown'd into equestria, but instead of showing up on an advanced warship they show up naked and empty handed. language barrier prevents communication. the self insert-y main character gets attacked by a random pony and thankfully spends most of the first book in a coma. clashes happen, ponies kill a few humans, humans kill a few ponies, yadda, yadda
later books have even more groups of humans popping up.
like i said at its core its an interesting idea, since most HiEs only feature one human- Selfinsert McBangmaiwaifu. I think fics that involve a bunch of humans and ponies (that isnt a TCB fic) are interesting, but theyre so damn rare
Oh yeah, I remember that now. Bunch of idiot college students and idiot guardsponies running around in the woods, getting in fights and killing each other because each and every character is a complete fucking retard.
I've realized something about HiE, or what little I've read of it. The human-pony dynamic is all wrong.
What I see a lot of HiE do is make the human the interesting or foreign character, while Equestria often gets made very safe and familiar. What I mean is that humans are usually given some special trait, like the fucking retarded immunity to magic that I see all the time, or any other features like that, and the focus is often on the ponies' interest in the human, not the other way around. We're reading about a human, "one of us" and very likely a stand-in for ourselves, coming to a magical fantasyland. But instead of being about the familiar human exploring alien horseland, horseland is made familiar to explore an "alien" human. Aside from being kind of narcissistic, that sort of dynamic shouldn't be right.
Am I way off mark here (I read little HiE), or is my impression correct?
I think shitty HIEs are exactly like you describe. I don't want to read about ponies going "omg what's that glowy box thing? omg it plays music?? omg you can talk to anyone in the whole world???" because I already know what a fucking cell phone is and so does the main character (also, I really don't care what edgy bands the author likes the best). In good HiEs, that is, ones where the human has problems beyond "become the 7th element and defeat Chrysombirek", at least the reader has to wonder whether the clueless MC will manage to figure out such-and-such aspect of horseland in time, and sometimes the reader is equally clueless if the author's gotten creative with the worldbuilding.
The focus tends to build towards how human world is and how special they are. Which is why so many HiE's are also self insert shit, but that's not to say pony and world building HiE focused shit isn't bad as well, you get shit like klingon griffons, seventh element, fugging ponies, help defeat x villain and all amount of crazy fuckery. My favorite HiE's tend to treat the reader like they do the human and we get to watch how the world unfolds.
What's the best way to avoid talking head syndrome when you need to dump a lot of exposition and dialogue onto the reader? I feel like explaining the characters expressions as they speak becomes rather repetitive after a while.
I don't know the story, but I can give some suggestions for finding it.
If you know which website it is hosted on fimfiction, pastebin, an /mlp/ archiver, etc, you can use site:blah.com on Google to restrict results to a specific domain.
Then, if you remember some unusual / rare / distinguishing words or phrases that will appear on a single page (as in, not split across chapters on fimfiction) you can pretty often find what you are looking for.
For instance, I remember a story where Twilight discovers one of her friends is a changeling, but in the end, when she casts a spell to reveal who, she closes her eyes so she doesn't find out, as do all her friends. The story leaves it ambiguous who it was. I know the story was hosted on FimFiction, and I'm pretty sure the exact words "doesn't matter" were used (as in, "it doesn't matter who the changeling is").
Searching (on Google)
site:fimfiction.net twilight changeling close eyes "doesn't matter"
The story I was looking for is on the first page of results: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/38135/1/who-we-are/chapter-1
It might take a while to find the right search terms, especially if you are mistaken about some of them, but if you know Google has what you are looking for indexed, you can usually find it.
I tried, but couldn't find it. If you could provide some more info, such as whether Twi became an alicorn or some unique keywords, I might have better luck.
I'd say you're a little off the mark. We already know about Equestria and the world of pony through the show, so having ten chapters of a human character leaning about stuff the reader's already well aware of (what's this Winter Wrap Up? How was Equestria founded? Who's Celestia?) makes for a boring story.
I can really only see that working if the story's tightly centered on the human character and the plot's not about him exploring the magical fantasy world but is more a character piece dealing with his struggles in a foreign environment.
Instead of packing descriptions into one or two paragraphs, spread them out over the course of the scene. If the characters are walking, explore the scenery and setting as they talk. If they're sitting, paint that mental picture of the room they're in while they talk.
Do you say "March 15th" or "the 15th of March"?
Why are you still writing bad crackfics instead of trying to nail down the characterization? I really do want you to write engaging stories that entertain, but Islam/DBZ is never going to do that.
If you're not going to try and improve your abilities and just keep on wasting hours and hours writing this kind of crap, it really is better to invest that time doing something more enjoyable like watching Youtube videos or debating guns/swords in the thread.
I believe it's a reasonably long story with a number of chapters, so 10k+ words wouldn't be surprising.
I could have /sworn/ the phrase "Eternal Herd" was used by Celestia and Luna, but I can't seem to get any use out of that, which makes me fear it might have been removed.
The chapters each had "real" names (Not Chapter 1, Chapter 2, etc). I believe that, after the princesses died, there was either a wedding or a coronation, although I can't remember precisely.
I also want to say that the cover art involved a profile angle picture of Twilight in her coronation outfit, although it's possible I'm wrong, or it has been changed.
I know this is a needle in a haystack situation, but your help really is appreciated. If you know any other forums, etc I could go to for help that would be appreciated. I've tried their IRC, but it's pretty much dead.
It just popped into my mind, so it might be wrong, but it sounds familiar.
I think Fluttershy dies in the story. I believe she's bitten by a snake, and Twilight tries to save her, but the venom is immune to direct magical influence, so she can't save her.
I FOUND IT!!!!!!!
The Last Equestrian Princess
Thanks for the help
I was already trying those methods, but at fact you at least offered assistance means a lot!
I post an image, you make a story description.
Pic related, what story would this go with?
I can recommend this as the funniest comedy I've read on fimfic, one of the rare things that left me breathless and my chest hurting from laughing too much.
I hope you get better, you faggot.
I can think of Project Sunflower which is exactly the contrary of that, and that's why I loved it.
There was always the element of mystery and human discovery that kept me reading just one more chapter till sunrise o'clock.
You're welcome, even though I didn't really help much.
It's gotta be evil!Twilgiht due to that face. I'd say something like:
>Dreams are an enigma. Just ask Princess Luna. They can mean so much, or so little. They can be happy or sad. They can be realistic or absurd. They can dive deep into one's mind and influence and shape that person's thoughts and actions.
>And Twilight has just figured out how to do that very thing.
>no spoilered Carlos image
>last updated 12-28-2014
get my hopes up over nothing, fucker
>I'd say you're a little off the mark. We already know about Equestria and the world of pony through the show, so having ten chapters of a human character leaning about stuff the reader's already well aware of (what's this Winter Wrap Up? How was Equestria founded? Who's Celestia?) makes for a boring story.
heres where that little thing called creativity comes in. You know all that shit that anyone reading your horsefic should already know? gloss over it. Timeskip from the start of the explanation to the end of it, etc. then go into detail about non-autistic original content
I wrote a thing you can check and stuff (it is not relavant to the prompt tho, sorry boys)
I think fanfiction writers depictions of applejacks accent have gone past the bastardization of the language and gone to straight up murdering it
Then somewhere in my head twahlat turned into toilet.
Thus the idea of The Adventures of Toilet Sparkle, Protege of Custodia formed unbidden in my mind.
Is there enough toilet humor in horsewords?
'cause this could totally be a thing. might even be a new fad. form its own verse
DD/MM/YY is objetivily superior
>The most important part is at first
>The year is reduced to strictly necesary numbers, the decade and year. Century and millenium can be guessed from context
For some reason, I woke up with a mighty need to do this.
"The Witch of the Everfree"
AU. Sunset Shimmer gets the boot, but never gets a chance to go through the mirror. Instead she stays in Equestria, trying to avoid Celestia as best she can.
The story itself is SoL, and the pacing is good - it hits the important points in Sunset's life, and skips over all the irrelevant details in between. I mostly liked the characterization too (the author certainly handled pre-reformation Shimmy better than the last fic I read). My main complaint is the ending, which I found kind of dull, being
a rehash of about 3/4 of Mare in the Moon.
One vastly underused and under appreciated method I've found in literature is through song, poem or other culture methods that convey exposition succinctly, believable in settings and in a way that doesn't annoying readers.
I always like to use lord of the rings as an example. Tolkien was a genius at it, in Fellowship there's a section during the Council of Elrond where Bilbo sings a rather long song that conveys an enormous amount of information and background about Elrond and Aragorn. If he'd tried to do it through simple exposition it would have taken a great deal longer.
Not that you need to create songs, but consider ways to show, not tell culture that goes with providing the information an audience needs. Rowling only vaguely alluded to the bad stuff Voldemort did, but she shows everything you need to know about it because none of the characters are willing to even say his name.