I want some fucking honest to god, brutal criticism on my vi

>>16763015
Pretty good man, made me feel a bit but its good.

I'll watch it and leave a comment with every criticism I can imagine there.

>Took Film I - III in high school
>kicked ass, won best short film in district (texasfag)

>red letters on black background
>thin and small letters
>thin red letters over moving video

>>16763015
I was a little confused by the story progression.
So-- the birthday kid is the one who got hit by the car? Or was it the girl?

>>16763015

Very well produced, excellent perspective and effects overall. I found that some of the transitions could've been a little crispier (there was only like 2 or 3) but my main criticism was that as someone who doesn't know anything about the context or the project, as an outsider, I don't know what the fuck the film was supposed to be about really. I just seen a girl get run over by a truck then it transitions to her in the forest, and then the grave is of her little brother. Also the ending visuals with the home video was a great visual. However, I just don't know what the video was supposed to be about, and the ending didn't do a good job of summarizing the main idea and hitting home a powerful message. None the less well done and goodluck

>>16763047
This anon here.

I've watched your film the standard twice for review and I have a lot to say about it, both good and bad.

Do you want:
>comment on jewtube
>copypasta to this thread
>jewtube video response, I need to post something anyway

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>>16763131
Just tell me here thanks.

>>16763131
You there?

>>16763140
>>16763170
I'm here, why did you make the video private?

>>16763192
Sorry that was one of the girls in the video. They didn't want the video to get that much attention.

Sorry mate.

>>16763194
I have a rant but I would like the source video to cite when these things occured

>>16763015

this video is private.

I'd love to help you but it's private you fag

>>16763210


Mate even general feedback is fine. Fuck, I'd liek to hear that rant too (no need to cite).